The Crown for Vegas
Crown of Heroic Sonnets115 total reviews
Comment from joelh605
Wonderful, Yelena - I still hear the Russian cutie-pie translating beautiful thoughts into English, but this is just wonderful!
I had the impression that a heroic sonnet was three quatrains and two couplets; what you've done is harder, four quatrains and one couplet. I yield the point! Google tells me that a heroic sonnet is done your way. "The rhyme scheme has usually been abababab cdcdcdcd ee or abab cdcd efef ghgh ii" which you have done.
Wikipedia also says that a crown of sonnets (or heroic sonnets) has no specific number, heroic or otherwise, but that a heroic crown has fifteen of them, with the fifteenth comprised of the starting lines of the other fourteen, in sequence. So a heroic crown of heroic sonnets would need eighteen, with the nineteenth comprised of the eighteen first lines.
Happy Grins
Joel
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2016
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Wonderful, Yelena - I still hear the Russian cutie-pie translating beautiful thoughts into English, but this is just wonderful!
I had the impression that a heroic sonnet was three quatrains and two couplets; what you've done is harder, four quatrains and one couplet. I yield the point! Google tells me that a heroic sonnet is done your way. "The rhyme scheme has usually been abababab cdcdcdcd ee or abab cdcd efef ghgh ii" which you have done.
Wikipedia also says that a crown of sonnets (or heroic sonnets) has no specific number, heroic or otherwise, but that a heroic crown has fifteen of them, with the fifteenth comprised of the starting lines of the other fourteen, in sequence. So a heroic crown of heroic sonnets would need eighteen, with the nineteenth comprised of the eighteen first lines.
Happy Grins
Joel
Comment Written 14-Mar-2016
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2016
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Wow, this was a treat! Hello, stranger! You've been missing for a over a year, and it was such a nice surprise to find a six from you. I've been hosting a crown of heroic sonnets for four years, this year is my fifth, and it would be a great treat if you joined. We've always had it four quatrains and a couplet, ever since I took over the reigns from another poet who hosted this contest.
Great to see you, I hope you are doing well, fond regards, Yelena
Comment from DonandVicki
A very well structured sonnet that shows how obvious it is just how much time and effort that you put into this fine poetic verse. You put your emotions in to your words as well.
reply by the author on 04-Mar-2016
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A very well structured sonnet that shows how obvious it is just how much time and effort that you put into this fine poetic verse. You put your emotions in to your words as well.
Comment Written 02-Mar-2016
reply by the author on 04-Mar-2016
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Thank you so much.
Comment from Teri7
This is a very interesting poem you have penned with Vegas in mind. You used very good descriptive wording and very good imagery. It was a joy to read and review. Hugs, Teri
reply by the author on 04-Mar-2016
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This is a very interesting poem you have penned with Vegas in mind. You used very good descriptive wording and very good imagery. It was a joy to read and review. Hugs, Teri
Comment Written 02-Mar-2016
reply by the author on 04-Mar-2016
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Thank you so much.
Comment from dmt1967
This is how you write a long poem. It moved forward and didn't ramble or go round in a circle. I enjoyed reading it. There are spaces where there shouldn't be, I think. Good luck in the contest and thank you for sharing.
reply by the author on 01-Mar-2016
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This is how you write a long poem. It moved forward and didn't ramble or go round in a circle. I enjoyed reading it. There are spaces where there shouldn't be, I think. Good luck in the contest and thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 01-Mar-2016
reply by the author on 01-Mar-2016
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thanks
Comment from foxangie123
This is so well crafted and needs way more than six stars. I'm giving five because that's all I have left. An outstanding piece of writing for real.. Bravo..
reply by the author on 01-Mar-2016
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This is so well crafted and needs way more than six stars. I'm giving five because that's all I have left. An outstanding piece of writing for real.. Bravo..
Comment Written 29-Feb-2016
reply by the author on 01-Mar-2016
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thank you
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Welcome. You deserved it.
Comment from MelB
Quite a feat to do seven sonnets. They told a story of a journey through Vegas. They flowed well. Great job and best wishes in the contest.
reply by the author on 04-Mar-2016
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Quite a feat to do seven sonnets. They told a story of a journey through Vegas. They flowed well. Great job and best wishes in the contest.
Comment Written 29-Feb-2016
reply by the author on 04-Mar-2016
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Thank you so much.
Comment from nancy_e_davis
In our lifetime we left it behind twice and it called us back.
Nothing to do with the gambling just the weather. It was a pleasant place to live until the heat was just too much. We moved north but I know what you are saying here. I did love the desert. Good Job. Nancy
reply by the author on 04-Mar-2016
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In our lifetime we left it behind twice and it called us back.
Nothing to do with the gambling just the weather. It was a pleasant place to live until the heat was just too much. We moved north but I know what you are saying here. I did love the desert. Good Job. Nancy
Comment Written 28-Feb-2016
reply by the author on 04-Mar-2016
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Thank you so much.
