Comment from debskatz

Excellent

Hi Alaskastory,

You need to put this chapter with the other two so readers can read those as well if they want to, and I do!

This was a really interesting story & very well written (thank you!). I truly enjoyed it.

Thank you for sharing it with us!

smiles,

deb

 Comment Written 17-Jan-2012

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reply by the author on 17-Jan-2012

Thanks for the review, deb. Actually, all previous chapters were posted on FS about a year ago. I'm just getting serious about expanding and working on it again.

reply by debskatz on 17-Jan-2012

Yeah, I saw where you said you'd posted them, but your 3rd chapter isn't connected to them. If you tried to do that & it didn't work, ask Tom to fix it for you. :-)

Comment from MumEsGirl

Excellent

Excellent writing and a very readable story. Animals are amazingly resilient. I can fell the pain and concern for the poor wounded animal in this work.

It has a peaceful end, where Shemya is curled up in bed and soothing her loved one

look forward to reading more

kate

 Comment Written 17-Jan-2012

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reply by the author on 17-Jan-2012

Thanks so much for your comments. I appreciate you taking time to review this post.

Comment from forestport12

Excellent

Hi Marie.
You started this story, I think way back when. Great to see you back posting again. As always your writing is easy to read and enjoyable. This looks like another wonderful plot.
And I love moose roast. I could almost taste your descriptions.
p.s. I ordered your book online.

 Comment Written 17-Jan-2012

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reply by the author on 17-Jan-2012

I appreciate your encouragement, Stan. Thanks so much for your comments and ordering on line! lol, Marie

reply by forestport12 on 17-Jan-2012

I'm sincer about wanting it, and I will see what my teenage kids think of it too. Honestly there might be three or four folks on fanstory that I feel strong enough to buy a book from, and you have been one of them.

Comment from Sasha

Excellent

Even without reading the first two chapters I enjoyed this one very much. I just learned my 10 yo granddaughter wants to move to Alaska and learn dog sledding AND one day win the Iditarod...pretty good aspirations for a ten yo. I do hope you continue with this story. You have done a marvelous job with the descriptions creating fantastic imagery.

 Comment Written 17-Jan-2012

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reply by the author on 17-Jan-2012

Oh, I shall think of your granddaughter when I get into editting the race scenes. Thanks, Sasha

Comment from Rahul@ISM_India

Excellent

I did not read your previous two chapters but found this one really nicely written,very touching,NIce artwork
Great presentation LOved it!

 Comment Written 17-Jan-2012

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reply by the author on 17-Jan-2012

Thank so much for doing a review for this piece.

Comment from rzubey

Good

I thought your story was really touching. I really believe that Shemya would lay down his lif for Brook. I'm glad he made it, though. It would have been too sad if Shemya had been killed. I love all kinds of dogs so your story really drew me in and touched my heart. Can find no fault in this beautiful story.

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 Comment Written 17-Jan-2012

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reply by the author on 17-Jan-2012

I appreciate your comments and am very pleased with your review. Thanks.

Comment from JW

Excellent

I do not recall reading the first two chapter, so I cannot comment on the storyline. However, in reading this chapter, I quickly noted how well written it was. Your characters are very real and the story is very realistic. Good job. JW

 Comment Written 17-Jan-2012

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reply by the author on 17-Jan-2012

Thanks so much for your review and comments.

Comment from irishauthorme

Excellent

Well written and fast moving. I liked the idea of James having to help rebuild the dog house, poetic justice.
Your dialogue really moved the story along. The exchanges between Brook Ann and her parents were just what would have been said in that situation. That was a typical reaction, when you had Brook fly up the stairs to her room, and dial up her best friend and tell her story.
Good chapter, gave me the feeling of being there!
irish

 Comment Written 17-Jan-2012

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reply by the author on 17-Jan-2012

Thanks a million, Irish. I sure like what you have to say about this little story. Good of you to take time to review it.

Comment from peggles

Excellent

I thought this flowed well and was easy to follow and understand
This is a interesting chapter full of action
We have these "boy racers" here as well
They fly up and down our country lanes enjoying all the twists and turns
someone is going to be hurt and I bet it wont be one of them
You have given your characters life and personalities
I have enjoyed reading this and look forward to more

 Comment Written 17-Jan-2012

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reply by the author on 17-Jan-2012

Your comments are very encouraging. Thanks for reviewing this.

Comment from Patrick G Cox

Excellent

Hi Alaskastory,

A fascinating tale well told, a close encounter with a bear is enough to shake anyone up.

A suggestion for you -

In the last paragraph, consecutive sentences begin with "As I ..." you may find it reads better if you change it to something like ...

"I sank into my bath of sudsy water allowing my thoughts to drift back ..."

Patrick

 Comment Written 17-Jan-2012

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reply by the author on 17-Jan-2012

I appeciate the "As I.." suggestion. I agree with your wording improvement, Patrick. Many thanks! Marie