Polish
A Lack Lustre Sonnet30 total reviews
Comment from psalmist
Ah, this is the time of year when I don't think I will get caught up on my reviews, sigh. I'm so glad I was able to read this sonnet, though. Excellent form. I enjoyed the metaphors you used throughout: from polishing and shining, to song lyrics. How sad and how true that there are just some people who will not and cannot be pleased, no matter what we do. Your last line did make me chuckle as it had the quintessential jester humor I have come to enjoy. Linda
reply by the author on 20-Dec-2011
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Ah, this is the time of year when I don't think I will get caught up on my reviews, sigh. I'm so glad I was able to read this sonnet, though. Excellent form. I enjoyed the metaphors you used throughout: from polishing and shining, to song lyrics. How sad and how true that there are just some people who will not and cannot be pleased, no matter what we do. Your last line did make me chuckle as it had the quintessential jester humor I have come to enjoy. Linda
Comment Written 20-Dec-2011
reply by the author on 20-Dec-2011
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Many thanks Linda. You just can't please some. Glad you enjoyed.
Cheers Phillippa xoxo
PS Happy Holidays
Comment from ephraim crud, COS.
i think this a very polished piece,
Phillippa, bravo!
my kinda sonnet, and one with which
i can relate to, very easily.
i hear the music, and it sounds like
Bells! whoop-whoop! thank you for
sharing. love and hugs, xxx, eph.
reply by the author on 20-Dec-2011
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i think this a very polished piece,
Phillippa, bravo!
my kinda sonnet, and one with which
i can relate to, very easily.
i hear the music, and it sounds like
Bells! whoop-whoop! thank you for
sharing. love and hugs, xxx, eph.
Comment Written 19-Dec-2011
reply by the author on 20-Dec-2011
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Ooh I think you are a very polished reviewer my friend.
Thanks so much eph.
Glad you can hear my music droning on! LOL
Cheers and warm hugs
Closet xoxo
Comment from Ankh
We all have cracks in our veneers hun. The flaws make us unique. This is a great poem. I read it twice just to get it all in. Lovely work hun :-)~
Seth x
reply by the author on 20-Dec-2011
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We all have cracks in our veneers hun. The flaws make us unique. This is a great poem. I read it twice just to get it all in. Lovely work hun :-)~
Seth x
Comment Written 19-Dec-2011
reply by the author on 20-Dec-2011
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Thanks Seth. I know.
Merry Christmas
CPJ x
Comment from Dougspoetry
Some people just can never be pleased, guess they'll just have to get over it. Great sonnet with good rhyme and meter. YOU SHINE ALL THE TIME!
Be Blessed!
Doug
reply by the author on 20-Dec-2011
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Some people just can never be pleased, guess they'll just have to get over it. Great sonnet with good rhyme and meter. YOU SHINE ALL THE TIME!
Be Blessed!
Doug
Comment Written 18-Dec-2011
reply by the author on 20-Dec-2011
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Wow, what a sterling review Douglas... thanks my friend.
YOU shine so brightly too.
Cheers Closet xoxo
PS Have a blessed Christmas.
Comment from Lastamen
Oh, the draining, debilitating attitude of ingratitude. It sucks the life out of any situation and extinguishes the flame of passion and effort. This is a well conceived sonnet that merits discussion and deeper consideration.
Till the last amen.
reply by the author on 20-Dec-2011
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Oh, the draining, debilitating attitude of ingratitude. It sucks the life out of any situation and extinguishes the flame of passion and effort. This is a well conceived sonnet that merits discussion and deeper consideration.
Till the last amen.
Comment Written 18-Dec-2011
reply by the author on 20-Dec-2011
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Thanks so much and yes...sucks the life out. I appreciate the supportive review and also your fanship.
Have a very Merry Christmas.
Phillippa xoxo
Comment from Writingfundimension
You've paired the perfect words with a situation I've grappled with for years to varying degrees with different people. I particularly loved: 'According to your caustic point of view...My lyrics hardly ever fit your song.' I found myself nodding in agreement with much of this sonnet and I think it's a superb entry in the contest, p. Good luck! Love ya, Bevver
reply by the author on 20-Dec-2011
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You've paired the perfect words with a situation I've grappled with for years to varying degrees with different people. I particularly loved: 'According to your caustic point of view...My lyrics hardly ever fit your song.' I found myself nodding in agreement with much of this sonnet and I think it's a superb entry in the contest, p. Good luck! Love ya, Bevver
Comment Written 18-Dec-2011
reply by the author on 20-Dec-2011
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Ooooh Bevvalicious, what a Bevvarrific review. This is definitely applicable to friendships etc of all kinds...Thanks for the sixer rating and wonderful support.
I hope to try and get up to speed over the holidays...have a safe and blessed Christmas sweety and I thankyou for all your support this year.
Cheers Phillippa xoxoxo
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You are so very welcome, Phillippa. If I wasn't so busy squandering all my sixes in the first 48 hours of getting them, I'd have more to give your work. You are an amazing poet. And, I think of you often when I look at my refrigerator and see the teeerific magnet frame I have there. Love ya, Bev
Comment from Piggies Grandma
I enjoyed reading your poem very much closetpoetjester. It is cleverly written and very well thought out. I'm sure most of us have a few cracks in our veneer.
reply by the author on 20-Dec-2011
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I enjoyed reading your poem very much closetpoetjester. It is cleverly written and very well thought out. I'm sure most of us have a few cracks in our veneer.
Comment Written 18-Dec-2011
reply by the author on 20-Dec-2011
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Haha yes we do...thanks PG I appreciate your thoughts.
Have a great xmas.
