Simple Expectations
Nature in its finest degree.16 total reviews
Comment from Frankeddy
Good 5-7-5 poem, proper syllable count.
Nice choice of accompanying picture in good bright setting.
Poem paints it's own picture in the mind.
Well done. Good luck. Frankeddy
reply by the author on 10-Dec-2011
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Good 5-7-5 poem, proper syllable count.
Nice choice of accompanying picture in good bright setting.
Poem paints it's own picture in the mind.
Well done. Good luck. Frankeddy
Comment Written 10-Dec-2011
reply by the author on 10-Dec-2011
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Thank you, I appreciate your opinion.
Comment from Rama Rao
Since you asked for suggestions I'd say you start with the last line, ie By the river side. Secondly, butterflies don't hang around on the floor. Try another location like branches or leaves to suit the number of syllables required.
reply by the author on 10-Dec-2011
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Since you asked for suggestions I'd say you start with the last line, ie By the river side. Secondly, butterflies don't hang around on the floor. Try another location like branches or leaves to suit the number of syllables required.
Comment Written 10-Dec-2011
reply by the author on 10-Dec-2011
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Starting with the last line could of been just as well, possibly better. Secondly, however the butterflies were flapping around the floor by the river. But point taken, thank you.
Comment from oNray
This is a good poem for a crippled poem. Had it been allowed to grow , be as big as it takes for the writer to finish it not the reader it would have been nice. No offence, I just feel that rules were not meant for poetry
reply by the author on 10-Dec-2011
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This is a good poem for a crippled poem. Had it been allowed to grow , be as big as it takes for the writer to finish it not the reader it would have been nice. No offence, I just feel that rules were not meant for poetry
Comment Written 10-Dec-2011
reply by the author on 10-Dec-2011
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Okay well how could I of done better ? I am interested in doing better, I am an inspiring writer. All info would be great.
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my friend you did good you were within the rules of the contest- It is my hang up on rules
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I believe I know what you mean I wasn't to keen on the terms either, but thanks again
Comment from rightforyou
Very peaceful poem, like the photo that complements your words soothing and beautiful, I might suggest using some different colors for your type and backround giving more "POP" and impact the work just a suggestion good luck ...Ron
reply by the author on 10-Dec-2011
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Very peaceful poem, like the photo that complements your words soothing and beautiful, I might suggest using some different colors for your type and backround giving more "POP" and impact the work just a suggestion good luck ...Ron
Comment Written 10-Dec-2011
reply by the author on 10-Dec-2011
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I'm kind of new to this, the color scheme could of been changed but I didnt know how. Thank you for the words of wisdom.
Comment from Modee
Very cool. Short. To the point. Beautiful picture. Looks pretty cool to me. Thanks for the peaceful post. Good luck in the contest. :)
reply by the author on 10-Dec-2011
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Very cool. Short. To the point. Beautiful picture. Looks pretty cool to me. Thanks for the peaceful post. Good luck in the contest. :)
Comment Written 10-Dec-2011
reply by the author on 10-Dec-2011
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Thank you very much I'm rather new to this and I'm just thrilled to use this site. Its quite exciting
Comment from adewpearl
Lovely pairing of photo and poem in your well-composed 5/7/5 piece
good alliteration of forest floor/flap
I also like the pairing of butterflies/river side
you create a vivid visual, which in turn creates a serene mood :-) Brooke
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reply by the author on 10-Dec-2011
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Lovely pairing of photo and poem in your well-composed 5/7/5 piece
good alliteration of forest floor/flap
I also like the pairing of butterflies/river side
you create a vivid visual, which in turn creates a serene mood :-) Brooke
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Comment Written 10-Dec-2011
reply by the author on 10-Dec-2011
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Thank you so much, I have read what you have posted, and you write quite well. Any helpful words from the the leading author would be great. Thanks again.
