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Sestine poem about the illustion of one's destiny17 total reviews
Comment from axelbeariter
mets out God's justice/Did you mean to write metes instead of mets. Mets are the nemesis to my Marlins in the National League.----Science, poets, philosophy seeks truth./Since you are dealing with three concepts, seek would be more appropriate in this context than seeks.----A well written work.----Sestine poem about the illustion of one's destiny/I am not familiar with sestine. Could you have meant Sistine? Plus, illustion should read illusion.
reply by the author on 07-Dec-2011
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mets out God's justice/Did you mean to write metes instead of mets. Mets are the nemesis to my Marlins in the National League.----Science, poets, philosophy seeks truth./Since you are dealing with three concepts, seek would be more appropriate in this context than seeks.----A well written work.----Sestine poem about the illustion of one's destiny/I am not familiar with sestine. Could you have meant Sistine? Plus, illustion should read illusion.
Comment Written 07-Dec-2011
reply by the author on 07-Dec-2011
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It was actually met, not mets and in reference to baseball, our city has the Orioles and until next year, I hang my head low. A sestine is known by many names and you can look it up in Wikipedia. My favorite term is sextine as I consider such an endeavor like this an ancient version of sexting. LOL
I thank you very much for the compliments,humor and this review. Mike
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Take heart. The Orioles will rise again. After DC was left naked at RFK stadium, I switched my allegiance to the Os, until I wandered to Florida to join my own kind--the ancient ones. Now, we may get Pugols. Axel
Comment from Owusu-Yeboah
Good, a very thought-provoking one it is. The characters in you are many, if I permited, for that reason it sounds absurd, like you said. You know what, there is a reason for us to buy what you are putting accross.
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Good, a very thought-provoking one it is. The characters in you are many, if I permited, for that reason it sounds absurd, like you said. You know what, there is a reason for us to buy what you are putting accross.
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Comment Written 07-Dec-2011
reply by the author on 07-Dec-2011
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Not buy,though I can use the graphic file to make photographic prints of this. To digest and consider, as people in power, with a cause or idea, end up going errant. I thank you for reviewing this. Mike
Comment from RuralFrights
A well read, well written work indeed. I like this type of poetry which I always read three times. Flavor; details; meaning. This was certainly "dense" (not in a bad sense), full of paradoxical implications. I was always taught that a paradox is where truth can be found. Logic conflicts and is, thus, transcended.
And I appreciate your lengthy notes as that is a sign (to me, at least), of a man with a cause and a passion....this work required some explanation as it could be used in a college classroom's discussion. You gave that to us.
Thanks for a different type of read and wise insights.
Tommy
reply by the author on 07-Dec-2011
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A well read, well written work indeed. I like this type of poetry which I always read three times. Flavor; details; meaning. This was certainly "dense" (not in a bad sense), full of paradoxical implications. I was always taught that a paradox is where truth can be found. Logic conflicts and is, thus, transcended.
And I appreciate your lengthy notes as that is a sign (to me, at least), of a man with a cause and a passion....this work required some explanation as it could be used in a college classroom's discussion. You gave that to us.
Thanks for a different type of read and wise insights.
Tommy
Comment Written 07-Dec-2011
reply by the author on 07-Dec-2011
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Wow, what compliments and review. It put my head in the clouds, and it also amuses me as I was never in college outside of photography school, yet felt it important to study from my father's college books. Believe it or not, the notes usually shows how I thought out a poem. I thank you very much for the compliments and this review. Mike
Comment from sweetwoodjax
this is very well written, mike, a great job writing this poem about the paradox created by some religious leaders, i love the detailed author notes. should be metes out God's judgment
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this is very well written, mike, a great job writing this poem about the paradox created by some religious leaders, i love the detailed author notes. should be metes out God's judgment
Comment Written 07-Dec-2011
reply by the author on 07-Dec-2011
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Ah, as best I try ... Making changes isn't easy as I have to post a Jpeg file, and have to go into the last photoshop file and work within layers. Considering I had four changes to make this way, I am getting very good at it. I did the best I could with mets, met and metes and just couldn't find it, so I thank you for pointing me in the right direction. I tahnk you very much for your compliments and this review. Mike
Comment from randomzed
You leave me wondering if I've experienced greatness, or passed time with a fool.
There are some great turns of phrase in your poem.
My problem is I don't see a logical, coherent development.
I want to like it, but I can't get into it.
Could be my problem, not yours.
Did you know that Obama has said, "The presidency has a way of making you want to pray."
reply by the author on 07-Dec-2011
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You leave me wondering if I've experienced greatness, or passed time with a fool.
There are some great turns of phrase in your poem.
My problem is I don't see a logical, coherent development.
I want to like it, but I can't get into it.
Could be my problem, not yours.
Did you know that Obama has said, "The presidency has a way of making you want to pray."
Comment Written 07-Dec-2011
reply by the author on 07-Dec-2011
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Sometimes the best poems in my mind sort of mess with you a bit as you struggle to understand them. When I came on board here, one poetess' poems were so hard to understand, it was months before I would review her and ended up taping them to the walls at work. Once I understood their, my poetic world opened up. With discussions of poets, very often they purposefully refuse to explain them.
I enjoyed this review and thank you for taking the time to read my poem and review it. All reviews help me out. Mike
Comment from TammyGail
Wow... Mike this was some poem correct me if I'm wrong but didn't you write that amazing 9/11 poem .. Anyways this poem screams brilliance really it does - you did a stunning job writing this it was interesting indeed and truthful your imagery smacks the reader to pay att damnit.. and the presentation as a whole was stunning - great notes at the bottom - I'm a bit pissed I haven't any six stars left but fear not I'm sure you will be getting plenty for this wonder.. Great work on this poem
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Wow... Mike this was some poem correct me if I'm wrong but didn't you write that amazing 9/11 poem .. Anyways this poem screams brilliance really it does - you did a stunning job writing this it was interesting indeed and truthful your imagery smacks the reader to pay att damnit.. and the presentation as a whole was stunning - great notes at the bottom - I'm a bit pissed I haven't any six stars left but fear not I'm sure you will be getting plenty for this wonder.. Great work on this poem
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Comment Written 07-Dec-2011
reply by the author on 07-Dec-2011
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No need to get pissed as the mention of the desire to bestow a sixer is compliments enough. Yes, I did the 9/11 poem which was more beatnic and less stodgy then this piece. I thank you very much for the compliments, reviews and mention of a sixer. Mike
Comment from cheyennewy
Wow, Mike,
This is a magnificent poem which is presented with class. Love your pic! Your author's notes are interesting and helped me to understand the poem. You have told this poetic story well and I enjoyed it from the first line to the last. I am sure you worked hard to write this Sestine poem. It is well crafted, intelligent and has a gentle flow that pulls the lines down the page with ease. Bravo....chey
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Wow, Mike,
This is a magnificent poem which is presented with class. Love your pic! Your author's notes are interesting and helped me to understand the poem. You have told this poetic story well and I enjoyed it from the first line to the last. I am sure you worked hard to write this Sestine poem. It is well crafted, intelligent and has a gentle flow that pulls the lines down the page with ease. Bravo....chey
Comment Written 07-Dec-2011
reply by the author on 07-Dec-2011
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It took a lot of love to bear this child! I enjoyed this review and thank you for it and the compliments, not to mention the wonderful rating. Mike
I did work at it, but it was more a time issue then a difficulty one. The form was wonderful of the idea and I like the puzzle nature to get it to work out. Mike
