The Crown for Vegas
Crown of Heroic Sonnets115 total reviews
Comment from c_lucas
This is a very well written sonnet/poem with a smooth flow of words, making for a very easy read. There is excellent imagery and descriptive scheme. Good luck in your ocntest.
reply by the author on 29-Jan-2012
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This is a very well written sonnet/poem with a smooth flow of words, making for a very easy read. There is excellent imagery and descriptive scheme. Good luck in your ocntest.
Comment Written 28-Jan-2012
reply by the author on 29-Jan-2012
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Thank you so much for the great review. Love, Y.
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You're welcome, Y. Charlie
Comment from ScarletClearwater
This was a long poem, so kudos with keeping the rhyme and the flow going. It held great imagery so nice use of descriptives. Lovely read.
reply by the author on 29-Jan-2012
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This was a long poem, so kudos with keeping the rhyme and the flow going. It held great imagery so nice use of descriptives. Lovely read.
Comment Written 28-Jan-2012
reply by the author on 29-Jan-2012
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Thank you very much for the great review - the length is alas, mandatory - 7 sonnets, 18 lines each (smile). Glad you enjoyed it. Love, Y.
Comment from Joan E.
I am sorry to have fallen far behind in reviewing again, and I'm not even traveling. You seem to manage this intimidating form with such ease. I admired your rhymes and progressive couplets, with the final one completing a circle. I hope you can get back to your beloved Las Vegas soon! -Joan
2/28/16 I am still in awe of your facility with this complex form. I hope your Crown of Heroic Sonnets is well received in this contest. I only wish the site would allow me to upgrade the stars to a six, since I have the extra one this time. Enjoy the remains of Sunday. Hugs galore- Joan
reply by the author on 16-Jan-2012
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I am sorry to have fallen far behind in reviewing again, and I'm not even traveling. You seem to manage this intimidating form with such ease. I admired your rhymes and progressive couplets, with the final one completing a circle. I hope you can get back to your beloved Las Vegas soon! -Joan
2/28/16 I am still in awe of your facility with this complex form. I hope your Crown of Heroic Sonnets is well received in this contest. I only wish the site would allow me to upgrade the stars to a six, since I have the extra one this time. Enjoy the remains of Sunday. Hugs galore- Joan
Comment Written 16-Jan-2012
reply by the author on 16-Jan-2012
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Thank you for the great review, dear Joan. I couldn't think of a better object to dedicate the Crown to, than my beloved Vegas. It deserved it! So much so.. Yes, I will be back one day, for sure - full time or part time.
Lots of love, Yelena
Comment from Laidy
I would truely give this poem a 6 if I had one to give. Going through each part was amazing and a wonderful experience to become avalable to. I enjoyed this art work very much.
reply by the author on 15-Jan-2012
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I would truely give this poem a 6 if I had one to give. Going through each part was amazing and a wonderful experience to become avalable to. I enjoyed this art work very much.
Comment Written 15-Jan-2012
reply by the author on 15-Jan-2012
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Thank you very much for the great review, it means a lot to me.
Hugs and love, Y.
Comment from Sally Carter
Wow Yelena, what a tour de force! A splendid tribute to a city about which I know nothing apart from the casinos and bright lights I have read about, so you make a grand ambassadress for her greater gifts.
Your poem/s are full of warmth and richness, and I particularly liked the way it ended with you leaving the city, the healing having been accomplished. Somehow that was all the more moving than if you had still been there, though I'm not sure why. Perhaps the fact that "she" let you go again, just as a loving parent is willing to say goodbye to their child.
I am still debating whether to throw my money into the ring for this one. I have some ideas sketched out and am going to test the water with the first sonnet before I fully commit, but the signs are looking hopeful!
Best wishes, and thank you for the pleasure of reading this and the stimulus of starting the contest.
Oooh, one tiny thing I meant to mention and forgot - in the final line, might it be more correct to say you would be kneeling "before" her door? Perhaps it's just different word usage on different continents.
Best wishes
Sally
reply by the author on 14-Jan-2012
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Wow Yelena, what a tour de force! A splendid tribute to a city about which I know nothing apart from the casinos and bright lights I have read about, so you make a grand ambassadress for her greater gifts.
Your poem/s are full of warmth and richness, and I particularly liked the way it ended with you leaving the city, the healing having been accomplished. Somehow that was all the more moving than if you had still been there, though I'm not sure why. Perhaps the fact that "she" let you go again, just as a loving parent is willing to say goodbye to their child.
I am still debating whether to throw my money into the ring for this one. I have some ideas sketched out and am going to test the water with the first sonnet before I fully commit, but the signs are looking hopeful!
Best wishes, and thank you for the pleasure of reading this and the stimulus of starting the contest.
Oooh, one tiny thing I meant to mention and forgot - in the final line, might it be more correct to say you would be kneeling "before" her door? Perhaps it's just different word usage on different continents.
