The Heir Apparent
Viewing comments for Chapter 5 "Mr. Hurley"A family learns their father is a serial killer
25 total reviews
Comment from words
Another compelling chapter, Sasha.
I see that I am a bit behind and have some catching up to do. So, I will go back now and get up to speed.
You will be seeing a lot of reviews from me. LOL
Hugs,d
reply by the author on 02-Jul-2012
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Another compelling chapter, Sasha.
I see that I am a bit behind and have some catching up to do. So, I will go back now and get up to speed.
You will be seeing a lot of reviews from me. LOL
Hugs,d
Comment Written 02-Jul-2012
reply by the author on 02-Jul-2012
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I am so pleased you feel the need to go back and catch up. Fortunately this is a pretty fast read.
Comment from mmayen
Gosh. This is more than I can take. Your are a great author believe me. I just had to stop and tell you my mind before continuing because I don't think I'll have the patience to make the reviews. Wow!
reply by the author on 09-Mar-2012
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Gosh. This is more than I can take. Your are a great author believe me. I just had to stop and tell you my mind before continuing because I don't think I'll have the patience to make the reviews. Wow!
Comment Written 09-Mar-2012
reply by the author on 09-Mar-2012
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Thanks. This is a very deep and involved story. I am so pleased you felt this chapter deserved 6 stars. I sincerely appreciate it.
Comment from Kathryn Varuzza
Hello,
Great chapter.
Good dialogue.
I like your descriptions.
I like how you weave in a little humor throughout.
Heavy stuff.
You are great at getting the reader to experience the emotions of the characters.
katie
reply by the author on 07-Feb-2012
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Hello,
Great chapter.
Good dialogue.
I like your descriptions.
I like how you weave in a little humor throughout.
Heavy stuff.
You are great at getting the reader to experience the emotions of the characters.
katie
Comment Written 07-Feb-2012
reply by the author on 07-Feb-2012
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Thank you. I am so pleased you like how I am writing this.
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You're welcome. I think you are an excellent writer. :)
Comment from psalmist
I could really get into this family's pain, you did such a great job bringing out the strong emotions. Although not nearly as horrible, I remember how I felt when my first husband told me he was having an affair. How unreal it felt, the anger, betrayal, wanting it not to be true. You really brought all this out here. They have a long way to go, but I hope they will be able to heal. Well done. Linda
reply by the author on 07-Feb-2012
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I could really get into this family's pain, you did such a great job bringing out the strong emotions. Although not nearly as horrible, I remember how I felt when my first husband told me he was having an affair. How unreal it felt, the anger, betrayal, wanting it not to be true. You really brought all this out here. They have a long way to go, but I hope they will be able to heal. Well done. Linda
Comment Written 07-Feb-2012
reply by the author on 07-Feb-2012
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Writing this in first person limits me to only conveying Jame's feeling and observations he has of his family's emotions. I am so pleased you liked this one.
Comment from Readywriter52
James clearly feels guilty about turning his father into the police. He didn't under estimates how upset his family would be. They have a hard time accepting his guilt. They still want to see him as the perfect husband and father. He wasn't as James as indicated.
reply by the author on 07-Feb-2012
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James clearly feels guilty about turning his father into the police. He didn't under estimates how upset his family would be. They have a hard time accepting his guilt. They still want to see him as the perfect husband and father. He wasn't as James as indicated.
Comment Written 07-Feb-2012
reply by the author on 07-Feb-2012
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Thank you for your thorough and accurate critique.
Comment from Margaret Snowdon
What shock, what utter
devastation this family
must feel... just hard
to grasp and make any
sense of it.
already convicted him[,](;) no one will tell
Margaret
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2012
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What shock, what utter
devastation this family
must feel... just hard
to grasp and make any
sense of it.
already convicted him[,](;) no one will tell
Margaret
Comment Written 06-Feb-2012
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2012
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Thank you for catching the spag. Even though I am writing this, I must admit I also find it difficiult to truly imagine what it must be like to experience something so horrific.
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When I hit the next chapters, I've already reviewed them, so it won't let me do so again.... (just telling you this so you won't think I'm skipping them) Margaret
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I haven't posted any new ones since chapter 5, Mr. Hurley. The ones that I've left are still waiting to be revised.
Comment from Showboat
Excellent chapter, Sasha. I didn't see a thing to change or adjust.
Your portrayal of the kids was excellent, each of them reacting in their own personal way. Very good. Well, that's enough. I'm off for more.
Your writing has improved over the years and is now polished like a fine diamond. You go, girl.
Hugs,
Gayle
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2012
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Excellent chapter, Sasha. I didn't see a thing to change or adjust.
Your portrayal of the kids was excellent, each of them reacting in their own personal way. Very good. Well, that's enough. I'm off for more.
Your writing has improved over the years and is now polished like a fine diamond. You go, girl.
Hugs,
Gayle
Comment Written 06-Feb-2012
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2012
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Thank you so much. I am pleased you like this one.
Comment from CALLAHANMR
Hi Valerie;0
This chapter provides a good look at the reason a good lawyer is needed when a family comes under media scrutiny. Mr Hurley seems to take control of the situation by keeping the family away from reporters and explaining that he must be present any time they talk to any outsiders including the police.
Mr Hurley appears to have their complete welfare in mind as he makes sure they have food and drink in their hotel suite. He seems to understand thier needs better than the therapist the police provided. A bad therapist is worse than no therapist at all as James realizes. Even Mac responds to James' question, "Is she really the best you guys can do?" with one word, "Probably."
In his internal dialog James demonstrates that he understands the family situation unusually well.
Great chapter.
Love and Irish hugs,
Roger
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2012
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Hi Valerie;0
This chapter provides a good look at the reason a good lawyer is needed when a family comes under media scrutiny. Mr Hurley seems to take control of the situation by keeping the family away from reporters and explaining that he must be present any time they talk to any outsiders including the police.
Mr Hurley appears to have their complete welfare in mind as he makes sure they have food and drink in their hotel suite. He seems to understand thier needs better than the therapist the police provided. A bad therapist is worse than no therapist at all as James realizes. Even Mac responds to James' question, "Is she really the best you guys can do?" with one word, "Probably."
In his internal dialog James demonstrates that he understands the family situation unusually well.
Great chapter.
Love and Irish hugs,
Roger
Comment Written 06-Feb-2012
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2012
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Thanks. I am so pleased you liked this chapter. I had to do a lot of research into attorneys and learned a lot.
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Only a few attorneys can or will give theit clients all the special help they need. Mr. Hurley is a rarity
Roger
Comment from Alaskastory
'Mr. Hurley' is a chapter you've given new detail to. Your description of Mom's action seems more complete and so is Charlie's verbal reaction to the attorney. In the parts you have elaborated on, I see even more quality in this fine novel, Sasha.
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2012
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'Mr. Hurley' is a chapter you've given new detail to. Your description of Mom's action seems more complete and so is Charlie's verbal reaction to the attorney. In the parts you have elaborated on, I see even more quality in this fine novel, Sasha.
Comment Written 06-Feb-2012
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2012
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Thank you. I appreciate your generous review and continued interest in this story.
Comment from Veronica Grace
what a terrible thing the family endures. Your chapter was well written and enjoyable to read. I saw nothing to change or crit. I like the characters and dialogue.
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2012
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what a terrible thing the family endures. Your chapter was well written and enjoyable to read. I saw nothing to change or crit. I like the characters and dialogue.
Comment Written 05-Feb-2012
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2012
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Thank you. I appreciate your generous review and continued interest in this story.
