Lost in the Woods
Timmy Mouse goes looking for Elves76 total reviews
Comment from Gloria ....
This is an action packed tale that I can visualize all the illustrations as the children try to guess what will happen next. Love this: Popsicorn Bog and Reggie the Rat.
Excellent cadence and rhyme scheme. A delightful read for children and adults alike. Nice work.
Cheers,
MissyX
reply by the author on 30-Jan-2012
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This is an action packed tale that I can visualize all the illustrations as the children try to guess what will happen next. Love this: Popsicorn Bog and Reggie the Rat.
Excellent cadence and rhyme scheme. A delightful read for children and adults alike. Nice work.
Cheers,
MissyX
Comment Written 30-Jan-2012
reply by the author on 30-Jan-2012
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Thank you so much MissyX, what a really nice review, and thank you for all those stars! x Sandra x
Comment from October21
I think that illustration would be great, but the story itself is entertaining and would keep a child occupied. Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 14-Jan-2012
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I think that illustration would be great, but the story itself is entertaining and would keep a child occupied. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 14-Jan-2012
reply by the author on 14-Jan-2012
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Thank you, October21! Thank you for such a nice review. xsx
Comment from JaphetMphande
Thank you for this poem.
It is well written.
Good language for children as well. With illstrutions there will be arousal of interest. i enjoyed the story.
Thank you.
reply by the author on 14-Jan-2012
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Thank you for this poem.
It is well written.
Good language for children as well. With illstrutions there will be arousal of interest. i enjoyed the story.
Thank you.
Comment Written 14-Jan-2012
reply by the author on 14-Jan-2012
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Thank you! This is such a nice review, I really appreciate your comments. xsx
Comment from Semchuva
I enjoyed this cute story. I agree that illustrations would be just the touch to finish it off. I could picture the action and the little mouse characters.
reply by the author on 14-Jan-2012
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I enjoyed this cute story. I agree that illustrations would be just the touch to finish it off. I could picture the action and the little mouse characters.
Comment Written 14-Jan-2012
reply by the author on 14-Jan-2012
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Thank you, Semchuva, for such lovely comments! xsx
Comment from winlaw writer
An excellent poem that has good animation and description for children to follow along as they adventure through your storyland of wonder that takes them on a journey through the imaginative forest. I would just change the first line to read Reggie the rat sat on his log.
reply by the author on 14-Jan-2012
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An excellent poem that has good animation and description for children to follow along as they adventure through your storyland of wonder that takes them on a journey through the imaginative forest. I would just change the first line to read Reggie the rat sat on his log.
Comment Written 14-Jan-2012
reply by the author on 14-Jan-2012
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Thank you, winlaw writer, I am glad you liked it. I appreciate your comments, too. That first line has been a bother to me, with different reviewers suggesting different ways to word it. I think you have it just right, and I am going to use it. Thank you for such a helpful review!xsx
Comment from AlexAX
This is a really good poem for children and as I work in a nursery I know they would be enthralled by this, to keep their attention yes illustrations would be needed but the way you have worded it and made the rhymes flow nicely will keep their interest too. The build up towards the end is really good and I love happy endings :) All the best. Great work. Alex.
reply by the author on 14-Jan-2012
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This is a really good poem for children and as I work in a nursery I know they would be enthralled by this, to keep their attention yes illustrations would be needed but the way you have worded it and made the rhymes flow nicely will keep their interest too. The build up towards the end is really good and I love happy endings :) All the best. Great work. Alex.
Comment Written 14-Jan-2012
reply by the author on 14-Jan-2012
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That is so good of you to take the time to review my poem. Being as you work in a nursery, it's nice to have it reviewed by someone so used to children and know what they would like. Thank you so much! xsx
Comment from Honeysuckle1876
great story and beautiful written. i thimk children pay attention more when it rhymes it kept my interest. like you said it does need illustration for the children but as for me i had a wonderful visual just from the words. great piece and i loved the aabbcc format.
reply by the author on 14-Jan-2012
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great story and beautiful written. i thimk children pay attention more when it rhymes it kept my interest. like you said it does need illustration for the children but as for me i had a wonderful visual just from the words. great piece and i loved the aabbcc format.
Comment Written 14-Jan-2012
reply by the author on 14-Jan-2012
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That is so nice of you, Honeysuckle! It is nice to know grown up children enjoy my poems! I am the oldest grown up child!! Thank you for reviewing my poem, I really appreciate it. xsx
Comment from rhymelord
Dear Sandra,
This is a great follow up to your earlier post. This, of course, is like "The Never Ending Story", it has the potential to be added to and added to. All quite delightful and your execution is excellent. Kids should love this one. I do and I am only 85.
Regards
Reg
reply by the author on 14-Jan-2012
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Dear Sandra,
This is a great follow up to your earlier post. This, of course, is like "The Never Ending Story", it has the potential to be added to and added to. All quite delightful and your execution is excellent. Kids should love this one. I do and I am only 85.
Regards
Reg
Comment Written 14-Jan-2012
reply by the author on 14-Jan-2012
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Thank you Reg, I am really glad you like my stories, there are others coming for all us children! Who wants to grow up, anyway? Thank you again, for your so kind review.xsx
Comment from adewpearl
excellent cadence and strong rhyming couplets
good proximate rhyme of cross/lost
excellent choice of high-impact verbs like rummage/shout - that bring the scene to life
You build suspense well
and depict the anxiety of Tommy effectively as he worries about his brother's whereabouts
Love the happy ending :-) Brooke
reply by the author on 14-Jan-2012
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excellent cadence and strong rhyming couplets
good proximate rhyme of cross/lost
excellent choice of high-impact verbs like rummage/shout - that bring the scene to life
You build suspense well
and depict the anxiety of Tommy effectively as he worries about his brother's whereabouts
Love the happy ending :-) Brooke
Comment Written 14-Jan-2012
reply by the author on 14-Jan-2012
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Thank you, Brooke, I have to have 'happy endings' to much sadness these days. Thank you for your lovely review. xsx
Comment from c_lucas
This well written poem should be under children poetry. It has a nice flow of words, making for an easy read. There is very good imagery. I found one error.
The (Then) Timmy was there,
reply by the author on 14-Jan-2012
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This well written poem should be under children poetry. It has a nice flow of words, making for an easy read. There is very good imagery. I found one error.
The (Then) Timmy was there,
Comment Written 13-Jan-2012
reply by the author on 14-Jan-2012
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Thank you, c_lucas, I shall put that error right, and also see if I can put it under childrens poetry now. I agree with you, I should have done that at the start! Thank you for reviewing my poem, I really appreciate your comments. xsx
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you're welcome, Sandra. Ask Tom to change it. Charlie