Best wishes
Sally
Comment Written 14-Jan-2012
reply by the author on 14-Jan-2012
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Thank you so much, Sally, for the great review! Wow, it means a lot to me. I thought, there was no better subject than Vegas to write a Crown.
Hugs, love and a million blessings, Yelena
Comment from Peter@Poole
This string of sonnets is a 'tour de force', young lady. I was thinking of various sonnet forms recently and your name jumped into my mind; I associate you with the form. The bard of Avon, were he still alive, would want to meet you. Peter
reply by the author on 14-Jan-2012
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This string of sonnets is a 'tour de force', young lady. I was thinking of various sonnet forms recently and your name jumped into my mind; I associate you with the form. The bard of Avon, were he still alive, would want to meet you. Peter
Comment Written 14-Jan-2012
reply by the author on 14-Jan-2012
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Thank you so much, Peter, for your touching review. Your words and praise, as well as your exceptional rating mean a lot to me. Love, Yelena
Comment from adewpearl
strong rhymes throughout
steady iambic meter that adds to the poem's flow throughout
an extremely well-composed crown of sonnets, Yelena
vivid descriptive detail and genuine expression of emotion for Vegas, a place you obviously love, admire and appreciate
nice touches of alliteration throughout in phrases like car was carrying
Good transitions from one sonnet to the other
effective use of personification
thoughtfully wistful tone in the ending when you leave Vegas
Brooke
reply by the author on 13-Jan-2012
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strong rhymes throughout
steady iambic meter that adds to the poem's flow throughout
an extremely well-composed crown of sonnets, Yelena
vivid descriptive detail and genuine expression of emotion for Vegas, a place you obviously love, admire and appreciate
nice touches of alliteration throughout in phrases like car was carrying
Good transitions from one sonnet to the other
effective use of personification
thoughtfully wistful tone in the ending when you leave Vegas
Brooke
Comment Written 13-Jan-2012
reply by the author on 13-Jan-2012
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Thank you for the great review, Brooke. Your words and compliment mean a lot to me.
Comment from HPicasso
These are all excellent sonnets and extremely well written.
This poetry is indeed a splendid entry in the contest.
I think this poem was very well done.
I love the visual imagery and the strong storyline. Well done!
reply by the author on 12-Jan-2012
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These are all excellent sonnets and extremely well written.
This poetry is indeed a splendid entry in the contest.
I think this poem was very well done.
I love the visual imagery and the strong storyline. Well done!
Comment Written 12-Jan-2012
reply by the author on 12-Jan-2012
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Thank you so much for the great review. Your words and praise mean a lot to me. Hugs, Y.
Comment from Judian James
Bravo Yelena!! I love your Ode to Vegas and you certainly wrote an accurate travelogue for anyone who has never been. It is such a delightful place. I can't wait to go back too.
"You touched where the decay began its work
and oiled the roughness of infected skin
You penetrated where the demons lurk
And monitored the healing from within." EXCELLENT,my friend
reply by the author on 12-Jan-2012
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Bravo Yelena!! I love your Ode to Vegas and you certainly wrote an accurate travelogue for anyone who has never been. It is such a delightful place. I can't wait to go back too.
"You touched where the decay began its work
and oiled the roughness of infected skin
You penetrated where the demons lurk
And monitored the healing from within." EXCELLENT,my friend
Comment Written 12-Jan-2012
reply by the author on 12-Jan-2012
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Thank you very much, Jude. When entering this contest, the main thing is to find a topic you feel strongly about to write 136 lines! (lol). And Vegas certainly gave me that fuel. Your words and compliment mean a lot to me, blessings and love, Yelena
Comment from cheyennewy
Hi Y,
There is no way I could begin to write a crown of sonnets. You have done a remarkable with these sonnets and each one is well crafted and compelling. You stayed focused through out which I think would be a bit difficult. Your rhyming pattern is well thought out and I love the theme. Here are the stars I don't have! ****** Well done and good luck in the contest....blessings, chey
reply by the author on 12-Jan-2012
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Hi Y,
There is no way I could begin to write a crown of sonnets. You have done a remarkable with these sonnets and each one is well crafted and compelling. You stayed focused through out which I think would be a bit difficult. Your rhyming pattern is well thought out and I love the theme. Here are the stars I don't have! ****** Well done and good luck in the contest....blessings, chey
Comment Written 12-Jan-2012
reply by the author on 12-Jan-2012
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Thank you for your great review, Chey. I am sure, a sonnet expert like yourself could manage a crown of sonnets; the main thing is to find the topic you feel strong enough to write 136 lines! (smile). Again, thank you for the review, blessings and love, Y.
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136 lines? (ugh) but thank you for having faith in me.
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The main thing is to find the subject matter you feel strongly about - the words will come by themselves! smile
