The Crown for Vegas
Crown of Heroic Sonnets115 total reviews
Comment from ennahanid
This is an outstanding piece of writing...I don't apologize for having given out all my 6 stars, just such good writing in here but I am definitely sorry I don't have one left to give you.
The art work, your color choices your amazing Sonnets have me in awe...such a magnificent presentation.
Thank you, it was such a pleasure to read you this morning
Dinah
reply by the author on 21-Mar-2012
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This is an outstanding piece of writing...I don't apologize for having given out all my 6 stars, just such good writing in here but I am definitely sorry I don't have one left to give you.
The art work, your color choices your amazing Sonnets have me in awe...such a magnificent presentation.
Thank you, it was such a pleasure to read you this morning
Dinah
Comment Written 15-Mar-2012
reply by the author on 21-Mar-2012
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Thank you so for the wonderful review. Glad you enjoyed my sonnets.
Comment from Auroraboreal800
What a great, interesting y well written piece! Very clear and poetically focused. The rhyme and the rhythm were excellent and it flows in a very beautiful way... REALLY ENJOYABLE!!
Congratulations!
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reply by the author on 21-Mar-2012
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What a great, interesting y well written piece! Very clear and poetically focused. The rhyme and the rhythm were excellent and it flows in a very beautiful way... REALLY ENJOYABLE!!
Congratulations!
:)
Comment Written 15-Mar-2012
reply by the author on 21-Mar-2012
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Thank you so much for the great review and "congratulations". Glad you enjoyed my sonnets. Love, Y.
Comment from misscookie
Wow. This is a mighty powerfull poe,
Your works are so i nteresting and deep.
To me you wrote and story not a poem. and you had my attention from the first line to the last.
this is an excvellent write sorry i have no more six stars**********
reply by the author on 21-Mar-2012
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Wow. This is a mighty powerfull poe,
Your works are so i nteresting and deep.
To me you wrote and story not a poem. and you had my attention from the first line to the last.
this is an excvellent write sorry i have no more six stars**********
Comment Written 15-Mar-2012
reply by the author on 21-Mar-2012
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Thank you, Misscookie, for the wonderful review and rating. It's interesting that you my seven sonnets as a story in a poem. It was a poetic story indeed! Love, Y.
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It's as my pleasure.
Comment from plara
Wow I never visualized that Vegas could be so intricate. It was well written, inspired, yet extensive. I certainly felt your heart pouring out in the midst of the desert and goodbyes. It reminds me of a cross between the Pilgrims Progress and the book of Proverbs. The book of Proverbs especially where I needed to refer back to specific lines and verses. Amazingly well.
reply by the author on 21-Mar-2012
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Wow I never visualized that Vegas could be so intricate. It was well written, inspired, yet extensive. I certainly felt your heart pouring out in the midst of the desert and goodbyes. It reminds me of a cross between the Pilgrims Progress and the book of Proverbs. The book of Proverbs especially where I needed to refer back to specific lines and verses. Amazingly well.
Comment Written 15-Mar-2012
reply by the author on 21-Mar-2012
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Thank you so much for the great review. Vegas is actually quite amazing, and it was healing to me after losing my parents.
Comment from Natureschild
This is quite an undertaking. Your descriptions in verse paint a fine portrait of someone finding a place to heal. One line really gives me a contradicting image:
"...floating on sky tapestry in strides"
I can't get my head around floating and strides. One the whole, I think its a fantastic work of art.
reply by the author on 15-Mar-2012
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This is quite an undertaking. Your descriptions in verse paint a fine portrait of someone finding a place to heal. One line really gives me a contradicting image:
"...floating on sky tapestry in strides"
I can't get my head around floating and strides. One the whole, I think its a fantastic work of art.
Comment Written 15-Mar-2012
reply by the author on 15-Mar-2012
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Thank you so much for the wonderful review. I changed that line.
Love, Y.
Comment from Cynthia Tee
Bravo, wonderful, I salute you for this stunning crown of sonnets describing your pain after your loss and how Vegas helped you overcome it. Wish I had a sixer for you my friend ******. A very descriptive poem and I wish you all the best in the contest. Kind regards, Cynthia.
reply by the author on 21-Mar-2012
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Bravo, wonderful, I salute you for this stunning crown of sonnets describing your pain after your loss and how Vegas helped you overcome it. Wish I had a sixer for you my friend ******. A very descriptive poem and I wish you all the best in the contest. Kind regards, Cynthia.
Comment Written 15-Mar-2012
reply by the author on 21-Mar-2012
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Thank you so much for the great review and the virtual sixer, Cynthia.
Comment from Tammara
What a beautiful poem about Vegas, I really enjoyed reading it. I have been to Vegas many times, but you see the beauty in it so well. Great poem! :)
Tammara
reply by the author on 21-Mar-2012
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What a beautiful poem about Vegas, I really enjoyed reading it. I have been to Vegas many times, but you see the beauty in it so well. Great poem! :)
Tammara
Comment Written 15-Mar-2012
reply by the author on 21-Mar-2012
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Thank you so much, Tammara, for the great review and rating.
Comment from jshep
Of course I know your story, Yelena, but putting it into a crown adds so much depth and imagery to your grief and your joy upon moving to Vegas.
I- your grief demolishing your substance piece by piece is an amazing line to show the depth of sorrow you were feeling.
like the southern magic as a soothing balm and the healing putting out the flames of the inferno cross. Wow!
II- the car carrying me with you to your abyss- my only thought was abyss feels more like a negative word to go with the caressing hand and blessing of a kiss you are portraying to the reader.
