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Lonely Hearts Meet

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Anna and her son escape from a man-made Hell.

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Comment from NaughtieScribe
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Clearly Mrs. Rodgers and her bastard boy are behind this harassment. The more Anna gains control of her fear and life, the less than can bully and control her. Something every abuser fears. I hope they both rot in hell.

 Comment Written 03-Aug-2012


reply by the author on 04-Aug-2012
    Thank you.
Comment from DALLAS01
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Your last four paragraphs describe in detail exactly what it feels like to be always fearful and apprehensive, not knowing what to expect. It brought back a memory of an incident very similar to when I was getting a divorce and I always had to fear he was watching me from some secluded spot. One evening I too, found a note on my windshield that I had to find someone to translate as it was in his native tongue..He called me a (whore) in Hungarian. Didn't even know he was nearby.

 Comment Written 18-Feb-2012


reply by the author on 18-Feb-2012
    Thank you for your kind review and insight. I am trying to make this as realistic as possible and your comments help.
reply by DALLAS01 on 18-Feb-2012
    you're welcome
Comment from Helen Tan
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Hi Barbara, looks to me you and this story are doing well. I'm just popping in to catch up on your writing. This is a clean chapter, Anna and Troy are cementing their relationship but danger continues to lurk. She's right, she'll never be truly free, the emotional scars may subside with time but they will resurface when triggered.

I'll wait. I'm sure this is another form of harassment
A period needed at the end of harassment.

 Comment Written 11-Feb-2012


reply by the author on 12-Feb-2012
    Thank you for the kind review and eagle eye.
Comment from Carolyn Hilliard
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The advise you had Paul give Anna was excellent. It alone made this worth reading. I am always after women for not locking their car doors when they are alone in a car; for leaving their purses visible which invites trouble, and the ladies are "normal".

 Comment Written 01-Feb-2012


reply by the author on 04-Feb-2012
    Thank you for your kind review and support.
Comment from HPicasso
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You're still moving along at good clip Mrs. Barbara.
This is a great chapter where Anna is trying to move forward, make decisions and then finds her tire flattened. It is well written with a smooth flow of words. I hope she is safe waiting for Paul. Glad she is doing what Paul wants. Realistic characterizations and situations. Well done!

 Comment Written 01-Feb-2012


reply by the author on 04-Feb-2012
    Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from eliz100
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This was a good read from beginning to end. There is a good hook at the end which begs the question, "What happens next?" I'm curious about the note.

 Comment Written 01-Feb-2012


reply by the author on 04-Feb-2012
    Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from reconciled
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Very compelling read.You grab the readers attention and you keep it until the end.I'm guessing there was some trouble with her x-husband-can't wait to find out.God bless you-Michael.

 Comment Written 01-Feb-2012


reply by the author on 04-Feb-2012
    Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Veronica Grace
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Good dialogue. I want to know what it says on that paper! I did'nt see anything to change or crit in this chapter. I like the artwork you used for your chapter. The chains speak volumes.

 Comment Written 31-Jan-2012


reply by the author on 04-Feb-2012
    Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from keondae
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I enjoyed reading your work. Good flowing and smooth wording. Natural probable conversation between the two. The entry of harassment is good. Thank you for sharing.

 Comment Written 31-Jan-2012


reply by the author on 04-Feb-2012
    Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from ulster3
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Hello, Barbara.
I'm delighted that Anna did stop and not get out of the car. Their lunching has made me feel hungry, so I'm off to the kitchen. Thanks for this read.
Warmly, Rebecca

 Comment Written 31-Jan-2012


reply by the author on 04-Feb-2012
    Thank you for the kind review.