The Crown for Vegas
Crown of Heroic Sonnets115 total reviews
Comment from Rattler
WOW, How the heck do you do it. This is a long poem that is so damn well done. I'm lucky if I can plan out a three line Haiku..
Nicely done.
reply by the author on 18-Mar-2012
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WOW, How the heck do you do it. This is a long poem that is so damn well done. I'm lucky if I can plan out a three line Haiku..
Nicely done.
Comment Written 15-Mar-2012
reply by the author on 18-Mar-2012
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Thank you for the good review, love, Y.
Comment from bhogg
Well done - I cannot imagine the discipline involved to stay true to form for sonnet (or any poem) of this length. Your subject should be unique - I love Vegas too! Bill
reply by the author on 20-Mar-2012
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Well done - I cannot imagine the discipline involved to stay true to form for sonnet (or any poem) of this length. Your subject should be unique - I love Vegas too! Bill
Comment Written 15-Mar-2012
reply by the author on 20-Mar-2012
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Thank you for the great review.
Comment from nomi338
This poem is teachable. My meaning is, if someone is reading this poem who is not sure or clear on how to write a poem, I mean a classic poem. Here it is, a wonderful example. True it may be too advanced a form for some, but it is something to aim for. Excellent work.
reply by the author on 18-Mar-2012
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This poem is teachable. My meaning is, if someone is reading this poem who is not sure or clear on how to write a poem, I mean a classic poem. Here it is, a wonderful example. True it may be too advanced a form for some, but it is something to aim for. Excellent work.
Comment Written 15-Mar-2012
reply by the author on 18-Mar-2012
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Thank you for your exceptionalo review of my piece, and the honor of six stars. The crown of heroic sonnets is one of most complex forms in poetry, and one of the most challenging! I glad you found it "teachable". That is a high compliment to the writer.
Hugs and love, Y.
Comment from Aussie
A beautiful illustration to compliment your poem. Great story, good rhyming schemes. When we hear of Vegas, we think of a great big gambling casino in the desert, apart from that, we know litte of it. You have filled in the blanks. From you writing it would appear to be a beautiful place with wonderful scenery, I liked the way you addressed it as another person, rather than a place. You are a gifted poet that has put much time and thought into this poem. Thanks for sharing Vegas.
reply by the author on 20-Mar-2012
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A beautiful illustration to compliment your poem. Great story, good rhyming schemes. When we hear of Vegas, we think of a great big gambling casino in the desert, apart from that, we know litte of it. You have filled in the blanks. From you writing it would appear to be a beautiful place with wonderful scenery, I liked the way you addressed it as another person, rather than a place. You are a gifted poet that has put much time and thought into this poem. Thanks for sharing Vegas.
Comment Written 15-Mar-2012
reply by the author on 20-Mar-2012
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Thank you so much for the great review.
Comment from nancyjam
I just have to give a six for this Crown sonnet.
Not only is it a lot of work but it is crafted so
well but evokes such emotion in the reader.
Your story is told so beautifully here.
Strong rhymes, perfect meter - good ending couplets.
All the elements of a good Sonnet as well as alliteration and
vivid images. Great job. Nancy
reply by the author on 18-Mar-2012
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I just have to give a six for this Crown sonnet.
Not only is it a lot of work but it is crafted so
well but evokes such emotion in the reader.
Your story is told so beautifully here.
Strong rhymes, perfect meter - good ending couplets.
All the elements of a good Sonnet as well as alliteration and
vivid images. Great job. Nancy
Comment Written 15-Mar-2012
reply by the author on 18-Mar-2012
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Thank you so much for your exceptional review and the honor of six stars. I am flattered indeed. Love and blessings, Y.
Comment from elgone
An extremely well executed poem that serves the criteria of the contest. The flow of the read was superb. As I do not write a lot of poetry, I won't dwell upon mechanics. The metering and rhyme seemed fine. I love sonnets. Your work is first rate.
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reply by the author on 20-Mar-2012
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An extremely well executed poem that serves the criteria of the contest. The flow of the read was superb. As I do not write a lot of poetry, I won't dwell upon mechanics. The metering and rhyme seemed fine. I love sonnets. Your work is first rate.
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Comment Written 15-Mar-2012
reply by the author on 20-Mar-2012
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Thank you so much for the great review.
Comment from whispersofthesoul
hiya,
wow a tough feat that was hope the fingers have healed from the blisters my eyes are just readjusting, i am not used to reading long pieces i dont like them and they dont keep my attention but yours did to the point i was able to finish it it was very well written, read easily and flowed well
welldone on this massive feat
goodluck in the competition
reply by the author on 20-Mar-2012
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hiya,
wow a tough feat that was hope the fingers have healed from the blisters my eyes are just readjusting, i am not used to reading long pieces i dont like them and they dont keep my attention but yours did to the point i was able to finish it it was very well written, read easily and flowed well
welldone on this massive feat
goodluck in the competition
Comment Written 15-Mar-2012
reply by the author on 20-Mar-2012
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Thank you fo rthe wonderful review.