Closet xo
Comment from Earl of Oxford
OK, P, I know you're a card, but is the text SUPPOSED to be blank? Do I miss a subtle profound message here, or have I gone blind. No it's not tha latter as I can still see my cigs and beer. LMAO
earl
ADDED AFTER EDIT - This is a brilliantly flowing sonnet, Phillippa. The only thing missing is a clear turn/shift in the 3rd stanza (mybe check out my profile which lists some sonnet requirements as I undestand them, AND as 'manicblue' added.
You say it's not bio, but I bet is is partly. If not, you have a wonderful insight into one not appreciated and constantly criticised.
Loads of inspired lines with top class metaphors:
'polish in my shine' - you're not from Poland are you? Just joking, as I didn't read it that way and it's just an afterthought and me trying to be a smart-arse!
'My lyrics hardly ever fit your song'
'Pure vitriol shall flow as you exhale
And then the great metaphor summed up in the last line. - TRULY excellent!
earl x
reply by the author on 18-Dec-2011
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OK, P, I know you're a card, but is the text SUPPOSED to be blank? Do I miss a subtle profound message here, or have I gone blind. No it's not tha latter as I can still see my cigs and beer. LMAO
earl
ADDED AFTER EDIT - This is a brilliantly flowing sonnet, Phillippa. The only thing missing is a clear turn/shift in the 3rd stanza (mybe check out my profile which lists some sonnet requirements as I undestand them, AND as 'manicblue' added.
You say it's not bio, but I bet is is partly. If not, you have a wonderful insight into one not appreciated and constantly criticised.
Loads of inspired lines with top class metaphors:
'polish in my shine' - you're not from Poland are you? Just joking, as I didn't read it that way and it's just an afterthought and me trying to be a smart-arse!
'My lyrics hardly ever fit your song'
'Pure vitriol shall flow as you exhale
And then the great metaphor summed up in the last line. - TRULY excellent!
earl x
Comment Written 18-Dec-2011
reply by the author on 18-Dec-2011
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Oh shit, sorry, you caught me between editing and I f**ked up and forgot to change colour. Its good to go now just like your beer and durries.
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'durries' - is that Oz for cigs? We used to call em 'fags' though I don't use the term now in case people think I'm 'gay' - as in, "I need to take a tug on my fag". :-)
Just ADDED to my original review.
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Yes its ghetto talk me thinks! Hahaha on the "fag" thing...over here they say "drag on a fag"...my goodness what possible connitations does that one conjure up I wonder? LOL
Thanks for the extension.
On my review. LOL
You are right, along with Brooke. There is no clear shift...its just deadpan monotonous all the way through...I thought about rearranging the last stanza, but I don't think there is a real turn in any of the lines.
Might have to rework the last stanza...oh well, it wouldnt win anyway.
Cheers P
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PS I understand the turn thingy but this kind of wrote itself and now I have to try and find some way to turn it around. I'll do a full revise and go check out your notes...obviously you are a master and I could do with some tutelage. Thanx for the heads up earl...and pEARLer review.
P x
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It's only quite recently I became aware of the 'turn' requirement, but I know realise it does add something. Hey, I bet 99% of readers wouldn't know a 'turn' from an urn, or an Ern(Y) - best rhymes I could come up with, :-) x
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Oh I know a turn from an earn! LOL
Haha
That was a bit of a stretch pal!
LMFAO
I had you figured for a Sonnet champion.
Please don't burst my button.
I need a mentor.
Kidding.
I can hold my own.
I felt this didn't have the turn...Brooke confirmed it.
Then you.
Shit.
Stuff the pair of you! LOL
Now I'll HAVE to change it.
Sokay.
I sure appreciate the time you've taken from your busy schedule to help me.
Your a real pearl earl.
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Oh, I AM a 'sonnet champion', by the way. LOL x
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I fucking know that you ninny.
Bwahaha
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I've been called far worse than that. Of COURSE I know you appreciate my sonneteering brilliance. Haha! x
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Ah but of course Swearly Early...
or is it Sterly Early?
Haha...don't even get me started...I got a ton more rhymers.
LOL
x
PS I JUST appreciate your brilliance earl...especially your faultless meter...there is something about the way it rolls of your tongue like honey.
If your sonneteering engineering can do that, which it DOES, then you've got it my friend. In a big way...good for you.
I'm still getting my mojo...or my "turn" as it were...
Haha
Comment from Chris Tee
This sounds as if you are saddened by some one here old sport.
I see nothing wrong and no cracks in your veneer pretty girl.
Well done with a splendid poem
reply by the author on 18-Dec-2011
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This sounds as if you are saddened by some one here old sport.
I see nothing wrong and no cracks in your veneer pretty girl.
Well done with a splendid poem
Comment Written 18-Dec-2011
reply by the author on 18-Dec-2011
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No one here Chris...I hadn't thought it might be interpreted that way...this was more about relationships. Not necessarily mine in biography though...I always exaggerate. You just have to guess where...haha
Cheers and thanks Closet xo
Comment from Spitfire
A great metaphor. I like: my lyrics hardly ever fit your song.
This could be a mother and daughter or husband and wife. Some people are anal retentive. Don't you hate perfectionists! How boring.
reply by the author on 18-Dec-2011
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A great metaphor. I like: my lyrics hardly ever fit your song.
This could be a mother and daughter or husband and wife. Some people are anal retentive. Don't you hate perfectionists! How boring.
Comment Written 17-Dec-2011
reply by the author on 18-Dec-2011
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Thanks Shari, I liked that line too...you are right this could have different interpretations.
I must say as a Virgo I strive for perfection but don't always get it and have to be content with falling short.
I just have a very critical partner and I've taken that concept and really run with it. He isn't that bad...I've managed to stick around 21 years. LOL
Closet xo
