The Poet`s Life
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Comment from Dr. Marsh
Okay, now I am able to read the first part. Wish this one had come up first. Again, a good job--a poet's considering what is involved in writing a poem, how to learn or remember all these things and then how to put them altogether. Again, I like this a lot.
One minor point: Again it has to do with unnatural syntax: "does let him write" instead of "lets him write." But that's a very "picky" point. Overall, I think you did very well.
reply by the author on 31-Jan-2012
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Okay, now I am able to read the first part. Wish this one had come up first. Again, a good job--a poet's considering what is involved in writing a poem, how to learn or remember all these things and then how to put them altogether. Again, I like this a lot.
One minor point: Again it has to do with unnatural syntax: "does let him write" instead of "lets him write." But that's a very "picky" point. Overall, I think you did very well.
Comment Written 31-Jan-2012
reply by the author on 31-Jan-2012
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Thanks doc, the only real reson for that is because of the syllable count...you have to be very particular.
Comment from Denise S
I liked your poem, it was quite different. The rhymes were mixed in in a nice way and it flowed well. Good job
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I liked your poem, it was quite different. The rhymes were mixed in in a nice way and it flowed well. Good job
Comment Written 31-Jan-2012
reply by the author on 31-Jan-2012
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Many thanks Denise, much appreciated.
Comment from TammyGail
I loved this poem Bicpen :) It was excellent well thought out and written, creatively expressed. Loved these lines in your poem, how true they are indeed.
"He picks his form and structure: now the view,
Or picture he wishes to paint. His muse
Does let him write, or her, his lines begin."
Excellent classic and classy black and white slate as well as your lovely imagery. Thanks for sharing it was a pleasure to read and review, now off to part two :)
reply by the author on 31-Jan-2012
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I loved this poem Bicpen :) It was excellent well thought out and written, creatively expressed. Loved these lines in your poem, how true they are indeed.
"He picks his form and structure: now the view,
Or picture he wishes to paint. His muse
Does let him write, or her, his lines begin."
Excellent classic and classy black and white slate as well as your lovely imagery. Thanks for sharing it was a pleasure to read and review, now off to part two :)
Comment Written 31-Jan-2012
reply by the author on 31-Jan-2012
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Excellent T.
Ithink there was a touch of you and others in this one...lol. Thata poetry for you...
Comment from Janice Canerdy
Your poem effectively enumerates the questions and concerns that run through the poet's mind. I like the use of internal rhyme. Good job
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Your poem effectively enumerates the questions and concerns that run through the poet's mind. I like the use of internal rhyme. Good job
Comment Written 31-Jan-2012
reply by the author on 31-Jan-2012
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Excellent many thanks J.
Comment from Sherry Asbury
Very good - there is angst regarding all those poetic terms, pleasure at producing a product, and a very very personal message for other writers. Here is my favorite verse:
"Such, beholds he the magic rhyme; giving time,
This belongs in the line: a choice and voice.
I will build a stanza, I hear three fine:
Normative, quantative, variable."
It flows wonderfully and something about it is rousing. A very nice write, indeed.
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Very good - there is angst regarding all those poetic terms, pleasure at producing a product, and a very very personal message for other writers. Here is my favorite verse:
"Such, beholds he the magic rhyme; giving time,
This belongs in the line: a choice and voice.
I will build a stanza, I hear three fine:
Normative, quantative, variable."
It flows wonderfully and something about it is rousing. A very nice write, indeed.
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The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 31-Jan-2012
reply by the author on 31-Jan-2012
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I like that one too...in fact I klike them all but im bias, much appreciated sherry. I was experimenting with the book formulae and hoping it would work, more to come when I get round to it, many thanks.