Comment from Connie C
Wow! I was quite taken with this poem about your love of Vegas, and I'm sorry you had to leave it in the end after only two years. What a monumental task this is writing one of these crown of heroic sonnets. I'm afraid I wouldn't have the patience to attempt such a feat as writing one of these. But you, my friend, did an excellent job with this. You really made me feel your love for this city. Living in California, I've been there several times and enjoy it for only a few days--too much glitz for me. But you cover it all from the glitz to the beauty of the surrounding desert. Sounds like it has been a healing place for you. I thoroughly enjoyed reading this. Best of luck to you in the contest. Connie
reply by the author on 20-Mar-2012
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Wow! I was quite taken with this poem about your love of Vegas, and I'm sorry you had to leave it in the end after only two years. What a monumental task this is writing one of these crown of heroic sonnets. I'm afraid I wouldn't have the patience to attempt such a feat as writing one of these. But you, my friend, did an excellent job with this. You really made me feel your love for this city. Living in California, I've been there several times and enjoy it for only a few days--too much glitz for me. But you cover it all from the glitz to the beauty of the surrounding desert. Sounds like it has been a healing place for you. I thoroughly enjoyed reading this. Best of luck to you in the contest. Connie
Comment Written 15-Mar-2012
reply by the author on 20-Mar-2012
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Thank you for the wonderful and thoughtful review. Yes, Vegas is much more than a gambling hall in a desert (smile). I fell in love with its aura, its magnificent mountains and canyons, its atmosphere was healing to me after losing my parents; and I just loved Vegas. When you feel so so strongly about something, it's not a trouble writing 128 lines (smile).
Comment from Lydia11
Wow. Amazing. Don't know how you do it seeing I find sonnets to be the most difficult of poetic forms. So you're of eastern European descent too. I'm Polish and Ukrainian..or at least my parents were. I grew up on Shevechenko and lesia Ukrainka but have matured into Anna Ahkmatova. Much luck in the contest! Move over "Fear and Loathing in Las Vegas" although Depp is hot!
reply by the author on 21-Mar-2012
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Wow. Amazing. Don't know how you do it seeing I find sonnets to be the most difficult of poetic forms. So you're of eastern European descent too. I'm Polish and Ukrainian..or at least my parents were. I grew up on Shevechenko and lesia Ukrainka but have matured into Anna Ahkmatova. Much luck in the contest! Move over "Fear and Loathing in Las Vegas" although Depp is hot!
Comment Written 15-Mar-2012
reply by the author on 21-Mar-2012
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Thank you very much for your amazing review. It means a lot to me.
Comment from ajdevore
Well. This was quite an undertaking. You captured the allure and healing power of the desert perfectly. I particularly like that two years was enough. Back to reality. There are, for me, rough spots. Of course every reviewer has her/own likes and dislikes and as you know it's for you to decide what criticism makes sense to you. Since you don't want to cheat, maybe 'From the day on I THOUGHT we'd never part (since you did, in the end) You probably love the yellow brick road illusion, but to me it's forced and distracts. You really don't need t as you've painted quite a clear picture without it. 'make you flip,' does not seem consistent with the rest of the tone of the poem. I see the problem of rhyming with Vegas Strip, but maybe turn that line around with somehow Vegas Strip of lights, then there are lots of rhyming words. These are just tiny, tiny nits to what is really a wonderful, enjoyable tale well told.
reply by the author on 21-Mar-2012
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Well. This was quite an undertaking. You captured the allure and healing power of the desert perfectly. I particularly like that two years was enough. Back to reality. There are, for me, rough spots. Of course every reviewer has her/own likes and dislikes and as you know it's for you to decide what criticism makes sense to you. Since you don't want to cheat, maybe 'From the day on I THOUGHT we'd never part (since you did, in the end) You probably love the yellow brick road illusion, but to me it's forced and distracts. You really don't need t as you've painted quite a clear picture without it. 'make you flip,' does not seem consistent with the rest of the tone of the poem. I see the problem of rhyming with Vegas Strip, but maybe turn that line around with somehow Vegas Strip of lights, then there are lots of rhyming words. These are just tiny, tiny nits to what is really a wonderful, enjoyable tale well told.
Comment Written 15-Mar-2012
reply by the author on 21-Mar-2012
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Thank you so much for the great review. Wow. I am flattered indeed.
