For the Birds
Viewing comments for Chapter 10 "Wayward Bluebird"Poems about those winged gifts from above.
15 total reviews
Comment from Glasstruth
You've woven a magical tale of a bluebird. The first stanza had me laughing at the bed pan and the bird pecking a Fred's head. Great imagination. Loved it! Les
reply by the author on 11-Jan-2012
  |
You've woven a magical tale of a bluebird. The first stanza had me laughing at the bed pan and the bird pecking a Fred's head. Great imagination. Loved it! Les
Comment Written 11-Jan-2012
reply by the author on 11-Jan-2012
-
Glad you enjoyed this funny tale. I appreciate your taking time to read and review. Elaine
Comment from Aveindha
Beautiful poem. It touches me, and makes me glad that the old folks in this home have a friend from God to sing to them and bring them joy each day. Nice work
reply by the author on 11-Jan-2012
|
Beautiful poem. It touches me, and makes me glad that the old folks in this home have a friend from God to sing to them and bring them joy each day. Nice work
Comment Written 11-Jan-2012
reply by the author on 11-Jan-2012
-
I am glad you enjoyed this poem. Thanks so much for a great review. Elaine
Comment from Chaos65
Nursing homes have many blue residents, not all of them are birds.
Anyway prefectly readable poem, carry on writing :)
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
reply by the author on 10-Jan-2012
 |
Nursing homes have many blue residents, not all of them are birds.
Anyway prefectly readable poem, carry on writing :)
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 09-Jan-2012
reply by the author on 10-Jan-2012
-
Thanks for reviewing. Elaine
Comment from Queexpressions
This was a nice poem although I am only 42 I take comfort in knowing that such a thing could happen at a place that seems like the end of the road. I make me feel happy!
reply by the author on 10-Jan-2012
|
This was a nice poem although I am only 42 I take comfort in knowing that such a thing could happen at a place that seems like the end of the road. I make me feel happy!
Comment Written 09-Jan-2012
reply by the author on 10-Jan-2012
-
Thanks for reviewing.Elaine
Comment from size17
What a fun poem! That blue bird sure is a quirky fella. The humor here is great. From landing in a bed pan to deciding to stay for the food you kept the tone really light.
The little aside about fred s head has me torn. It's such a great moment but if it never comes back it seems wasted . Maybe just one more line "except Fred he hates that bird " Great work though.
reply by the author on 10-Jan-2012
|
What a fun poem! That blue bird sure is a quirky fella. The humor here is great. From landing in a bed pan to deciding to stay for the food you kept the tone really light.
The little aside about fred s head has me torn. It's such a great moment but if it never comes back it seems wasted . Maybe just one more line "except Fred he hates that bird " Great work though.
Comment Written 09-Jan-2012
reply by the author on 10-Jan-2012
-
I like your suggestion. Thanks for a great review. Elaine
Comment from gazzagodbod
love this little poem mermaids my friend superb presentation and loved the picture must read some more of your work i loved it gazza
reply by the author on 05-Jan-2012
|
love this little poem mermaids my friend superb presentation and loved the picture must read some more of your work i loved it gazza
Comment Written 05-Jan-2012
reply by the author on 05-Jan-2012
-
I am honored by your review. Thanks for taking time to read. Elaine
Comment from elspeth glenn
Very charming. Beautiful imagery and a lovely story. I love the comedy of the bird pecking at Fred's head, particularly as it contrasts with the sweet ending.
Bravo!
Elspeth
reply by the author on 04-Jan-2012
|
Very charming. Beautiful imagery and a lovely story. I love the comedy of the bird pecking at Fred's head, particularly as it contrasts with the sweet ending.
Bravo!
Elspeth
Comment Written 04-Jan-2012
reply by the author on 04-Jan-2012
-
I appreciate your reading and enjoying this bluebird poem! Elaine
Comment from patsolstad
What a lovely poem! I don't know if it's fiction or non-fiction, but it's a great story. I love the image of the bird landing in the bedpan...and then pecking at Fred's head. I wonder if you meant to have a space after 'to stay.' The lines seem sort of 'squooshed' at the end. Excellent work!
reply by the author on 04-Jan-2012
|
What a lovely poem! I don't know if it's fiction or non-fiction, but it's a great story. I love the image of the bird landing in the bedpan...and then pecking at Fred's head. I wonder if you meant to have a space after 'to stay.' The lines seem sort of 'squooshed' at the end. Excellent work!
Comment Written 04-Jan-2012
reply by the author on 04-Jan-2012
-
Thanks for a great review. I'll have to recheck the lines at the end. Elaine
Comment from adewpearl
By the end of the first stanza I'm already laughing at the aburdity of a blue bird in a nursing home bedpan LOL
What a lovely story of how the staff and residents welcome this bluebird and enjoy her joyful music :-) Brooke
reply by the author on 31-Dec-2011
|
By the end of the first stanza I'm already laughing at the aburdity of a blue bird in a nursing home bedpan LOL
What a lovely story of how the staff and residents welcome this bluebird and enjoy her joyful music :-) Brooke
Comment Written 31-Dec-2011
reply by the author on 31-Dec-2011
-
Thanks for reading about this delightful bird. Elaine
Comment from Allison78
I really love this very beautiful and fun poem you have written here! It is funny but very sweet and touching at the same time! Great job on this poem!
reply by the author on 31-Dec-2011
|
I really love this very beautiful and fun poem you have written here! It is funny but very sweet and touching at the same time! Great job on this poem!
Comment Written 31-Dec-2011
reply by the author on 31-Dec-2011
-
Thanks for reading and enjoying. Elaine
