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The Red Dress

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The story of a teenage girl

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Comment from wordsfromsue
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What I said in my last review that got gobbled was.. no bunny boom tonight unless it's "I'm soory honey, I'm just a silly bunny".... ah.... young love. I'll take that hot cup of tea, thank you. :-)

Your book continues to engross me.... :-)

And I'm getting rich off of these reviews at 2 cents each. :-)

Wait For It.....

Bunny Money $$$$$££££££ :-)

 Comment Written 15-Feb-2012


reply by the author on 18-Feb-2012
    Now you've made me feel really guilty! Never mind. If, sorry, when I get this published, I promise to put members dollars into all my regular reviewers accounts. Honest! Thank you for yet another hilarious review. Alexis x
Comment from Gooloom
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Each chapter is standing on its own steam and your plot is shaping very well. Alexis, I envy you. I have tried my hand at story writing and ended up getting confused and more tangled up. You are teaching me how to go about it. Your story is so sweet so romantic and defies convention. Allan and Lisa are doing just that. They can't help it. Lets see what happens next. Gooloom

 Comment Written 29-Jan-2012


reply by the author on 30-Jan-2012
    I think you know now, or at least you probably think you do! Thank you for the wonderful compliment. I never thought I would be capable of teaching anyone, I am learning so much from all the wonderful reviewers who are following the story. Alexis x
Comment from G.B. Smith
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Hey Alexis
Well you put my fears to rest. She didn't do anything stupid and stupid realized that he was "stupid" As a man, I know how hard it is to swallow our pride and admit our wrongs. I am glad that he manned up. Keep writing, because you have a superb talent. You truly are a Word Smith
Bear

 Comment Written 29-Jan-2012


reply by the author on 29-Jan-2012
    You have a great way of putting things, Bear! Thank you so much for the wonderful compliment. I'm beginning to feel closer to being an author with every word. Alexis x
Comment from sweetwoodjax
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this is very well written as well, alexis, i'm catching up some today, my father in law was in hospice for four days and he passed away last night. i enjoyed reading this chapter.

 Comment Written 28-Jan-2012


reply by the author on 29-Jan-2012
    I am so sorry for your loss. Theses must be very trying times for you. Thank you so much for reading. I hope it gives you some distraction in such sad times. Alexis
Comment from LisaSilva
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Honestly, I haven't forgiven him yet. She needs to feel her power and be willing to walk away. She needs to know there are other kind people in the world that are not like her mother. She also needs to know she can live on her own and never depend on someone else like that again!

Thanks again for the great read!

 Comment Written 27-Jan-2012


reply by the author on 27-Jan-2012
    Lol! No, he is a good guy really. I'm afraid Lisa has quite a few trials and tribulations to get through yet, but she hopefully gets stronger with every one. Take care, Alexis x
Comment from Malerie
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Glad that all got cleared up, at least for moment. The part with Lisa losing hope after believing that the person she loved did not really love her is very realistic. She has lost her family and now she thought she had lost Alan; all hope was gone. I'm glad she was able to snap out of her glaze; another intriguing chapter; is this the end? I'm looking for more.

 Comment Written 27-Jan-2012


reply by the author on 27-Jan-2012
    Far from it, I'm afraid. In a sense the book is really just beginning! About another 30 fan story size chapters to go. I hope you'll be there for the journey because I really enjoy your reviews! Alexis x
Comment from axelbeariter
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upset him that night./That should read: upset him tonight.----Mike thought he had made himself perfectly clear.
"How many times do I have to fucking tell you, I have not seen Lisa!"/This is an example of the redundancies I talked about in the review of chapter 16. It's a subtle thing. Use one or the other, but not both----She still didn't speak, and Alan felt his eyes fill up with hot tears which mixed with the cold rain as he carried her back to the flat./Nice----Lisa was shivering uncontrollably. Use active voice. Lisa shivered uncontrollably.----They had obviously thawed out all by themselves..../Great. See, youbeariter!

 Comment Written 26-Jan-2012


reply by the author on 27-Jan-2012
    My apologies for taking so long to answer your reviews, but I always leave them till last so that I can take everything on board, and act upon it. Hopefully the two chapters I posted today will prove to you that I'm listening. Thank you so much, your imput means a great deal to me. Alexis x
Comment from rwilliam
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Excellent chapter!! The ending made me smile! Things are wrapped up nicely.

You have me so hooked, girl! I love the photo with this story. I look at it often. It's perfect!

Great work!

 Comment Written 26-Jan-2012


reply by the author on 26-Jan-2012
    You, my friend, have been on a marathon this evening. Your encouragement is wonderful. Thank you sooooo much! Alexis x
reply by rwilliam on 26-Jan-2012
    Hi! :-)I've missed reading your work and chatting with you. I find myself thinking about the story when I'm away and wondering what is happening. I was working on my novel and have been away from here for awhile. I hope to start putting up chapters in the near future. It's good to be back. Keep me posted on new chapters because I'm so into this story!! Have a nice evening.:-)
Comment from MumEsGirl
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Again excellent writing. Was wondering though if this would be better used as a conclusion to the previous chapter. they are both quite short.

I know the party will be one to watch so bring it on

kate

 Comment Written 26-Jan-2012


reply by the author on 26-Jan-2012
    You must not miss the party! It's got the works, plus some! Thank you so much for your wonderful encouraging reviews. Alexis x
Comment from AlexAX
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Very relieved they are back together, when he realized she was gone, I could feel the urgency and pain, you describe it so easily. Loved the ending "They had obviously thawed out all by themselves" made me chuckle :) You write so well and vividly. When this goes on sale in the shops I will be buying :)

 Comment Written 26-Jan-2012


reply by the author on 26-Jan-2012
    Thank you so much, Alex. I am having so much fun editing this and posting it on Fan story. It's almost as though it is becoming alive again through the readers eyes! Alexis x