The Poet`s Life
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Comment from poetbear
The muses sing and then the paper calls to us.
If we don't make love to it than we are not true poets.
I visited Walden Pond and touched Thoureaus's desk.
I was moved and wote my heart out.
I love this!!
reply by the author on 29-Jan-2014
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The muses sing and then the paper calls to us.
If we don't make love to it than we are not true poets.
I visited Walden Pond and touched Thoureaus's desk.
I was moved and wote my heart out.
I love this!!
Comment Written 28-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 29-Jan-2014
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Many thanks poetbear I am glad that people can read this and relate to it as I have had it called boring ... although that is from the less discerning readers.
Comment from mermaids
I like the line about being bathed in gin. It is true, feast or famine for us poets, the words flow like a river or are stuck in our head. Again you capture the poet's life in vivid descriptive images.
reply by the author on 05-Jan-2013
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I like the line about being bathed in gin. It is true, feast or famine for us poets, the words flow like a river or are stuck in our head. Again you capture the poet's life in vivid descriptive images.
Comment Written 05-Jan-2013
reply by the author on 05-Jan-2013
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Glad you could see the picture unfold, this is not just about rhyme and meter as some nut points out ...
Comment from Bobbi22
Another great chapter in this mysterious life of a poet. Great imagery and metaphors and the hook that makes me wanting more. So therefore I will go and read chapter four. Great job.
reply by the author on 31-Jan-2012
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Another great chapter in this mysterious life of a poet. Great imagery and metaphors and the hook that makes me wanting more. So therefore I will go and read chapter four. Great job.
Comment Written 31-Jan-2012
reply by the author on 31-Jan-2012
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Excellent, nice rhyme pICS...
Comment from Dr. Marsh
Interesting idea for a poem. I think every writer--or at least those I've known--have suffered periods like the one you described in the poem. So it has a universality to which all of us can relate. It's well-organized, and, in effect, tells a story: problem, conflict, resolution.
Since I'm unacquainted with the rest of the book, I may be off-base with a critique, but I wondered why the inverse word order, e.g., "Persevere I will" instead of "I will persevere" There are many examples of this sort of thing in the poem. As I said, this critique may not apply, but I always favor "natural" language and syntax.
But overall, I liked the poem.
reply by the author on 31-Jan-2012
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Interesting idea for a poem. I think every writer--or at least those I've known--have suffered periods like the one you described in the poem. So it has a universality to which all of us can relate. It's well-organized, and, in effect, tells a story: problem, conflict, resolution.
Since I'm unacquainted with the rest of the book, I may be off-base with a critique, but I wondered why the inverse word order, e.g., "Persevere I will" instead of "I will persevere" There are many examples of this sort of thing in the poem. As I said, this critique may not apply, but I always favor "natural" language and syntax.
But overall, I liked the poem.
Comment Written 31-Jan-2012
reply by the author on 31-Jan-2012
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I dont really know why that is to me it gives more determination to the expression, but that is my personal bias...
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That's fine.
Comment from mumsyone
Sounds like a case of writer's block that isn't a block at all, since you have written this.
I'm confused by:
'An incantation call's poet's release.' Are you saying
'An incantation call is poet's release?' or
'An incantation calls poet's release'?
You and I,(no comma) see through poet's paper's eye.
reply by the author on 31-Jan-2012
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Sounds like a case of writer's block that isn't a block at all, since you have written this.
I'm confused by:
'An incantation call's poet's release.' Are you saying
'An incantation call is poet's release?' or
'An incantation calls poet's release'?
You and I,(no comma) see through poet's paper's eye.
Comment Written 31-Jan-2012
reply by the author on 31-Jan-2012
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your right on the second one, just getting used to the apostrophe business as Im not to good at it...let me know if you have it right and I will change it.
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You definitely need to remove the comma in the last line, as it stops the flow of that line and shouldn't be there.
As for the other line, are you wanting the line to say an incantation call is poet's release or an incantation calls poet's release? If the first, then the apostrophe is right in call's (call is); if the second, then the apostrophe needs to be removed (calls).
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Your right about the comma and I am right about the apostrophe...deal!
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Okay. Just wanted to make sure.
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No worries, thanks for the help...
