A butterfly
Admiring God's creation3 total reviews
Comment from wiljacro
HI! Amina. The concept of your poem is good, but unfortunately, you appear to have completely mis-read the rules for this contest. It requires a 5 syllable first line
a 7 syllable second line
and a 5 syllable third line.
I think that your Contes result, may be a disappointment to you. wiljacro.
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HI! Amina. The concept of your poem is good, but unfortunately, you appear to have completely mis-read the rules for this contest. It requires a 5 syllable first line
a 7 syllable second line
and a 5 syllable third line.
I think that your Contes result, may be a disappointment to you. wiljacro.
Comment Written 19-Jan-2012
Comment from bonnick
I see butterflies as a new beginning
so few words but described beautifully
but a 5-7-5 poem, i'm sure, only has 3 lines, 5words on the first line 7 words on the second and 5 on the last line,
but like the wording anyway, thanks for sharing :-)
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I see butterflies as a new beginning
so few words but described beautifully
but a 5-7-5 poem, i'm sure, only has 3 lines, 5words on the first line 7 words on the second and 5 on the last line,
but like the wording anyway, thanks for sharing :-)
Comment Written 19-Jan-2012
Comment from Chris Tee
Sorry I had to abandon the read because this is not to the required format.
You will not shape in the contest.
This is a three line poem required.
It must have 5 syllables not words in the first line.
7 syllables not words in the second.
It must have 5 syllables in the last line
Let me try to help you.
It is a 5-7-5, haiku and senryu format, Ok:
Example:
I love you so much = 5 syllables
My love for you is extreme = 7 syllables
Much is love for you = 5 syllables
Three lines only you see
Every = 3 syllables e=1 ve=1 ry=1 total = 3
Now do not give up go and edit it.
Take your time to figure it out do not rush Ok.
Before you post a poem read the rules carefully and abide by those rules.
Once you have edited it reply to me.
I shall re-review it for you.
If you do not understand tell me in your reply Ok,
I shall try to help you further
Syllable counting is really easy
When counting syllables in English you are counting the sound that each or more of the vowels in the word make. Then you count the number of times you hear the vowel sound. Vowels are A, E, I, O, U, and Y is also a syllable sound. She sound is important when you say taxed you do not hear the ed.
Sleeping = 2 sleep=1 ing =1 total =2 syllables
If you edit this I shall re-review it for a better rating
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Sorry I had to abandon the read because this is not to the required format.
You will not shape in the contest.
This is a three line poem required.
It must have 5 syllables not words in the first line.
7 syllables not words in the second.
It must have 5 syllables in the last line
Let me try to help you.
It is a 5-7-5, haiku and senryu format, Ok:
Example:
I love you so much = 5 syllables
My love for you is extreme = 7 syllables
Much is love for you = 5 syllables
Three lines only you see
Every = 3 syllables e=1 ve=1 ry=1 total = 3
Now do not give up go and edit it.
Take your time to figure it out do not rush Ok.
Before you post a poem read the rules carefully and abide by those rules.
Once you have edited it reply to me.
I shall re-review it for you.
If you do not understand tell me in your reply Ok,
I shall try to help you further
Syllable counting is really easy
When counting syllables in English you are counting the sound that each or more of the vowels in the word make. Then you count the number of times you hear the vowel sound. Vowels are A, E, I, O, U, and Y is also a syllable sound. She sound is important when you say taxed you do not hear the ed.
Sleeping = 2 sleep=1 ing =1 total =2 syllables
If you edit this I shall re-review it for a better rating
Comment Written 19-Jan-2012
