Amongst The Shadows Of My Heart
a triolet44 total reviews
Comment from poetbear
Great rhyme scheme and used brilliantly.
Makes sense and reads well.
Very romantic and refelctive in mood and pacing.
Love the image, imagery, and metaphor.
reply by the author on 28-Aug-2012
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Great rhyme scheme and used brilliantly.
Makes sense and reads well.
Very romantic and refelctive in mood and pacing.
Love the image, imagery, and metaphor.
Comment Written 24-Apr-2012
reply by the author on 28-Aug-2012
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Thanks for a great review.
Comment from Connie C
Congratulations, Alvin, on your placing in this contest with such a
touching and beautiful triolet. It is easy to feel the sorrow and loss
you express so aptly here. You truly are a wonderful poet.
Connie
reply by the author on 28-Aug-2012
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Congratulations, Alvin, on your placing in this contest with such a
touching and beautiful triolet. It is easy to feel the sorrow and loss
you express so aptly here. You truly are a wonderful poet.
Connie
Comment Written 22-Apr-2012
reply by the author on 28-Aug-2012
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You are far too kind, I fear.
Comment from whizpurr ^-^
Hello Alvin,
This is a truly beautiful poem. It so aptly expresses the deepest of feelings and does gracefully. I love the triolet form and the way it uses repitition for emphasis. Your remarkable poem does the format full justice.
Warm congrats on your win. Hugs, W ^-^
reply by the author on 28-Aug-2012
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Hello Alvin,
This is a truly beautiful poem. It so aptly expresses the deepest of feelings and does gracefully. I love the triolet form and the way it uses repitition for emphasis. Your remarkable poem does the format full justice.
Warm congrats on your win. Hugs, W ^-^
Comment Written 21-Apr-2012
reply by the author on 28-Aug-2012
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Thanks for the exceptional review and your kind words.
Comment from Writingfundimension
Congratulations on your top three finish with this beautiful poem, Alvin. It's absolutely heartbreaking in its beauty. You really are a wonderful poet! Warm regards, Bev
reply by the author on 28-Aug-2012
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Congratulations on your top three finish with this beautiful poem, Alvin. It's absolutely heartbreaking in its beauty. You really are a wonderful poet! Warm regards, Bev
Comment Written 21-Apr-2012
reply by the author on 28-Aug-2012
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Thanks for your kind words.
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You're welcome, Alvin.
Comment from MissMerri
Such a beautiful triolet. I loved every line of this poem, and every word. It had special meaning to me because of what we've been going through this week. A very good friend just lost her husband (he was my husband's best buddy) and she's been staying with us for a few days, getting ready for his memorial which is tomorrow. I know you no doubt had other thoughts in your mind when you wrote this, but the words were so meaningful to me and that's one of the things I love about poetry. It can mean something different to each reader, when you've used just the right words, which you obviously did here. Thanks for sharing and congratulations on the second place contest win too. Well deserved, for sure.
reply by the author on 28-Aug-2012
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Such a beautiful triolet. I loved every line of this poem, and every word. It had special meaning to me because of what we've been going through this week. A very good friend just lost her husband (he was my husband's best buddy) and she's been staying with us for a few days, getting ready for his memorial which is tomorrow. I know you no doubt had other thoughts in your mind when you wrote this, but the words were so meaningful to me and that's one of the things I love about poetry. It can mean something different to each reader, when you've used just the right words, which you obviously did here. Thanks for sharing and congratulations on the second place contest win too. Well deserved, for sure.
Comment Written 20-Apr-2012
reply by the author on 28-Aug-2012
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Thanks. You know how important the reader/heaerer is to me.
Comment from marilyo
Sad to say I like your poem - and will give you a six - even if you gave me a 2 before. Nice rhyming pattern and sweet flow. The refrain is most romantic. Congrats on your win.
reply by the author on 24-Apr-2012
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Sad to say I like your poem - and will give you a six - even if you gave me a 2 before. Nice rhyming pattern and sweet flow. The refrain is most romantic. Congrats on your win.
Comment Written 20-Apr-2012
reply by the author on 24-Apr-2012
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Thanks for an exceptional review; I am highly honored. Now about that two...Could I interest you in course on the Japanese forms? You already write religious poetry quite well (for which, if meory serves me, I gave you a five...)
Comment from MAMONIA
How very wonderful for you! Congrats
on a most beautiful and tender triolet.
You have surpassed the moment in time
that brings our memories to the surface
and dwell on what you will keep
in your memory forever.
This poem flows with a powerful message
and meaning beyond love.
Best of luck always, Marie
reply by the author on 28-Aug-2012
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How very wonderful for you! Congrats
on a most beautiful and tender triolet.
You have surpassed the moment in time
that brings our memories to the surface
and dwell on what you will keep
in your memory forever.
This poem flows with a powerful message
and meaning beyond love.
Best of luck always, Marie
Comment Written 19-Apr-2012
reply by the author on 28-Aug-2012
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Thanks for your kind words.
Comment from nancyjam
Congratulations on placing second. This is a
lovely Triolet expressing sorrow over a love
lost.
The repeating lines are woven through the
poem smoothly.
A poignant, touching piece. Well done. Nancy
reply by the author on 29-Aug-2012
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Congratulations on placing second. This is a
lovely Triolet expressing sorrow over a love
lost.
The repeating lines are woven through the
poem smoothly.
A poignant, touching piece. Well done. Nancy
Comment Written 19-Apr-2012
reply by the author on 29-Aug-2012
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Thanks for a great review. I am glad I came in second.
Comment from writer c
Alvin, this is gorgeous..wistful, melancholy, and beautifully crafted. I especially like "you dwell in time that does not end"....so true that love is timeless, no matter the momentary form it takes..truly devoid of linear measure. I do so love the triolet form.
Carol
reply by the author on 29-Aug-2012
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Alvin, this is gorgeous..wistful, melancholy, and beautifully crafted. I especially like "you dwell in time that does not end"....so true that love is timeless, no matter the momentary form it takes..truly devoid of linear measure. I do so love the triolet form.
Carol
Comment Written 19-Apr-2012
reply by the author on 29-Aug-2012
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Thanks for the exceptional review. Coming from you, that means a lot.
Comment from Joy Graham
Hi Alvin! I think this my first time reading one of your posts. This is a lovely triolet. I am a huge fan of the triolet form. I use it often. I love that you used 8 syllable lines and iambic tetrameter. My favorite way to do it :) Congrats on second place in this contest. This is a lovely entry.
reply by the author on 29-Aug-2012
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Hi Alvin! I think this my first time reading one of your posts. This is a lovely triolet. I am a huge fan of the triolet form. I use it often. I love that you used 8 syllable lines and iambic tetrameter. My favorite way to do it :) Congrats on second place in this contest. This is a lovely entry.
Comment Written 19-Apr-2012
reply by the author on 29-Aug-2012
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Yes, I prefer the French way to write the triolet (and often write them in French.) Thanks for a great review.
