While A Winter Storm Passes Outside
The night is almost perfect - but not quite.4 total reviews
Comment from Christina 201
This is the ultimate betrayal. Deliberate and knowing.
The surprise element in the story is excellent as the mention of the woman's previous betrayal gives you a false sense that all is well here until the end where you learn that all is not well.
The poem flows well and is memorable because of the shock element.
The setting reflects the storm that lies behind what seems like wedded bliss but in fact is stolen time.
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2012
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This is the ultimate betrayal. Deliberate and knowing.
The surprise element in the story is excellent as the mention of the woman's previous betrayal gives you a false sense that all is well here until the end where you learn that all is not well.
The poem flows well and is memorable because of the shock element.
The setting reflects the storm that lies behind what seems like wedded bliss but in fact is stolen time.
Comment Written 08-Jan-2012
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2012
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Thanks, Christina. Your review and kind words are certainly appreciated. (And welcome to FanStory.)
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You are welcome, and thank you for your welcome.
Comment from elliejean
I love the picture. I love the poem. The woman started out being betrayed. Then she finds someone that will betray someone else. She speaks of deep love. She knows nothing of it if she is willing to steal it from another. Great work.
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2012
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I love the picture. I love the poem. The woman started out being betrayed. Then she finds someone that will betray someone else. She speaks of deep love. She knows nothing of it if she is willing to steal it from another. Great work.
Comment Written 08-Jan-2012
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2012
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Thanks, elliejean. I loved your analysis of my poem & appreciated the nice comments.
Comment from Linda England Bonam
I did not see that ending coming at all. What a terrific unexpected twist. I really enjoyed reading this. It was very well written and very good to read.
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2012
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I did not see that ending coming at all. What a terrific unexpected twist. I really enjoyed reading this. It was very well written and very good to read.
Comment Written 07-Jan-2012
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2012
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Thanks, Linda. I do appreciate your taking the time for a review and those nice comments. Sounds as if you're having a difficult time right now. My thoughts are with both you and your mother. Good luck with your book & I hope your gift of writing will continue to be a beacon to ease all the rough spots in your life.
Comment from rchitwood
Your poem has an all too familiar ring to it. All too often the other woman turns into the other woman. your poem has good structure and smooth line flow. You have made a good choice on your photo. It goes well with your poem. Blessings Rita
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2012
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Your poem has an all too familiar ring to it. All too often the other woman turns into the other woman. your poem has good structure and smooth line flow. You have made a good choice on your photo. It goes well with your poem. Blessings Rita
Comment Written 07-Jan-2012
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2012
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Thank you, Rita, for reviewing my poem. It is so encouraging when someone else finds good things to say about what we've written.