III - now here you truly put the reader on the road and behind the wheel with you as the southern sun assails the windshield.
Great imagery with the monarch with reader anticipating the moment of the clandestine date.
IV- Give some very solid comparisons in this sonnet.
metamorphose - I found the dadum off with this word:
MEtaMORphose
V- especially like beginning line of suffering not in vain and the fact it strengthens our reserve and prepares our soul. My very favorite lines....
VI such perfect descriptions of Vegas in the first 8 lines- a kid at Christmas for sure..... :)
VII- I close my eyes and see your silhouette--says it all, Yelena. A perfect way to end this amazing marathon.
You have done an exceptional job of allowing the reader to feel your emotions in this crown. Great job. Love, Joycexx
reply by the author on 21-Mar-2012
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Of course I know your story, Yelena, but putting it into a crown adds so much depth and imagery to your grief and your joy upon moving to Vegas.
I- your grief demolishing your substance piece by piece is an amazing line to show the depth of sorrow you were feeling.
like the southern magic as a soothing balm and the healing putting out the flames of the inferno cross. Wow!
II- the car carrying me with you to your abyss- my only thought was abyss feels more like a negative word to go with the caressing hand and blessing of a kiss you are portraying to the reader.
III - now here you truly put the reader on the road and behind the wheel with you as the southern sun assails the windshield.
Great imagery with the monarch with reader anticipating the moment of the clandestine date.
IV- Give some very solid comparisons in this sonnet.
metamorphose - I found the dadum off with this word:
MEtaMORphose
V- especially like beginning line of suffering not in vain and the fact it strengthens our reserve and prepares our soul. My very favorite lines....
VI such perfect descriptions of Vegas in the first 8 lines- a kid at Christmas for sure..... :)
VII- I close my eyes and see your silhouette--says it all, Yelena. A perfect way to end this amazing marathon.
You have done an exceptional job of allowing the reader to feel your emotions in this crown. Great job. Love, Joycexx
Comment Written 13-Mar-2012
reply by the author on 21-Mar-2012
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Thank you so much for the great review, Joyce, sorry for the tardiness in responding to it. Between hosting the crown contest and fostering three cats I saved from death row -it's been overwhelming.
Regarding "abyss" - I know what you are saying, but I put it in intentionally - because I didn't know if Vegas was going to turn an abyss for me, or salvation. And yes, I took a poetic license on "metamorphose" - I was wondering how many reviewers would remark on it, but so far it's been only you. The license was, here I made it pronounce "metamer-PHOSE" (lol). I just couldn't let go of this word, like a kid I clang to it, in the hope it will pass. It did. But thank you for your sharp eye.
I WAS like a kid on Christmas day in Vegas, Joyce - especially when I drop to the Strip at night.
Thank you for your helpful and wonderful remarks, and following me Vegas Saga.
You know - after righting this, I realized how much I was in love with Vegas; how I was yearning for it all these years, and I think this Crown pushed me in my decision to go back. At least I am already looking for condos for rent...
Comment from Bayberry
I've been sick the past week and not active on site. But now I'm better and so glad to find that there is a sixth star available to apply to this flawless entry. The emotion in your Crown of Heroic Sonnets comes through strongly and draws the reader right in. I never thought of Las Vegas in this way before and it's an eye-opener. You've made it obvious that this health-enhancing location will forever hold a wonderful place in your heart. You've penned a beautiful and exceptionally well-presented work that has everything someone would hope to find in such a majestic poetic form. (It's a perfect example to use for those of us who want to learn more about it.) Many hugs, Josie :>
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2012
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I've been sick the past week and not active on site. But now I'm better and so glad to find that there is a sixth star available to apply to this flawless entry. The emotion in your Crown of Heroic Sonnets comes through strongly and draws the reader right in. I never thought of Las Vegas in this way before and it's an eye-opener. You've made it obvious that this health-enhancing location will forever hold a wonderful place in your heart. You've penned a beautiful and exceptionally well-presented work that has everything someone would hope to find in such a majestic poetic form. (It's a perfect example to use for those of us who want to learn more about it.) Many hugs, Josie :>
Comment Written 06-Feb-2012
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2012
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Oh wow, Josie... I am completely blown away by this gracious and majestic review. And the fact that you waited until you get a sixth star to review was very moving. I am grateful from the bottom of my heart for your exceptional review, your six stars, your confidence in my work and your memorable words which will stay in me forever. I am so glad my work inspired me to write yours, which is quite stunning.
Love and a million hugs, Yelena
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I meant, I am glad that my work inspired [you] to write yours which was absolutely exceptional. It's too late at night, my fingers are not obeying.
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LOL That's exactly the kind of thing I do when I'm tired. Sweet dreams! Josie :> xxoo
Comment from Giddy Nielsen-Sweep
This is an endearing story you have told Yelena, through your crown of sonnets. I felt there were a lot of extra syllables, but that could be the American pronunciation. good luck anyway, Giddy
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2012
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This is an endearing story you have told Yelena, through your crown of sonnets. I felt there were a lot of extra syllables, but that could be the American pronunciation. good luck anyway, Giddy
Comment Written 06-Feb-2012
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2012
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Thank you, Giddy, for your most gracious review. You Brits always complain on our extra syllables - but we are a tough bunch - you can call me on each instance, and I'll come out with my undefiable Webster! (lol).
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Good for you, Yel. The Brits are one thing... we Aussies are quite another! Giddy x
