By The Light Of The Silvery Moon
Going back to what once was25 total reviews
Comment from adewpearl
A wonderfully poetic opening with great alliteration, strong verb choices, excellent mood creation and use of deliberate fragments
she lifts the bridle from it's hook - drop the apostrophe
This is absolutely hauntingly beautiful, Susan :-) Brooke
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A wonderfully poetic opening with great alliteration, strong verb choices, excellent mood creation and use of deliberate fragments
she lifts the bridle from it's hook - drop the apostrophe
This is absolutely hauntingly beautiful, Susan :-) Brooke
Comment Written 10-Jan-2012
reply by the author on 10-Jan-2012
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Good morning Brooke! I removed the offending little fellow. :)) Thank you so much, again. I'm so glad you enjoyed this...I still await the decision for surgery, and oh, how I want to go back, just A FEW years even!! LOL! Thanks again Brooke! xx. Susan
Comment from N.K. Wagner
We can't go backward, Suse, except in our minds - and on paper. You've set up a beautiful scene. Well written. :) Nancy
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We can't go backward, Suse, except in our minds - and on paper. You've set up a beautiful scene. Well written. :) Nancy
Comment Written 10-Jan-2012
reply by the author on 10-Jan-2012
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Hi Nancy! I know, that's why I write about it too often. It's the only way I can stay half-way sane. I thank you for reading it, and understanding too. xoxo! Susan
Comment from Mary Ann MCPhedran
Susan I have already given this review but when my hand was doing the rateing I had a treamor and I dont know if it has given the right rate so I' rating again. Keep writing. Mary
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Susan I have already given this review but when my hand was doing the rateing I had a treamor and I dont know if it has given the right rate so I' rating again. Keep writing. Mary
Comment Written 10-Jan-2012
reply by the author on 10-Jan-2012
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Hi Mary! Oh honey, what's happened? I am so far behind on saying thank you, I have not seen your other review yet! SOOooo sorry! I am always so happy when you like my stories. And with each note you send, my heart swells...please let me know how you are?? HUG! Susan
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I'm fine Susan, you will get round to them soon
Comment from robina1978
A wonderful write Susan. The moon and horse riding, it is all so nice . And all of us that used to ride would like to go back there. At least I would.
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A wonderful write Susan. The moon and horse riding, it is all so nice . And all of us that used to ride would like to go back there. At least I would.
Comment Written 10-Jan-2012
reply by the author on 10-Jan-2012
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Oh Ine! Let's go!!! Wouldn't it be great??? I hope I don't have to give it up. But with this deal of getting cut open and living where there are MORE mean you know what's, well, I may just quit. Why spend money on a horse you can't ride??? Ahhh. But, thank you for a great review. Love it!! xoxo! Susan
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Oh Susan don't give up on your horse yet. You might get fit enough to ride it again.
Comment from axelbeariter
This is quite a well written stretch of prose that at times has the same cadence as would an un-rhymed poem. Producing such a work takes a lot of writorial skill. Well done.
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This is quite a well written stretch of prose that at times has the same cadence as would an un-rhymed poem. Producing such a work takes a lot of writorial skill. Well done.
Comment Written 10-Jan-2012
reply by the author on 10-Jan-2012
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Hi Axel! Thank you so very much. I looked out at the moon tonight and it blinded me. Then I thought of how I always used to ride in the moonlight all the time, so, this story. SO depressing. But, your review has given me a smile, and that's worth it's weight in gold. Thank you. Susan
Comment from Spitfire
I knew immediately that the woman is you --stiff and sore. Although you mention elderly, so it's how you feel inside right now. I would guess you to be mid-forties?? Wrenching parallel between the woman and the mare--both longing for respite. A beautiful scene where the mare remembers, stands quiet and still for her mistress to mount. A poignant and hopeful last sentence. You still have the talent, girl. Just get back your health and move where it's warm.
