Off We Go To School
The first day at school.30 total reviews
Comment from Christina 201
This is lovely, perfect tranquillity and all is well.
Little children will be inspired by this poem to expect school to go well. As a rule of thumb if you want to maintain readers interest there will need to be an element of a problem introduced and resolved. So far you have done that with the question of "How will it be at school"
and "Will I be allowed to take that picture home?"
These are big deals to little children. It may not be enough for a whole book. Looking forward to seeing how you develop this. Excellent.
reply by the author on 11-Apr-2012
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This is lovely, perfect tranquillity and all is well.
Little children will be inspired by this poem to expect school to go well. As a rule of thumb if you want to maintain readers interest there will need to be an element of a problem introduced and resolved. So far you have done that with the question of "How will it be at school"
and "Will I be allowed to take that picture home?"
These are big deals to little children. It may not be enough for a whole book. Looking forward to seeing how you develop this. Excellent.
Comment Written 10-Apr-2012
reply by the author on 11-Apr-2012
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I am so pleased you liked this one, Christina, I wrote this one just before my granddaughter started school. I was pleased to see her come home with her painting, she said she was like Timmy and Tommy! I agree with what you say about an element of a problem as these do crop up all the time at school. I am trying to so this without frightening them. I thank you again for reading and reviewing my stories. xsx
Comment from misscookie
Aah this chaopter is so sweet I pray you are geting this story publish
You must share ity with the children
This is a fine book for them toi read for as they read it just like me the animals will be their friends
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2012
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Aah this chaopter is so sweet I pray you are geting this story publish
You must share ity with the children
This is a fine book for them toi read for as they read it just like me the animals will be their friends
Comment Written 22-Feb-2012
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2012
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You are my ego booster, misscookie! Thank you, you are so kind, I am so pleased you like these stories! xsx
Comment from Gungalo
This is so cute. I can imagine a little one reading it a just grinning. Your work with children's stories is amazing, Sandra. Literally amazing.
reply by the author on 15-Jan-2012
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This is so cute. I can imagine a little one reading it a just grinning. Your work with children's stories is amazing, Sandra. Literally amazing.
Comment Written 15-Jan-2012
reply by the author on 15-Jan-2012
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Thank you, Gungalo, I feel so honored receiing lovely reviews from you, a master at poetry. xsx
Comment from amada
This is a wonderful poem for children and about children. It reminds me so well of those years when we kids were small, running to and from the school bus. Wonderful reminder. Buenos dias!
reply by the author on 11-Jan-2012
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This is a wonderful poem for children and about children. It reminds me so well of those years when we kids were small, running to and from the school bus. Wonderful reminder. Buenos dias!
Comment Written 11-Jan-2012
reply by the author on 11-Jan-2012
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Muchas gracias, amada! Thank you so much for your lovely review, I am glad it brought back nice memories for you. xsx Sandra.
Comment from Gingersnapjennie
Totally loved this! It is well written, humorous, and something I can relate to. Very creative, and entertaining as well. I think I'll read it to my kids! It was also written with good sense, I guess I'm trying to say that it was a great read, and many things like this can be corny, but it is not. I'd say witty. :)
reply by the author on 11-Jan-2012
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Totally loved this! It is well written, humorous, and something I can relate to. Very creative, and entertaining as well. I think I'll read it to my kids! It was also written with good sense, I guess I'm trying to say that it was a great read, and many things like this can be corny, but it is not. I'd say witty. :)
Comment Written 11-Jan-2012
reply by the author on 11-Jan-2012
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Thank you again, Jennie, I hope your children enjoy it. xsx
Comment from rashi kumar
Oh! How sweet a story!
The little mouses!
The wonderful rhyming and a nice story telling,
very well-written! Add a cute and funny artwork to it,
will be so much fun together.
Pleasure to read and review!
reply by the author on 11-Jan-2012
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Oh! How sweet a story!
The little mouses!
The wonderful rhyming and a nice story telling,
very well-written! Add a cute and funny artwork to it,
will be so much fun together.
Pleasure to read and review!
Comment Written 11-Jan-2012
reply by the author on 11-Jan-2012
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Thank you, rashi, what a wonderful review. I do value reviews from you so much, thank you. xsx
Comment from rightforyou
Nice
Lesson for the little ones Great rhythmic lines using an animated voice. I enjoyed reading this out loud awesome tone The children will love this poem...Ron
reply by the author on 11-Jan-2012
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Nice
Lesson for the little ones Great rhythmic lines using an animated voice. I enjoyed reading this out loud awesome tone The children will love this poem...Ron
Comment Written 11-Jan-2012
reply by the author on 11-Jan-2012
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Thank you, Ron, you have no idea how much I value your reviews, I so love your work. Thank you. xsx
Comment from livelylinda
sandramitchell,
What a delightful poem for children! I especially liked the mixture of "students" - mice, rat, frog, squirrel, mole. And the use of manners is very clear and an important grace for children to learn. it is bright and shiney, positive and fun, shows respect for each other and family. It is a marvelous book for children to enjoy and learn from.
Keep up this brilliant writing, please!
livelylinda
reply by the author on 11-Jan-2012
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sandramitchell,
What a delightful poem for children! I especially liked the mixture of "students" - mice, rat, frog, squirrel, mole. And the use of manners is very clear and an important grace for children to learn. it is bright and shiney, positive and fun, shows respect for each other and family. It is a marvelous book for children to enjoy and learn from.
Keep up this brilliant writing, please!
livelylinda
Comment Written 11-Jan-2012
reply by the author on 11-Jan-2012
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Thank you again, Linda! I have just released 'Lost in the Woods' I hope you would let me know about that one, childrens poems are quite hard, but I do love writing them. xsx
Comment from Sophia Jolene
Very charming! Your verse is uncomplicated and comfortable to read aloud which, as a former teacher, I greatly appreciate. The last two lines of the third stanza seemed a little forced, but it didn't detract at all from the overall readability. I enjoyed the characters and look forward to reading more of your work.
Sophia
reply by the author on 06-Jan-2012
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Very charming! Your verse is uncomplicated and comfortable to read aloud which, as a former teacher, I greatly appreciate. The last two lines of the third stanza seemed a little forced, but it didn't detract at all from the overall readability. I enjoyed the characters and look forward to reading more of your work.
Sophia
Comment Written 06-Jan-2012
reply by the author on 06-Jan-2012
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Thank you, Sophia, I really appreciate your review. I will look again at the 3rd stanza. Its not until someone give a review like yours that I can look to improve. Thank you xsx
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You are very welcome! I am going to go back and read your first chapter. I am taken with your easy style which children will enjoy.
Comment from bellemarie
A children's poem that can easily be illustrated and made into a book. Is that your intention? A yellow school bus would have made a good art piece to include.
reply by the author on 06-Jan-2012
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A children's poem that can easily be illustrated and made into a book. Is that your intention? A yellow school bus would have made a good art piece to include.
Comment Written 06-Jan-2012
reply by the author on 06-Jan-2012
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Thank you for your very kind words, bellemarie, yes I am hopeful that my Hedgerow Capers will be good enough to be illustrated and turned into a childrens book. Its just that, hoping they are good enough! Thank you again for such a lovely review. xsx
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Believe. You are good enough.
