Amongst The Shadows Of My Heart
a triolet44 total reviews
Comment from Crackerberries
This was a very sad and moving triolet, ...amongst the shadows of my hear...dwelling in the time that doesn't end... how sad. And that artwork with the flowers and the heart shaped lock, ouch... good luck with this one. I really think it's good.
reply by the author on 14-Apr-2012
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This was a very sad and moving triolet, ...amongst the shadows of my hear...dwelling in the time that doesn't end... how sad. And that artwork with the flowers and the heart shaped lock, ouch... good luck with this one. I really think it's good.
Comment Written 14-Apr-2012
reply by the author on 14-Apr-2012
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Thanks for an excellent review. I am quite grateful.
Comment from Donya Quijote
This is beautiful and sad. The poem aptly conveys the emotions of grief and loss. Its tone is sad but not overly depressing and imagery adds to the feeling. The picture is a nice touch lending the softness of its color to the poem's mood and the imagery of the lock (locked and unopened) and key to the theme of loss. It is simply beautiful.
reply by the author on 14-Apr-2012
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This is beautiful and sad. The poem aptly conveys the emotions of grief and loss. Its tone is sad but not overly depressing and imagery adds to the feeling. The picture is a nice touch lending the softness of its color to the poem's mood and the imagery of the lock (locked and unopened) and key to the theme of loss. It is simply beautiful.
Comment Written 14-Apr-2012
reply by the author on 14-Apr-2012
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Thank you for an excellent review. I am quite honored. I hope to see you in one of my classes soon!
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I hope to if the budget allows. And you are most welcome. I have read many of your posts and have enjoyed them immensely. I've only just begun to make comments here, a process which I still find intimidating.
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No worries. Every writer has to have a wide audience, so everyone's response is important.
Comment from mauial
A touching poem on the loss of a loved one. I love the imagery of the heart casting shadows, as if it could literally do that down deep in us. But it's symolism here is great.
reply by the author on 17-Feb-2012
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A touching poem on the loss of a loved one. I love the imagery of the heart casting shadows, as if it could literally do that down deep in us. But it's symolism here is great.
Comment Written 17-Feb-2012
reply by the author on 17-Feb-2012
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Thanks for a great review. I am quite appreciative.
Comment from Patti R.
Ooh! This is Beautiful. Perfect Triolet form. The grief, the longing comes through the words clearly. I find this form challenging, (but not as challenging as haiku!) and in my humble opinion you've written a gorgeous poem.
reply by the author on 17-Feb-2012
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Ooh! This is Beautiful. Perfect Triolet form. The grief, the longing comes through the words clearly. I find this form challenging, (but not as challenging as haiku!) and in my humble opinion you've written a gorgeous poem.
Comment Written 17-Feb-2012
reply by the author on 17-Feb-2012
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Yes, I know. I teach haiku here on this site, and it is much harder than triolets, which I occasionally teach. Thanks for a great review.
Comment from TammyGail
What a poem this was Alvin
I enjoyed the heartfelt read
Very touching word weaving indeed
Lovely imagery used alongside your verse
Thanks for sharing and good luck in the contest
reply by the author on 17-Feb-2012
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What a poem this was Alvin
I enjoyed the heartfelt read
Very touching word weaving indeed
Lovely imagery used alongside your verse
Thanks for sharing and good luck in the contest
Comment Written 17-Feb-2012
reply by the author on 17-Feb-2012
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Thanks for a great review. I am quite appreciative.
Comment from IndianaIrish
This is a stunning poem, Alvin ... it absolutely took my breath away. The emotions were felt deep within my heart. I'm so thrilled you took some time off to write...what a magnificent result. I've read it twenty times and each time it still strikes a chord within me.
Outstanding, poet!
Karyn :>)
reply by the author on 31-Jan-2012
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This is a stunning poem, Alvin ... it absolutely took my breath away. The emotions were felt deep within my heart. I'm so thrilled you took some time off to write...what a magnificent result. I've read it twenty times and each time it still strikes a chord within me.
Outstanding, poet!
Karyn :>)
Comment Written 31-Jan-2012
reply by the author on 31-Jan-2012
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Thanks, Karyn. It's been so long since I had the time to concentrate to write. It's amazing how much teaching consumes me, but the results have been specatular in what my students have accomplished. Now I am being a little self-indulgent and liking it. I have missed writing. Thanks for this extraordinary review.
Comment from AlexAX
Such a deeply moving poem. A definite sadness deep within, that it seems you will keep carrying with you. Good rhyming and I like the lines that repeat. Your picture goes well with the heart and key. Good luck! Alex :)
reply by the author on 27-Jan-2012
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Such a deeply moving poem. A definite sadness deep within, that it seems you will keep carrying with you. Good rhyming and I like the lines that repeat. Your picture goes well with the heart and key. Good luck! Alex :)
Comment Written 27-Jan-2012
reply by the author on 27-Jan-2012
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Thanks for a great review. I am quite appreciative.
Comment from Judian James
Where have you been??? I hope all is well with you. We haven't connected in months! I've missed your posts and your reviews as well. This is superb, wistfully superb
reply by the author on 27-Jan-2012
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Where have you been??? I hope all is well with you. We haven't connected in months! I've missed your posts and your reviews as well. This is superb, wistfully superb
Comment Written 27-Jan-2012
reply by the author on 27-Jan-2012
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Thanks for a great review. I have been teaching...I finally took some time off so I could write!
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I've misse you Al! Just yesterday and today I posted two haiku and thought of you because it is not my usual genre by any means. I do think you'd like my recent piece called "Fast Prayers" Take care!
Comment from sugardog
I am not at all familiar with triolets, but this is beautifully written. Sad. I like the willows and the shadows and I love the repeating line. Very well written. Good luck in your contest!! Dana
reply by the author on 27-Jan-2012
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I am not at all familiar with triolets, but this is beautifully written. Sad. I like the willows and the shadows and I love the repeating line. Very well written. Good luck in your contest!! Dana
Comment Written 26-Jan-2012
reply by the author on 27-Jan-2012
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Thanks for a great review; I am most appreciative.
Comment from amada
A very pensive triolet, its repeating lines adapt very well to the force of the thought, the phrase "you dwell in time that does not end" is haunting. It connects to the heart of the reader.
reply by the author on 27-Jan-2012
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A very pensive triolet, its repeating lines adapt very well to the force of the thought, the phrase "you dwell in time that does not end" is haunting. It connects to the heart of the reader.
Comment Written 26-Jan-2012
reply by the author on 27-Jan-2012
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Thanks for an excellent review; I am most appreciative.
