Lost in the Woods
Timmy Mouse goes looking for Elves76 total reviews
Comment from bob cullen
Very nice and very long. Your writing is superb and I would bet it holds little kids interest the whole way through.
Congratulations n getting published and I hope you rack up lots of sales
reply by the author on 28-Feb-2016
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Very nice and very long. Your writing is superb and I would bet it holds little kids interest the whole way through.
Congratulations n getting published and I hope you rack up lots of sales
Comment Written 27-Feb-2016
reply by the author on 28-Feb-2016
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Thank you, Bob, for your lovely review. I break the stories up with loads of illustrations, and parents can stop at different points if they want to. I think children also need to 'see' what they are reading until their own imaginations take over. I am really pleased you enjoyed this one, thanks for reading it, my friend. xxx Sandra
Comment from robyn corum
Sandra,
This is adorable, and it's a story that I'm sure young children would/will enjoy! Congratulations on your publishing success and I can't imagine the scene at the book signing. Color me --> 'jelly'! *smile*
reply by the author on 28-Feb-2016
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Sandra,
This is adorable, and it's a story that I'm sure young children would/will enjoy! Congratulations on your publishing success and I can't imagine the scene at the book signing. Color me --> 'jelly'! *smile*
Comment Written 27-Feb-2016
reply by the author on 28-Feb-2016
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Thank you so much, Robyn, that is so kind of you. Book signing is amazing!!! :) xxx Sandra
Comment from Eric1
Hi Sandra, without a shadow of a doubt the very best poem on here for weeks, The tremendous rhythm leads the reader into a magical world that all children would dearly love to be dreaming about.
Your poem 'bounces' along telling a wonderful tale about the animals in the wood, it has humour, drama and a brilliant ending.
The rhyming was superb, the meter was spot on and that flow is to die for my friend.
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2016
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Hi Sandra, without a shadow of a doubt the very best poem on here for weeks, The tremendous rhythm leads the reader into a magical world that all children would dearly love to be dreaming about.
Your poem 'bounces' along telling a wonderful tale about the animals in the wood, it has humour, drama and a brilliant ending.
The rhyming was superb, the meter was spot on and that flow is to die for my friend.
Comment Written 27-Feb-2016
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2016
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Wow, Eric, thank you so very much!!! What a wonderful review, you have made my head swell, LOL!!! I'm over the moon that you enjoyed it. I'm now tidying up my next book, the stories need a good edit and they I'm getting you all to check them out for me. Your eyes are better than mine! I put them on here four years ago, and they really do need an edit. The first one is on here now, I've lost my Mummy. I have 25 story-poems to choose from for the second book. So please let me know what you think of them. I really value your opinion because you are a story in a poem writer too, and an excellent one at that! Thanks again, my friend, and a big hug for the 6 stars!! xxx Sandra
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You are very welcome my friend.It was a pleasure to review such wonderful poetry.
Comment from --Turtle.
I read through this poem adventure of a rat coming across a mouse who's lost his brother. A fun poem, loads of great rhymes and a solid easy to follow beat. I enjoyed the action with the Elves and the fun of Tommy and Timmy being twins. Kids get a kick out of twins, the novelty of two people who look exactly the same.
Only one thing for you to consider...
"Timmy! Where are you?" (h)He heard Tommy cry,
If Tommy is the one crying out those words for Timmy, and I think he is... then you need to change that He to 'he', because it is a dialogue tag.
"Timmy! Where are you?" he heard Tommy cry, == correct, if Tommy is the one crying out "Timmy."
Now if you mean it separate... Like after he spoke, then he started to cry, meaning tears and not sound, then it's. He heard Tommy cry.
Is that what you meant? Was the sound Reggie heard the sound of boo hoo hoo? Or was the sound of the crying the words read before hand?
That's all I saw that made me pause through this fun tale, I enjoyed the action, and poor Reggie... to offer to help Tommy, just to get tossed by those Elves. All in good fun.
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2016
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I read through this poem adventure of a rat coming across a mouse who's lost his brother. A fun poem, loads of great rhymes and a solid easy to follow beat. I enjoyed the action with the Elves and the fun of Tommy and Timmy being twins. Kids get a kick out of twins, the novelty of two people who look exactly the same.
Only one thing for you to consider...
"Timmy! Where are you?" (h)He heard Tommy cry,
If Tommy is the one crying out those words for Timmy, and I think he is... then you need to change that He to 'he', because it is a dialogue tag.
