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Lost memories

Hazy images remain in mind

29 total reviews 
Comment from Ekim777
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What on earth can you hope to find down memory lane, just blurred images struggling to transform themselves the longer they rest there. They are illusions that change each time with the telling of them. What feelings do you invest in them. They are false sentiments. Sentiments are feelings evoked by your minds; from senti meaning feeling and ment from mental concepts. They well up from the darkness of your unconscious and you try to breathe life into them. How can you breathe life into dead things. Now the moon is the symbol of our creative spirit. Why has it lost its charm? - EKim

 Comment Written 14-Jan-2012

reply by the author on 14-Jan-2012
    Thank you for the review.
    Well, its just indicative of a loss in the past and going down memory lane to find it in darkness.
    its a senryu format.
    Thanks!
Comment from bkbehera
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When true love is defeated, one would face the sickness of depression, even under full moon night. The writer has nicely expressed the depression caused by such events in limited framed wards. It is praiseworthy.

 Comment Written 14-Jan-2012

reply by the author on 14-Jan-2012
    Thank you so much for the kind words and an amazing review.
    :-)
Comment from Chrisfiore
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Hello b1h2o3, This is an excellent entry into the 5-7-5 contest. It is a difficult thing to create imagery with so few words, but I think you hit the mark with this one. Best to you in the contest. ;) Chrisfiore

 Comment Written 14-Jan-2012

reply by the author on 14-Jan-2012
    Thank you so much for the kind review and amazing words.
    :-)
Comment from Aveindha
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a very well written and descriptive 5-7-5. Very meloncholy and abit on the dark side, but very good. It creats good imagery. I really enjoyed this poem, very well done

 Comment Written 14-Jan-2012

reply by the author on 14-Jan-2012
    Thank you so much for an amazing review.
    :-)
    regards-
    b1h2o3
Comment from afcata22
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Aww the pain in this haiku is so obvious. It might have been a bad break-up, a long lost friend dissappeared or a demise in life, but life goes on. Time will heal all wounds and new strength will be found in new memories yet to come. Have hope, be strong!

 Comment Written 14-Jan-2012

reply by the author on 14-Jan-2012
    Thank for understanding the depth of the piece.
    Thanks a lot for an awesome review and for the kind words.
    :-)
Comment from Sally Carter
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What a very effective little poem. I am not usually a fan of these short forms, but I love the combination of actual and metaphoric images.
"Memory Lane" is such a familiar phrase, but how well you have sustained the picture. The lines feel very real and very vivid.
Best of luck in the contest voting.
Sally

 Comment Written 13-Jan-2012

reply by the author on 13-Jan-2012
    Thank you so much for the kind words and a wonderful review.
    :-)
Comment from marilyo
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A lovely 5-7-5 that brought back to me some sad memories of the past. The accompanying photo is perfect because it strengthens the mood of your piece. Great job!

 Comment Written 12-Jan-2012

reply by the author on 12-Jan-2012
    Thank you so much for the wonderful review and a six star rating.
    It is really motivating. Thank you. :-)
Comment from kiwigirl2821
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I've often said these short poems are the hardest to achieve. Every word has to count and make the exact impact to be effective. This one does a great job at just that. Nice work. xoxo Kiwi

 Comment Written 12-Jan-2012

reply by the author on 12-Jan-2012
    Thank you so much for the wonderful review.
    :-)
Comment from Gerry.Robertson
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Always a pleasure to read something this short yet something that contains so much. the picture was a good choice. i think all of us can relate to this at sometime in our lives, I certainly can, cheers

 Comment Written 12-Jan-2012

reply by the author on 12-Jan-2012
    Thank you so much for the appreciation and the wonderful review.
    Nice to hear that the readers can relate to it.
    :-)
    regards-
    b1h2o3
Comment from Galactia
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Quite a teary eyed. 5'7'5 poem with perfect syllable count.

GL in the contest.

Favourite line is...

Moon has lost its charm!

Regards
Tia
Galactia

 Comment Written 12-Jan-2012

reply by the author on 12-Jan-2012
    Thank you so much for the kind words and an amazing review.
    :-)