Breath of Life
Our Sustenance18 total reviews
Comment from DIS-illusioned
--Good picture art choice.
--Excellent 3-5-3 syllabic format.
--The message is so true too. Without breath--the essence of living--we wouldn't be sustained.
reply by the author on 11-Feb-2012
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--Good picture art choice.
--Excellent 3-5-3 syllabic format.
--The message is so true too. Without breath--the essence of living--we wouldn't be sustained.
Comment Written 01-Feb-2012
reply by the author on 11-Feb-2012
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thank you for review and comments...sue
Comment from playinaround
so few words that say so much! I am fascinated about this type of poem. Syllable 3-5-3. I think you wrote a wonderful poem here. Please let me know what type of poem is this...thank you
reply by the author on 14-Jan-2012
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so few words that say so much! I am fascinated about this type of poem. Syllable 3-5-3. I think you wrote a wonderful poem here. Please let me know what type of poem is this...thank you
Comment Written 13-Jan-2012
reply by the author on 14-Jan-2012
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thanks Jude? for your review much appreciated...the form of poetry is haiku my first attempt..if you click on READ at top of page next to home click on poetry dances...wealth of imformation on p[oetry forms and how to write them....at top also right hand side PROFILE click on then forums where you can read write get assistance from other members..regards sue
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I really appreciate the direction youve given me in navigating this site. thank you for taking the time.
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your welcome if you have any questions there are lots of people in the forum to help with anything...me too...sue
Comment from Dustybones
Nicely done. Makes me want to go back to church. Your love of Jesus shines in such a nice way hear. Especially since you have such limited syllables to get your message out to us.
God bless fan story for giving you a forum to express God.
reply by the author on 14-Jan-2012
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Nicely done. Makes me want to go back to church. Your love of Jesus shines in such a nice way hear. Especially since you have such limited syllables to get your message out to us.
God bless fan story for giving you a forum to express God.
Comment Written 13-Jan-2012
reply by the author on 14-Jan-2012
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thank you I really appreciate your review and comments and too we are lucky to have a great place to express ourselves...regards sue
Comment from michaelrandolph
Great choice of your picture incorporated into the spiritual subject of your poem. I really enjoy the short format of the haiku and think you have done a fabulous job with this.
reply by the author on 14-Jan-2012
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Great choice of your picture incorporated into the spiritual subject of your poem. I really enjoy the short format of the haiku and think you have done a fabulous job with this.
Comment Written 13-Jan-2012
reply by the author on 14-Jan-2012
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thank you for your positive comments and review much appreciated ... sue
Comment from adewpearl
Your poem is in excellent 3/5/3 form
excellent consonance of L sounds in life/living/all
and of soft S sounds in essence/sustains
beautiful pairing of poem and art to create a thoughtful message Brooke
reply by the author on 12-Jan-2012
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Your poem is in excellent 3/5/3 form
excellent consonance of L sounds in life/living/all
and of soft S sounds in essence/sustains
beautiful pairing of poem and art to create a thoughtful message Brooke
Comment Written 12-Jan-2012
reply by the author on 12-Jan-2012
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thanks Brooke for your comments..review...appreciated..sue
Comment from Joan E.
I admired your declaration of faith in this succinct 3-5-3 about 'air.' I think your title is effective along with your satori/comment line. Best wishes in the contest. -Joan
reply by the author on 11-Jan-2012
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I admired your declaration of faith in this succinct 3-5-3 about 'air.' I think your title is effective along with your satori/comment line. Best wishes in the contest. -Joan
Comment Written 11-Jan-2012
reply by the author on 11-Jan-2012
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thanks Joan for your encouraging review and comments appreciated sue....stepping out my comfort zone to experiment this year
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Good for you to stretch your wings! Enjoy- Joan
Comment from angel123
Your poem is very meaningful and powerful to the spirit. I enjoyed reading it. Your artwork choice adds to the essence of your poem. Good luck in the contest.
Angel123
reply by the author on 11-Jan-2012
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Your poem is very meaningful and powerful to the spirit. I enjoyed reading it. Your artwork choice adds to the essence of your poem. Good luck in the contest.
Angel123
Comment Written 10-Jan-2012
reply by the author on 11-Jan-2012
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thank you so much for your kind review and comments...sue
Comment from gazzagodbod
wow love this little haiku great presentation and fabulous poem good luck in the contest my friend should do well gazzagodbod
reply by the author on 11-Jan-2012
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wow love this little haiku great presentation and fabulous poem good luck in the contest my friend should do well gazzagodbod
Comment Written 10-Jan-2012
reply by the author on 11-Jan-2012
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thanks so much for reviewing my poem and positive feedback...sue
Comment from missy98writer
Poet,
your poem is extremely well written with beautiful imagery that paints a mental picture the readers head. The art work is gorgeous that you used. In your poem you used very good metaphor and great alliteration with the L and S words. You Haiku is in fine form with spot on syllable count and you adhered to the contest by using a form of air - and you used breath. I liked your metaphor: "essence of living." I enjoyed all your lines: ""Breath of life Essence of living Sustains all" In an economy of words you wrote much more. Your poem is a contender in the possible win in Haiku writing prompt. I wish you good luck in the contest with your excellent 3-5-3 Haiku poem. I'd recommend your poem to others to review. I encourage you to keep on writing with a creative pen, I bid you a blessed day.
Missy.
reply by the author on 11-Jan-2012
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Poet,
your poem is extremely well written with beautiful imagery that paints a mental picture the readers head. The art work is gorgeous that you used. In your poem you used very good metaphor and great alliteration with the L and S words. You Haiku is in fine form with spot on syllable count and you adhered to the contest by using a form of air - and you used breath. I liked your metaphor: "essence of living." I enjoyed all your lines: ""Breath of life Essence of living Sustains all" In an economy of words you wrote much more. Your poem is a contender in the possible win in Haiku writing prompt. I wish you good luck in the contest with your excellent 3-5-3 Haiku poem. I'd recommend your poem to others to review. I encourage you to keep on writing with a creative pen, I bid you a blessed day.
Missy.
Comment Written 10-Jan-2012
reply by the author on 11-Jan-2012
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Bless you for a detailed review and comments. I really appreciate the time you put into this...and too your encouragement...thanks so much..ran home third in comp...use prompts for my long standing writer's block...thanks so much...sue
Comment from sweetwoodjax
this is very well written, mystery writer, you did a great job writing this 11 syllable haiku about Jesus being the air that we breathe. i wish you the best of luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 11-Jan-2012
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this is very well written, mystery writer, you did a great job writing this 11 syllable haiku about Jesus being the air that we breathe. i wish you the best of luck in the contest.
Comment Written 10-Jan-2012
reply by the author on 11-Jan-2012
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thank you for your encouraging review...congratulations to you too..well done...sue
