Night Stalker
meet a thousand years old vampire15 total reviews
Comment from Joan E.
I saw that this free verse needed just one more review to be recognized, and I was happy to oblige. I admired your taking on the persona of a old vampire and your use of the "hunter" simile and "bowels"/"underbelly" metaphors. -Joan
reply by the author on 18-Jan-2012
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I saw that this free verse needed just one more review to be recognized, and I was happy to oblige. I admired your taking on the persona of a old vampire and your use of the "hunter" simile and "bowels"/"underbelly" metaphors. -Joan
Comment Written 18-Jan-2012
reply by the author on 18-Jan-2012
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wow, thank you so much Joan for your kindness in helping to elevate my poem. there was more i wanted to write but i did not want it to be too long.
again thank you my friend,,,Jim
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That leaves you material for another poem! -Joan
Comment from adewpearl
I like this portrait of an ancient vampire with a conscience, who kills only to feed and hunts only among those he feels will be missed the least
excllent alliteration of bane and being
Love the repetition of some in the penultimate stanza
intense expression of emotion and vivid descriptive detail add to the mood of this rather haunting free-verse poem Brooke
reply by the author on 12-Jan-2012
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I like this portrait of an ancient vampire with a conscience, who kills only to feed and hunts only among those he feels will be missed the least
excllent alliteration of bane and being
Love the repetition of some in the penultimate stanza
intense expression of emotion and vivid descriptive detail add to the mood of this rather haunting free-verse poem Brooke
Comment Written 11-Jan-2012
reply by the author on 12-Jan-2012
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thanks brooke for taking time to read and review this poem,,,,,jim
Comment from Espresso momma
A very interesting thought of what a vampire may be thinking. Fortunantly there are none in my neighborhood. Thanks for the fun read.
reply by the author on 12-Jan-2012
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A very interesting thought of what a vampire may be thinking. Fortunantly there are none in my neighborhood. Thanks for the fun read.
Comment Written 10-Jan-2012
reply by the author on 12-Jan-2012
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thz espresso momma
Comment from Piggies Grandma
I enjoyed reading your poem very much Jim. It is cleverly written and very well thought out. I think it would be hard to live for so long and in such a way. I think you've captured this well in your poem.
reply by the author on 12-Jan-2012
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I enjoyed reading your poem very much Jim. It is cleverly written and very well thought out. I think it would be hard to live for so long and in such a way. I think you've captured this well in your poem.
Comment Written 09-Jan-2012
reply by the author on 12-Jan-2012
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thx for your generous review,,,,jim
Comment from cheyennewy
Hi Jim,
You have penned a marvelous poem and one I really like. I l love the short lines that are compelling and well crafted. I think living forever would be exhausting! Well done....chey
reply by the author on 12-Jan-2012
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Hi Jim,
You have penned a marvelous poem and one I really like. I l love the short lines that are compelling and well crafted. I think living forever would be exhausting! Well done....chey
Comment Written 09-Jan-2012
reply by the author on 12-Jan-2012
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i wouldn't want to be like my character. too long to hangout. thx for your kind review,,,,,jim
Comment from Veronica Grace
Reading your poem and seeing the man in the picture almost makes the possibility of a Vampire real. I hope it isn't so. Some believe in Zombies as well. Great work!
reply by the author on 12-Jan-2012
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Reading your poem and seeing the man in the picture almost makes the possibility of a Vampire real. I hope it isn't so. Some believe in Zombies as well. Great work!
Comment Written 08-Jan-2012
reply by the author on 12-Jan-2012
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i don't believe in either but i love to write about them. so much you can do with vampire poetry. thx for the great review,,,,jim
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
That is good imagery for writing how it might be for a vampire! Feeding on the less conspicuous, less troublesome, I can imagine a vampire going down that road. I enjoyed your poem, it is so different which gives it a freshness to read and review. Do vampires smoke? Good picture, he looks spooky! Great read. xsx
reply by the author on 12-Jan-2012
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That is good imagery for writing how it might be for a vampire! Feeding on the less conspicuous, less troublesome, I can imagine a vampire going down that road. I enjoyed your poem, it is so different which gives it a freshness to read and review. Do vampires smoke? Good picture, he looks spooky! Great read. xsx
Comment Written 08-Jan-2012
reply by the author on 12-Jan-2012
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funny they have sex, just not sure about the smoking thing. i know mine never do. thx for your generous comments and review,,,,,jim
Comment from October21
Lol at the vampire being a loner. Could use more depth of emotion to express his inner feelings- his loneliness. Great work on showing what being a vampire is about.
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Lol at the vampire being a loner. Could use more depth of emotion to express his inner feelings- his loneliness. Great work on showing what being a vampire is about.
Comment Written 08-Jan-2012
Comment from michaelrandolph
I don't pretend to be a poet, but this was a little cumbersome without each word flowing into the other. Kinda cut up, But I do like the basic plot of the poem. As I love writing horror, I look forward to more of your work. Not near enough horror based work on here.
reply by the author on 07-Jan-2012
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I don't pretend to be a poet, but this was a little cumbersome without each word flowing into the other. Kinda cut up, But I do like the basic plot of the poem. As I love writing horror, I look forward to more of your work. Not near enough horror based work on here.
Comment Written 07-Jan-2012
reply by the author on 07-Jan-2012
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i have a tendency to write some free verse in this style. just a different challenge of creation. some people will write like this others shun it. if you look into my portfolio you will find a lot of horror pieces. thank you for your review and taking the time to read it,,,,jim
Comment from Spiritual Echo
Great poem.
Terrific tone augumented by a superb presentation.
The form and substance are both well done,
Good read.
reply by the author on 12-Jan-2012
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Great poem.
Terrific tone augumented by a superb presentation.
The form and substance are both well done,
Good read.
Comment Written 07-Jan-2012
reply by the author on 12-Jan-2012
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thx for the excellent review,,,,jim
