The Crown for Vegas
Crown of Heroic Sonnets115 total reviews
Comment from wan890
Wow! Your Crown of Heroic Sonnets is beautiful. This is a very complicated type of writing and I applaud you for your skill. My favorite part:
"you touched where decay began its work
and oiled the roughness of infected skin".
This is very powerful.
reply by the author on 17-Mar-2012
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Wow! Your Crown of Heroic Sonnets is beautiful. This is a very complicated type of writing and I applaud you for your skill. My favorite part:
"you touched where decay began its work
and oiled the roughness of infected skin".
This is very powerful.
Comment Written 16-Mar-2012
reply by the author on 17-Mar-2012
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Thank you so much for the great review.
Comment from Sharrum
I absolutely loved your "Crown for heroic Sonics". It was clever, moving, and beautiful. These look so hard to write and yet the way you wrote it made it look easy. One day I will have write one of these. Now that you have inspired me. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 17-Mar-2012
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I absolutely loved your "Crown for heroic Sonics". It was clever, moving, and beautiful. These look so hard to write and yet the way you wrote it made it look easy. One day I will have write one of these. Now that you have inspired me. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 16-Mar-2012
reply by the author on 17-Mar-2012
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Thank you for the good review. Love, Y.
Comment from Patrick G Cox
Hi Yeltel,
A very good crown of sonnets, it certainly carries the message of your liking for the place. It has a good rhythm and obviously took some work.
Loved the manner in which you've managed to introduce the names of all the "Strip" hotels.
Patrick
reply by the author on 17-Mar-2012
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Hi Yeltel,
A very good crown of sonnets, it certainly carries the message of your liking for the place. It has a good rhythm and obviously took some work.
Loved the manner in which you've managed to introduce the names of all the "Strip" hotels.
Patrick
Comment Written 16-Mar-2012
reply by the author on 17-Mar-2012
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Thank you so much for the good review. Glad you enjoyed it.
Comment from The Stranger
well this is simply exceptional, I am utterly without words to portray just how highly I rate this piece, oyher than to award it the highest of marks
reply by the author on 17-Mar-2012
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well this is simply exceptional, I am utterly without words to portray just how highly I rate this piece, oyher than to award it the highest of marks
Comment Written 16-Mar-2012
reply by the author on 17-Mar-2012
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Thank you so much for the exceptional review and your six stars. I am highly honored.
Comment from whizpurr ^-^
Dear Yelena,
What a beautiful crown of sonnets! The subject you choose was most interesting. Your writing expresses such strong feelings in it and drew the reader into the scene and situation with graceful ease. All of the poems submitted for this contest come from talented writers and are beautiful and yours is certainly one of the most beautiful. There was only one place where I stumbled a little as I read it and that was at the line that reads:
"The car was carrying me to your abyss". I noticed the word carr/y/ing is a 3 syllable word and using it made this line have 11 syllables rather than the required 10. It's such a small slip though and I didn't think it detracted from the wonderful overall work and quality of this amazing crown of sonnets. Thanks for a marvelous sharing. All the best to you in the contest and may you continue to write great poetry like this one. Loving greetings and warm wishes, W ^-^
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2012
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Dear Yelena,
What a beautiful crown of sonnets! The subject you choose was most interesting. Your writing expresses such strong feelings in it and drew the reader into the scene and situation with graceful ease. All of the poems submitted for this contest come from talented writers and are beautiful and yours is certainly one of the most beautiful. There was only one place where I stumbled a little as I read it and that was at the line that reads:
"The car was carrying me to your abyss". I noticed the word carr/y/ing is a 3 syllable word and using it made this line have 11 syllables rather than the required 10. It's such a small slip though and I didn't think it detracted from the wonderful overall work and quality of this amazing crown of sonnets. Thanks for a marvelous sharing. All the best to you in the contest and may you continue to write great poetry like this one. Loving greetings and warm wishes, W ^-^
Comment Written 16-Mar-2012
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2012
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Thank you, dearest Whiz, for the stellar review and your exceptional rating. I am honored by humbled by both. This is a very dear subject to my heart, and when you feel so strongly about something, it is no trouble to write 128 lines (smile). Thanks for editing suggestion, I changed "carrying" to "bringing", I think it solves the issue. Thank you again, hugs, Yelena
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You are most welcome. "Bringing" works very well. A marvelous crown!
Hugs back, W ^-^
Comment from Espresso momma
Wow, great job. I am impressed how you can write seven like this. I am trying with all my might to learn this and write a series of them and trip and fall along the way.
reply by the author on 17-Mar-2012
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Wow, great job. I am impressed how you can write seven like this. I am trying with all my might to learn this and write a series of them and trip and fall along the way.
Comment Written 16-Mar-2012
reply by the author on 17-Mar-2012
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Thank you very much for the good review and rating.
Comment from G.B. Smith
Hey there Yelna
I enjoyed this very much and I thought it to be superbly expressed and very creative in its content the rhyme and the rhythm were excellent.
I know your story and it is wonderful to see how well you have pulled through it. I am very proud of you
Bear
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2012
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Hey there Yelna
I enjoyed this very much and I thought it to be superbly expressed and very creative in its content the rhyme and the rhythm were excellent.
I know your story and it is wonderful to see how well you have pulled through it. I am very proud of you
Bear
Comment Written 16-Mar-2012
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2012
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Thanks, Glen, for the great review. I am so glad you enjoyed it. Yes, you know my story - I guess, it made it easier for you to understand this. Love and hugs, Yelena
Comment from Rdfrdmom2
yeltel:
First, it has been an incredibly long time since I've
read any of your work. I hope you have been doing well.
I know Vegas can bring one grief. I had never thought
of it as a place where one could lose one's grief but
it makes so much sense.
I think this is a classic Crown of heroic sonnets -
I stand in awe
good luck in the contest
love,
jan
reply by the author on 17-Mar-2012
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yeltel:
First, it has been an incredibly long time since I've
read any of your work. I hope you have been doing well.
I know Vegas can bring one grief. I had never thought
of it as a place where one could lose one's grief but
it makes so much sense.
I think this is a classic Crown of heroic sonnets -
I stand in awe
good luck in the contest
love,
jan
Comment Written 15-Mar-2012
reply by the author on 17-Mar-2012
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Thank you so much for the great review and compliment, Jan. Your words mean a lot to me, as is your faith in my work.
Love and blessings, Y.
Comment from keimosobie
Sounds like you liked Vagas. I can relate i lived in houston for six months once. I loved it there. I didn't want to leave. It was warm all year round. I do miss it still.
reply by the author on 18-Mar-2012
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Sounds like you liked Vagas. I can relate i lived in houston for six months once. I loved it there. I didn't want to leave. It was warm all year round. I do miss it still.
Comment Written 15-Mar-2012
reply by the author on 18-Mar-2012
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Thank you so much for your great review.
Comment from LAFraser
Wow! This is an amazing piece of work you've created. I don't think I could focus enough to create a piece of poetry this long and you've done it so beautifully. Well done! This has been a pleasure to read. :)
~Eilish
reply by the author on 18-Mar-2012
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Wow! This is an amazing piece of work you've created. I don't think I could focus enough to create a piece of poetry this long and you've done it so beautifully. Well done! This has been a pleasure to read. :)
~Eilish
Comment Written 15-Mar-2012
reply by the author on 18-Mar-2012
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Thank you so much for your great review and rating. Despite all the reviews, it's not doing too great in the polls (smile), but who cares?
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Aww, I'm sorry, because this is a wonderful piece. :)
~Eilish
