Lonely Hearts Meet
Viewing comments for Chapter 44 "part 1 Chapter 14"Anna and her son escape from a man-made Hell.
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Comment from NaughtieScribe
Oh crap please don't let this animal hurt the baby. For too many reasons besides Michael's well being. I truly hope this is the boy and do that the baby played with in a later chapter I initially read. One way to find out.
reply by the author on 04-Aug-2012
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Oh crap please don't let this animal hurt the baby. For too many reasons besides Michael's well being. I truly hope this is the boy and do that the baby played with in a later chapter I initially read. One way to find out.
Comment Written 03-Aug-2012
reply by the author on 04-Aug-2012
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Thank you.
Comment from Mariea
Good morning Barbara. Another well written chapter that kept my interest. As usual, character portrayal and dialogue are realistic. Looking for the next one.
Hugs Mia
reply by the author on 15-Dec-2011
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Good morning Barbara. Another well written chapter that kept my interest. As usual, character portrayal and dialogue are realistic. Looking for the next one.
Hugs Mia
Comment Written 15-Dec-2011
reply by the author on 15-Dec-2011
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Aislinge
Nicely done, Barbara. The scenes play out well. Love the ending, and the cliffhanger. Will Troy get there in time?
Thanks for a great read.
reply by the author on 15-Dec-2011
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Nicely done, Barbara. The scenes play out well. Love the ending, and the cliffhanger. Will Troy get there in time?
Thanks for a great read.
Comment Written 15-Dec-2011
reply by the author on 15-Dec-2011
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from bob cullen
You write with the skill of a professional. Your two main characters are well defined and their dialogue is real.
I also loved the cliff hanger you left readers with.
I would think your novel has mass appeal and I wish you well in your search for an agent or a publisher. Have you had any luck so far?
reply by the author on 15-Dec-2011
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You write with the skill of a professional. Your two main characters are well defined and their dialogue is real.
I also loved the cliff hanger you left readers with.
I would think your novel has mass appeal and I wish you well in your search for an agent or a publisher. Have you had any luck so far?
Comment Written 15-Dec-2011
reply by the author on 15-Dec-2011
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from bhogg
Well, Barbara, thanks so much for leaving us all stranded! One of the things that I've always admired about your writing is your ability to create tension. I'm going to have to learn from you. Always warm regards, Bill
reply by the author on 15-Dec-2011
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Well, Barbara, thanks so much for leaving us all stranded! One of the things that I've always admired about your writing is your ability to create tension. I'm going to have to learn from you. Always warm regards, Bill
Comment Written 14-Dec-2011
reply by the author on 15-Dec-2011
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Thank you of the kind revie.
Comment from Shirley McLain
Another very good chapter which I enjoyed reading. I'm anxious to read the rest of it. You are very talented. Great job.
reply by the author on 14-Dec-2011
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Another very good chapter which I enjoyed reading. I'm anxious to read the rest of it. You are very talented. Great job.
Comment Written 14-Dec-2011
reply by the author on 14-Dec-2011
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from ScarletClearwater
Oh my goodness. No more disaster shall befall this woman! What a terrifying end. Great use of dialogue still. I am reading bits, but it looks like Anna and Troy may have a thing going? Great job with the storytelling.
reply by the author on 14-Dec-2011
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Oh my goodness. No more disaster shall befall this woman! What a terrifying end. Great use of dialogue still. I am reading bits, but it looks like Anna and Troy may have a thing going? Great job with the storytelling.
Comment Written 14-Dec-2011
reply by the author on 14-Dec-2011
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from axelbeariter
She set Michael inside the walker with a graham cracker./That's a little awkward, like setting both Michael and the graham cracker inside the walker. Re-write: She set Michael inside the walker after handing him a graham cracker, or the other way around.----The dog headed toward Michael./Great hook.----Well written as usual, except that you might want to reduce the number of internal dialogue instances. Just record those that are important to an impending event, or reveal a personality trait that would come off awkwardly if highlighted any other way. The mundane stuff should be left out.
reply by the author on 14-Dec-2011
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She set Michael inside the walker with a graham cracker./That's a little awkward, like setting both Michael and the graham cracker inside the walker. Re-write: She set Michael inside the walker after handing him a graham cracker, or the other way around.----The dog headed toward Michael./Great hook.----Well written as usual, except that you might want to reduce the number of internal dialogue instances. Just record those that are important to an impending event, or reveal a personality trait that would come off awkwardly if highlighted any other way. The mundane stuff should be left out.
Comment Written 13-Dec-2011
reply by the author on 14-Dec-2011
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I will tkae care of that sentence. Thank you for your honest review.
Comment from G.B. Smith
Hi again Barbara
Well chapter fourteen is another riveting write. Your characters are well lined out. Anna sure has drama going on and Troy seems to be the man of the hour. Good that her notices her butt, I would have I am sure. Now with a big dog heading her way what next? This is a real cliff hanger
Bear
reply by the author on 14-Dec-2011
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Hi again Barbara
Well chapter fourteen is another riveting write. Your characters are well lined out. Anna sure has drama going on and Troy seems to be the man of the hour. Good that her notices her butt, I would have I am sure. Now with a big dog heading her way what next? This is a real cliff hanger
Bear
Comment Written 13-Dec-2011
reply by the author on 14-Dec-2011
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from abbasjoy
I truly like the suspense that is portrayed in these chapters, but I also am so pleased that you are actually addressing the topic of Domestic abuse and violence. It needs to be told and you are doing a great job of addressing it and bringing awareness to this horrible practice.
Thank you for doing your part and not keeping quiet.
reply by the author on 14-Dec-2011
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I truly like the suspense that is portrayed in these chapters, but I also am so pleased that you are actually addressing the topic of Domestic abuse and violence. It needs to be told and you are doing a great job of addressing it and bringing awareness to this horrible practice.
Thank you for doing your part and not keeping quiet.
Comment Written 13-Dec-2011
reply by the author on 14-Dec-2011
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I thank you for the kind review.