Comment from Chris Tee
This is an awesome poem with a solid syllable count and is well penned indeed old sport.
Well done with this splendid work we have here old chap.
reply by the author on 31-Jan-2012
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This is an awesome poem with a solid syllable count and is well penned indeed old sport.
Well done with this splendid work we have here old chap.
Comment Written 31-Jan-2012
reply by the author on 31-Jan-2012
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Thanks old chap.
Comment from Janice Canerdy
Bathe in gin, huh? I'm enjoying the installments of your poem about poets. There is so much here I can relate to. First, I have writer's block; then my mind is flooded with so many thoughts that I can't manage them all. Good job!
reply by the author on 31-Jan-2012
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Bathe in gin, huh? I'm enjoying the installments of your poem about poets. There is so much here I can relate to. First, I have writer's block; then my mind is flooded with so many thoughts that I can't manage them all. Good job!
Comment Written 31-Jan-2012
reply by the author on 31-Jan-2012
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Excellent I suppose you could swap that for whatever beverage you prefer, perhaps tea if your like me...lol.
Comment from TammyGail
Damn it Bicpen I wasn't able to give you a six for either of these poems and so wished to do so. They were brilliant and cleverly written of writing awaiting of muse will she be nice or torment such things make me a drunken smoking poetess of hours late I force my muse out to play.. Loved these closing lines they were stellar
"Persevere I will, for my laurel rings;
For you and I will become poets strong.
Inside; words, metaphors, pictures and things:
You and I, see through poet's paper's eye."
Excellent work on this sweetie once again another fine read graced with beautiful imagery. Thanks for sharing it was a pleasure to bask in your verse.
reply by the author on 31-Jan-2012
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Damn it Bicpen I wasn't able to give you a six for either of these poems and so wished to do so. They were brilliant and cleverly written of writing awaiting of muse will she be nice or torment such things make me a drunken smoking poetess of hours late I force my muse out to play.. Loved these closing lines they were stellar
"Persevere I will, for my laurel rings;
For you and I will become poets strong.
Inside; words, metaphors, pictures and things:
You and I, see through poet's paper's eye."
Excellent work on this sweetie once again another fine read graced with beautiful imagery. Thanks for sharing it was a pleasure to bask in your verse.
Comment Written 31-Jan-2012
reply by the author on 31-Jan-2012
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Excellent Tammy, your the second one to choose that verse I like it the way it is with its determination and high possesion.
Know the feeling with the muse, as you know Johnny Cash does it for me every time...he`s a winner.
Comment from Razz
Persevere I will, for my laurel rings;
For you and I will become poets strong.
Inside; words, metaphors, pictures and things:
You and I, see through poet's paper's eye.
Very well done.
Nicely expressed.
Rhyme is perfectly on time.
Smooth as silk.
Great writing.
Razz
reply by the author on 31-Jan-2012
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Persevere I will, for my laurel rings;
For you and I will become poets strong.
Inside; words, metaphors, pictures and things:
You and I, see through poet's paper's eye.
Very well done.
Nicely expressed.
Rhyme is perfectly on time.
Smooth as silk.
Great writing.
Razz
Comment Written 31-Jan-2012
reply by the author on 31-Jan-2012
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Excellent Razz your a gem...
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You're welcome, Bic.
Your writing is a gem.
Razz
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Anytime...
Comment from Sherry Asbury
What a novel idea you have here. Each section is a life unto itself and then a part of another whole. I just plain like this...you have a great voice. You have shown us that writers sometimes fail once faced with a clean sheet of paper, or a computer screen - then you leave us the lovely, lovely image of seeing through the paper's eye. Very good stuff, Poet.
reply by the author on 31-Jan-2012
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What a novel idea you have here. Each section is a life unto itself and then a part of another whole. I just plain like this...you have a great voice. You have shown us that writers sometimes fail once faced with a clean sheet of paper, or a computer screen - then you leave us the lovely, lovely image of seeing through the paper's eye. Very good stuff, Poet.
Comment Written 31-Jan-2012
reply by the author on 31-Jan-2012
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That is this books purpose and I am hoping to deliver more on the story when I get round to it, narrative followed by poem, you get the jist...much appreciated.