Comment from lightink
Yelena, this is an exceptional poem with so much beauty and pain!
I am sorry about your loss that was breaking down every bit of your being and I salute the intuition and the resiliency that drove you to find a healing place for you. It's fascinating that it happened to be what many people call the Sin City - yet, the depth of admiration explains itself through your exceptional wording. I, too, see the desert as an incredibly peaceful and healing place, I am not certain about the casinos. Well, except for the abundant, very clean and fancy bathrooms ;). That photo is taken at the Red Rock Canyon, which I love. Have you even been to the temporary cascades when they actually have water in them? Magnificent! Anyways, the ode you written to this city reflects your own beauty and it tells a beautiful story about finding resources when there's very few available.
Absolute striking metaphors, and expressions of adoration.
Just a very incomplete list of stand out lines:
"your incandescent aura brings release"
"Your chariot would drive my spirit forth"
"Suicidal notions melted in the heat"
"The Lunar sorcery is stronger here"
I think the 5th one is my cavort with the celestial imagery!
Thank you for sharing this poem and your soul with us!
reply by the author on 03-Mar-2016
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Yelena, this is an exceptional poem with so much beauty and pain!
I am sorry about your loss that was breaking down every bit of your being and I salute the intuition and the resiliency that drove you to find a healing place for you. It's fascinating that it happened to be what many people call the Sin City - yet, the depth of admiration explains itself through your exceptional wording. I, too, see the desert as an incredibly peaceful and healing place, I am not certain about the casinos. Well, except for the abundant, very clean and fancy bathrooms ;). That photo is taken at the Red Rock Canyon, which I love. Have you even been to the temporary cascades when they actually have water in them? Magnificent! Anyways, the ode you written to this city reflects your own beauty and it tells a beautiful story about finding resources when there's very few available.
Absolute striking metaphors, and expressions of adoration.
Just a very incomplete list of stand out lines:
"your incandescent aura brings release"
"Your chariot would drive my spirit forth"
"Suicidal notions melted in the heat"
"The Lunar sorcery is stronger here"
I think the 5th one is my cavort with the celestial imagery!
Thank you for sharing this poem and your soul with us!
Comment Written 28-Feb-2016
reply by the author on 03-Mar-2016
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Thank you for this superb review and six stars! I am overwhelmed by a praise of someone of your caliber. I hosted Crown of heroic sonnet contests for 4 years. Thinking of doing it this year, if I have the energy. Vegas means a lot for me - it saved at a time when "grief was eating at my core". Planning to move back there some day.
Thanks again, my friend. So glad you enjoyed my story.
Love, Y.
Comment from jdunnsamson
I was touched by this extraordinary journey - a cross-country journey that parallels the personal journey from grief to the bleak, spectacular, harsh beauty of the desert to the distractions of (and this was an unexpected surprise) the wild materialism and glitz of Las Vegas - I didn't expect such an ode to the healing powers of Las Vegas, which is so typically seen as an agent of destruction. I liked the symmetry of it, the eventual return to life, not exactly as the narrator knows it, because after a loss like the ones that inspire a journey like this, life as we know it is inextricably altered, and this work acknowledges that transformational fact.
The cadence was hypnotic and the imagery was beautiful. I particularly loved, "You were my Noah's ark to heartache's flood" and "The Lunar sorcery is stronger here, in Vegas, this omnipotent resort."
Bravo! Nicely done.
reply by the author on 04-Mar-2016
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I was touched by this extraordinary journey - a cross-country journey that parallels the personal journey from grief to the bleak, spectacular, harsh beauty of the desert to the distractions of (and this was an unexpected surprise) the wild materialism and glitz of Las Vegas - I didn't expect such an ode to the healing powers of Las Vegas, which is so typically seen as an agent of destruction. I liked the symmetry of it, the eventual return to life, not exactly as the narrator knows it, because after a loss like the ones that inspire a journey like this, life as we know it is inextricably altered, and this work acknowledges that transformational fact.
The cadence was hypnotic and the imagery was beautiful. I particularly loved, "You were my Noah's ark to heartache's flood" and "The Lunar sorcery is stronger here, in Vegas, this omnipotent resort."
Bravo! Nicely done.
Comment Written 28-Feb-2016
reply by the author on 04-Mar-2016
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Thank you for the superb review and sux stars! I am honored indeed. So glad you enjoyed my poem. Love, Y.
Comment from robina1978
A lovely photo that complements your poem perfectly. A crown of Sonnets must be extremely difficult. But you managed without failing, about your Vegas. Best wishes for the contest.
reply by the author on 28-Feb-2016
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A lovely photo that complements your poem perfectly. A crown of Sonnets must be extremely difficult. But you managed without failing, about your Vegas. Best wishes for the contest.
Comment Written 28-Feb-2016
reply by the author on 28-Feb-2016
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thank you
