Travelling to Nowhere
When your only option is no option at all63 total reviews
Comment from Shadow Pahn
Woah! Clearly something i shouldn't read at work. Your gritty story telling is amazing though. The movie in my head played it in black & white like that movie Sin City.
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Woah! Clearly something i shouldn't read at work. Your gritty story telling is amazing though. The movie in my head played it in black & white like that movie Sin City.
Comment Written 12-Jan-2012
reply by the author on 12-Jan-2012
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Yeah, definitely not a workplace read! Thanks for the feedback - I do try to write very visually, so I'm glad that came across.
Mike
Comment from Ntiwari
I like it..
Specially the Diary section..
Its good to capture the thoughts..
And overall idea behind this is niceee...
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I like it..
Specially the Diary section..
Its good to capture the thoughts..
And overall idea behind this is niceee...
Comment Written 12-Jan-2012
reply by the author on 12-Jan-2012
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Thank you. I'm glad you liked my piece.
Mike
Comment from Claire Dumont
This is one of those disturbing stories that you can't turn away from even if you want to.
You definitely met the requirement of putting the reader on edge.
Good luck in the contest!
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This is one of those disturbing stories that you can't turn away from even if you want to.
You definitely met the requirement of putting the reader on edge.
Good luck in the contest!
Comment Written 12-Jan-2012
reply by the author on 12-Jan-2012
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Thank you for your kind comments and feedback. I'm taking a break from writing nasty stories for a while after this :-)
Mike
Comment from rashi kumar
Really had to heed the warnings!
Very violent and disturbing story,
the clarity in your tone brings scenes live in front of us.
Very well-written,
a worthy entry!!!
Though and may be because its 'gruesome', I read it.
All the best!
reply by the author on 12-Jan-2012
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Really had to heed the warnings!
Very violent and disturbing story,
the clarity in your tone brings scenes live in front of us.
Very well-written,
a worthy entry!!!
Though and may be because its 'gruesome', I read it.
All the best!
Comment Written 12-Jan-2012
reply by the author on 12-Jan-2012
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Thank you, Rashi. Yes, this is certainly nasty, and I've had to take a break and write some light hearted pieces as a result!
Mike
Comment from JaphetMphande
Thank you so much. I have no complaints about the length. As long as its magic takes over my interest, I will go with you up to the last full stop.
The story reads well and I love the scene and thinking of this man at the rail station. I track his moves now.
The journey is interesting, not easy and as the character thinks, he is relying more on lucky to get home. The rescue from the wife ends in a fiasco. Too many problems for him, he is beaten up for trying to get his own transport to drive home.
The scene of the fight is expressed well with a mixture of some sense of humour. I like that! The man was in real trouble.
I have loved this story. It reads nice.
Thank you, you kept me smiling and laughing with the use of your words at some point.
reply by the author on 12-Jan-2012
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Thank you so much. I have no complaints about the length. As long as its magic takes over my interest, I will go with you up to the last full stop.
The story reads well and I love the scene and thinking of this man at the rail station. I track his moves now.
The journey is interesting, not easy and as the character thinks, he is relying more on lucky to get home. The rescue from the wife ends in a fiasco. Too many problems for him, he is beaten up for trying to get his own transport to drive home.
The scene of the fight is expressed well with a mixture of some sense of humour. I like that! The man was in real trouble.
I have loved this story. It reads nice.
Thank you, you kept me smiling and laughing with the use of your words at some point.
Comment Written 12-Jan-2012
reply by the author on 12-Jan-2012
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Thank you; I'm so glad you enjoyed the read :-)
Mike
Comment from jasmine 53
horror stories though horrify the readers but fans of horror stories love to go through it like ardent lovers no matter how blood curdling it is. i avoid reading horror fiction and could not dare to watch horror movies all alone but these stories still have charm to read. this story is interesting one and is well worded with suspense
reply by the author on 12-Jan-2012
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horror stories though horrify the readers but fans of horror stories love to go through it like ardent lovers no matter how blood curdling it is. i avoid reading horror fiction and could not dare to watch horror movies all alone but these stories still have charm to read. this story is interesting one and is well worded with suspense
Comment Written 12-Jan-2012
reply by the author on 12-Jan-2012
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Thank you, Jasmine. It was certainly quite unpleasant to write, but I knew it had to be violent to convey the depth of despair the character was facing. Thanks for reading :-)
Mike
Comment from Auroraboreal800
YES!! This story has the biggest level of violence, and this is something I donīt like, how ever, I have to admit the very good use of imagery, and the suspense in this dramatic tale...
GREAT job!!
:)
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YES!! This story has the biggest level of violence, and this is something I donīt like, how ever, I have to admit the very good use of imagery, and the suspense in this dramatic tale...
GREAT job!!
:)
Comment Written 12-Jan-2012
reply by the author on 12-Jan-2012
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Thank you :-). I'm grateful you could see past the violence, to the story beneath. Thanks for the great review.
Mike
Comment from oNray
This is a very well written story. Very well played out. Your descriptions are very vivid and numerous. Had me working to figure out where we were going in the story a number of times
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This is a very well written story. Very well played out. Your descriptions are very vivid and numerous. Had me working to figure out where we were going in the story a number of times
Comment Written 12-Jan-2012
reply by the author on 12-Jan-2012
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Thank you, oNray. I'm glad you appreciated the read.
Mike
Comment from Tonulak
This is probably one of the darkest things I've ever read. he rapesand beatings were graphically described as well as the strange surreal hoplessness. Very creepy
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This is probably one of the darkest things I've ever read. he rapesand beatings were graphically described as well as the strange surreal hoplessness. Very creepy
Comment Written 11-Jan-2012
reply by the author on 12-Jan-2012
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Thank you, Tonulak. It is hard going, I know, but I guess I was reaching for that. I had to write something silly and light afterwards!
Mike
Comment from JMonroe
This was a very well written story. I thoroughly enjoyed it, ESPECIALLY this part:
"The next thing I knew, I was sliding from the bonnet. I screamed when I landed on my rump, the pain bursting through to my core like an acid enema."
An acid enima? That is the best/worst visual EVER!
reply by the author on 11-Jan-2012
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This was a very well written story. I thoroughly enjoyed it, ESPECIALLY this part:
"The next thing I knew, I was sliding from the bonnet. I screamed when I landed on my rump, the pain bursting through to my core like an acid enema."
An acid enima? That is the best/worst visual EVER!
Comment Written 11-Jan-2012
reply by the author on 11-Jan-2012
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lol, thank you. Yes, that was quite a horrific, and yet horribly entertaining, thought when I had it. I'm glad you enjoyed the read :-)
Mike
