New Year Resolution #1
Avoid the following people16 total reviews
Comment from poetbear
Clever and well written.
Those who try to mold and control
Stomp on your heart and bleed your soul
All you write is very true
Let's see in 2012 what they do
reply by the author on 24-Jan-2012
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Clever and well written.
Those who try to mold and control
Stomp on your heart and bleed your soul
All you write is very true
Let's see in 2012 what they do
Comment Written 02-Jan-2012
reply by the author on 24-Jan-2012
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Thank you for your kind words and the six stars.
Steve
Comment from Inge_Meldgaard
Other than the occasional line with 9 syllables instead of 8, as I think you seem to be aiming for (I could be wrong of course), this is funny. I particularly like the second and third last verses :D But my goodness, what a long list of people to avoid, eh? Well done, and I'm smiling, so thank you. Inge
reply by the author on 24-Jan-2012
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Other than the occasional line with 9 syllables instead of 8, as I think you seem to be aiming for (I could be wrong of course), this is funny. I particularly like the second and third last verses :D But my goodness, what a long list of people to avoid, eh? Well done, and I'm smiling, so thank you. Inge
Comment Written 02-Jan-2012
reply by the author on 24-Jan-2012
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Thanks, Inge.
Steve
Comment from Giddy Nielsen-Sweep
I would say 'Yo' and 'Bro', Steve. And as far as the new year's resolution goes, 'what he said.' It's a great list, no doubt fully endorsed by many on the site. Ingenious rhyming as usual, and great subject. Giddy
reply by the author on 24-Jan-2012
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I would say 'Yo' and 'Bro', Steve. And as far as the new year's resolution goes, 'what he said.' It's a great list, no doubt fully endorsed by many on the site. Ingenious rhyming as usual, and great subject. Giddy
Comment Written 01-Jan-2012
reply by the author on 24-Jan-2012
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Thank you, Giddy.
Steve
Comment from the blue pixel
I ticked off your list as those I agreed with Steve and I think I have snitched them all. This is a brilliant idea for a poem written in your perfect style but try as you night, you won't attract my "resolution's curses". It's hard to find an original poem on this subject but when I found this one of yours, I did just that. xx Pix
reply by the author on 24-Jan-2012
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I ticked off your list as those I agreed with Steve and I think I have snitched them all. This is a brilliant idea for a poem written in your perfect style but try as you night, you won't attract my "resolution's curses". It's hard to find an original poem on this subject but when I found this one of yours, I did just that. xx Pix
Comment Written 01-Jan-2012
reply by the author on 24-Jan-2012
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Thanks, Pix.
Steve
Comment from KiwiGal
What about Ho-ho-ho!? And what's wrong with "Yo" anyway....?
You took us round the world with that one; I'm sure there are a couple of in-house (or in-Oz) references I missed.
And what's wrong with a rugby player trying to score..... unless with a Who and not a What.
I'll have to read the newspaper more thoroughly, I can see. In the meantime, as usual, I'm being entertained just by reading you. HNY.
reply by the author on 24-Jan-2012
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What about Ho-ho-ho!? And what's wrong with "Yo" anyway....?
You took us round the world with that one; I'm sure there are a couple of in-house (or in-Oz) references I missed.
And what's wrong with a rugby player trying to score..... unless with a Who and not a What.
I'll have to read the newspaper more thoroughly, I can see. In the meantime, as usual, I'm being entertained just by reading you. HNY.
Comment Written 01-Jan-2012
reply by the author on 24-Jan-2012
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Thank you.
Haven't been on much - too much happening.
Flights booked back to NZ for 9th March - nice little house in the country outside Whangarei. Will probably have to get a job, but not worrying about that yet.
Steve
Comment from Piggies Grandma
I enjoyed reading your poem very much steve. It is cleverly written and very well thought out. I agree with many of the things you have written, especially the "Yo"...lol.
reply by the author on 24-Jan-2012
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I enjoyed reading your poem very much steve. It is cleverly written and very well thought out. I agree with many of the things you have written, especially the "Yo"...lol.
Comment Written 01-Jan-2012
reply by the author on 24-Jan-2012
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Thank you.
Steve
Comment from artemis53
Very cute. I liked it. It turns the idea of New Year's Resolutions around. Instead of committing to do something, you've shown the opposite. Perhaps I should turn my energies in another direction of things NOT to do ;)
reply by the author on 24-Jan-2012
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Very cute. I liked it. It turns the idea of New Year's Resolutions around. Instead of committing to do something, you've shown the opposite. Perhaps I should turn my energies in another direction of things NOT to do ;)
Comment Written 01-Jan-2012
reply by the author on 24-Jan-2012
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Thank you.
Steve
Comment from Porscheslayer
I enjoyed reading this poem because it made me smile. I think your list is very much like mine because I found myself nodding in agreement at each of the people you wish to avoid.
The poem itself was well structured, good rhyming and rhythm and put together.
A really good job!
reply by the author on 24-Jan-2012
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I enjoyed reading this poem because it made me smile. I think your list is very much like mine because I found myself nodding in agreement at each of the people you wish to avoid.
The poem itself was well structured, good rhyming and rhythm and put together.
A really good job!
Comment Written 01-Jan-2012
reply by the author on 24-Jan-2012
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Thank you.
Steve
Comment from Tiny Owl
This was a great piece that kept me laughing! I have a list similar to this which include men who shop for women at Wal--mart (what are they thinking?) Loved it, thanks for sharing.
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This was a great piece that kept me laughing! I have a list similar to this which include men who shop for women at Wal--mart (what are they thinking?) Loved it, thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 01-Jan-2012
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Thank you.
Steve
Comment from wiljacro
HI! kiwisteveh.Your poem has a good flow and is full of laughs,I really enjoyed reading it. I would, however, advise you to watch your back for a few weeks as I'm sure there are one or three people out there who may just be hoping to "bump" into you,literally,so walk with one eye over your shoulder for the time being!wiljacro.
reply by the author on 24-Jan-2012
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HI! kiwisteveh.Your poem has a good flow and is full of laughs,I really enjoyed reading it. I would, however, advise you to watch your back for a few weeks as I'm sure there are one or three people out there who may just be hoping to "bump" into you,literally,so walk with one eye over your shoulder for the time being!wiljacro.
Comment Written 01-Jan-2012
reply by the author on 24-Jan-2012
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Thank you.
Steve