"Timmy! Where are you?" he heard Tommy cry, == correct, if Tommy is the one crying out "Timmy."
Now if you mean it separate... Like after he spoke, then he started to cry, meaning tears and not sound, then it's. He heard Tommy cry.
Is that what you meant? Was the sound Reggie heard the sound of boo hoo hoo? Or was the sound of the crying the words read before hand?
That's all I saw that made me pause through this fun tale, I enjoyed the action, and poor Reggie... to offer to help Tommy, just to get tossed by those Elves. All in good fun.
Comment Written 26-Feb-2016
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2016
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Thank you so much for this excellent review. I hadn't noticed that point before, but you are right, it is confusing like that. I think I've corrected it by putting an apostrophe 's on Tommy.... he heard Tommy's cry. What do you think? Thank you so much for that. I'm delighted you enjoyed it. :) Sandra xx
Comment from Drew Delaney
Wow! This is really awesome, Sandra. You must be so tickled. I k now I would be. Congratulations and best wishes with the book. How exciting! Good for you. Drew xx
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2016
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Wow! This is really awesome, Sandra. You must be so tickled. I k now I would be. Congratulations and best wishes with the book. How exciting! Good for you. Drew xx
Comment Written 26-Feb-2016
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2016
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It was nice holding my book in my hand, and even nicer having a book signing! Thank you so much, Drew, for you lovely comments. :) Sandra. xxx
Comment from SimplyaStudent
Very well done. Everything here is spot on and your poem tells a very good story, it reminds me of the old stories I used to read when I was little. Very well written and I look forward to reading more of your work in the future. :) SS
reply by the author on 26-Feb-2016
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Very well done. Everything here is spot on and your poem tells a very good story, it reminds me of the old stories I used to read when I was little. Very well written and I look forward to reading more of your work in the future. :) SS
Comment Written 26-Feb-2016
reply by the author on 26-Feb-2016
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Thank you so very much, SS, for your wonderful review and for the 6 stars! That is so nice of you! :) Sandra. xx
Comment from TPAC
Magnificent crafted story. I found this write to be imaginative and well illustrated in course of tale. Writer charm is compelling and descriptive words expressions forming their thoughts well: in my opinion.
reply by the author on 26-Feb-2016
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Magnificent crafted story. I found this write to be imaginative and well illustrated in course of tale. Writer charm is compelling and descriptive words expressions forming their thoughts well: in my opinion.
Comment Written 26-Feb-2016
reply by the author on 26-Feb-2016
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Thank you so much, TPAC, for such a lovely review. That is so kind of you!! :) Sandra xx
Comment from judester
This is just delightful. I think that kids and their parents would all enjoy hearing this story. It has a wonderful flow,a couple life lessons and a happy ending. I realy enjoyed this glimpse into your magical little land. Cheers judester
reply by the author on 26-Feb-2016
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This is just delightful. I think that kids and their parents would all enjoy hearing this story. It has a wonderful flow,a couple life lessons and a happy ending. I realy enjoyed this glimpse into your magical little land. Cheers judester
Comment Written 26-Feb-2016
reply by the author on 26-Feb-2016
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Thank you, Judy, I really appreciate your lovely review. I am glad you enjoyed my poem. :) Sandra xxx
Comment from danpald
Delightful poem
For children to read
Of all ages so it seems
For this poem I enjoyed immensely
Well done to find the Elves in the woods
Not evil but friends to the twins and some
So many fear the magical realm
That is nothing but creatures with playful designs
reply by the author on 26-Feb-2016
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Delightful poem
For children to read
Of all ages so it seems
For this poem I enjoyed immensely
Well done to find the Elves in the woods
Not evil but friends to the twins and some
So many fear the magical realm
That is nothing but creatures with playful designs
Comment Written 26-Feb-2016
reply by the author on 26-Feb-2016
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Thank you so very much, Dan. I love your reviews, they are lovely!! :) Sandra xxx
Comment from Treischel
Definitely a showcase story poem, beautifully written in aabbcc rhymed Septets . Wonderful children's characters with colorful imagery that takes you to a magic place and makes you smile. Masterfully told. A pure delight!
reply by the author on 26-Feb-2016
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Definitely a showcase story poem, beautifully written in aabbcc rhymed Septets . Wonderful children's characters with colorful imagery that takes you to a magic place and makes you smile. Masterfully told. A pure delight!
Comment Written 25-Feb-2016
reply by the author on 26-Feb-2016
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Thank you so much, Tom. I'm so pleased you enjoyed this poem. :) Sandra. xx