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I knew immediately that the woman is you --stiff and sore. Although you mention elderly, so it's how you feel inside right now. I would guess you to be mid-forties?? Wrenching parallel between the woman and the mare--both longing for respite. A beautiful scene where the mare remembers, stands quiet and still for her mistress to mount. A poignant and hopeful last sentence. You still have the talent, girl. Just get back your health and move where it's warm.
Comment Written 09-Jan-2012
reply by the author on 10-Jan-2012
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hi Shari! Thank you so much...I am trying to do just that my friend. I really am. It's just going to take some time. I'm sorry I plunked down most of my money on this white elephant. Damn the economy. And me. Thank you tho, your kindness helps me keep trying. hug, Susan
Comment from Sasha
They still won't let me give you a well deserved 6 star rating for this one. This is so moving and the imagery captured and pulled me into the story. I can so relate to being old and tired and just wanting go back to a time when we were young. I just love how you seamlessly transform the woman into the young child and your last sentence "And Luna winked at Sleeping Sun, while she let the girl and filly play...brought tears to my eyes. Absolutely marvelous!
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They still won't let me give you a well deserved 6 star rating for this one. This is so moving and the imagery captured and pulled me into the story. I can so relate to being old and tired and just wanting go back to a time when we were young. I just love how you seamlessly transform the woman into the young child and your last sentence "And Luna winked at Sleeping Sun, while she let the girl and filly play...brought tears to my eyes. Absolutely marvelous!
Comment Written 09-Jan-2012
reply by the author on 10-Jan-2012
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Hi Smurphy!! hugs and hugs, for yet another very kind and encouraging note. I am just elated each time you enjoy something of mine. I sure hope you are okay, and getting your regular pc back to normal. These darned things are our connection. Just think, if we cease to be allowed the internet. It's coming. Love, Susan
Comment from Dave M
Susan,
This is an excellent short story about an old farm woman reliving her past. I enjoyed reading this shimmering post and couldn't find anything to criticize.
Dave
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Susan,
This is an excellent short story about an old farm woman reliving her past. I enjoyed reading this shimmering post and couldn't find anything to criticize.
Dave
Comment Written 09-Jan-2012
reply by the author on 10-Jan-2012
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Hi Dave! Thank you for a kind note...I appreciate your use of the word 'shimmering'...neat!! I really appreciate that. Susan
Comment from KinaSalad
Hi there Realist, Nice little short story here. Yeah, we all fantasize about going back to our youth and to ride a horse again. Do you know it is going to happen one day in the future? Thanks for sharing
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Hi there Realist, Nice little short story here. Yeah, we all fantasize about going back to our youth and to ride a horse again. Do you know it is going to happen one day in the future? Thanks for sharing
Comment Written 09-Jan-2012
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2012
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Hi Kina! Wow! Thank you for a great review...I hope you get to ride and enjoy life!! I'm waiting for health issues to go away????? HOPE, hope. AND for spring. Please accept my heartfelt thanks. SO glad you enjoyed this. Susan
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Hi Susan, whats your health issues? Colloidal Silver heals alot of health issues
Comment from Narvik
Geez, Susan, this was downright ethereal. Had an incredibly upliftng feel to it. I could really visualize The old woman riding going out to ride the swayback mare, and you suddenly depict her as a little girl on a filly.
Stellar work, Susan. Really lifted my spirits.
~ CJ
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Geez, Susan, this was downright ethereal. Had an incredibly upliftng feel to it. I could really visualize The old woman riding going out to ride the swayback mare, and you suddenly depict her as a little girl on a filly.
Stellar work, Susan. Really lifted my spirits.
~ CJ
Comment Written 09-Jan-2012
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2012
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Hey CJ!! Thank you so much!! I was watching the moon tonight ... and its so bright it's lighting up everything!! And too, desperately wishing I were a bit younger and out riding my horse! I am sending you a special hug for the extra stars~ Wow!! When may I expect a most enjoyable story from YOU???? :)) Your friend, susan
