Par-a-dox-si-Mor-on
Sestine poem about the illustion of one's destiny17 total reviews
Comment from Jean Lutz
I am behind on reviewing as my efforts have been focused on the class that I am taking. So glad that I have a six star left to adorn this composition. Lots of labor put into this and you performed it well. For me it presents contrast between gods and God.
reply by the author on 10-Dec-2011
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I am behind on reviewing as my efforts have been focused on the class that I am taking. So glad that I have a six star left to adorn this composition. Lots of labor put into this and you performed it well. For me it presents contrast between gods and God.
Comment Written 10-Dec-2011
reply by the author on 10-Dec-2011
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Wow! I appreciate the genereous rating, but I had to evaluate the amount of work I actually put into this. It did take about three days of solid thinking, which kept me occupied at work. Most of the work was in studying the form and getting the order right. The first stanza took me about three hours to figure out and that gave me my words. Pretty much figured the rest of the poem would be like that, three hours per stanza and I could only hope I didn't have to change one of those words...
I did put my heart and soul into this, and luckily it not only worked out, the rest only took a couple hours to pen, a couple hours to work the graphic illustration and research the public domain status. The most frustrating part was in scanning my drover which formed the background. It was ridiculous it took me an hour to figure out how to scan it without the wrinkles, and took both hands and I think my little toe to click the mouse so it would scan. About an hour to put it all together, and another half to go back into the photoshop file and redo the layers. Now that got my goat.
In the end, I was very happy about the amount of time it too, because I knew the reality. This poem became special for me as well, because I enjoy going back and rereading it. Perhaps some might view it as me picking on the Jews, I really feel that I picked right as their culture and race provided me with a depth of meanings, I doubt I other wise would have obtained. Love it when a plan comes together!
I thank you so much for your wonderful rating and review, as well as the compliments too. Mike
Comment from peggles
My goodness
This is far too deep for me to comment on its content also not being in America I have no real knowledge of your remarks concerning your country
But
I can see this is composed in an exceptional manner
You state your beliefs clearly
I should think you will get some interesting feedback from your fellows
It was interesting
most informative and an intensely thought provoking read
reply by the author on 10-Dec-2011
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My goodness
This is far too deep for me to comment on its content also not being in America I have no real knowledge of your remarks concerning your country
But
I can see this is composed in an exceptional manner
You state your beliefs clearly
I should think you will get some interesting feedback from your fellows
It was interesting
most informative and an intensely thought provoking read
Comment Written 10-Dec-2011
reply by the author on 10-Dec-2011
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This is more my observation from history then views or statements. In a sense, I used the history of the Jewish people to convey it, which worked out wonderfully for me. Ezra Pound was an American poet that lived in fascist Itally during WWII and I think he used his radio program to advance what he was trying to convey in his writings, but like Tokyo Rose, he fell into that catagory of war time treason. This poem is designed to me more a caution for today's modern world, as we too fall prey to desires and causes, usually in many small manors.
I'll be honest, the depth of both thought and emotion relayed in this poem surprised even me, and a sign that I like is when people have to come back to it and read it again as some part of it haunts the reader to reach deeper in themselves.
I love this review and thank you for it and your wonderful compliments as well. Mike
Comment from c_lucas
Jesus thirty three years on earth changed the world. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for an easy read.
reply by the author on 10-Dec-2011
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Jesus thirty three years on earth changed the world. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for an easy read.
Comment Written 09-Dec-2011
reply by the author on 10-Dec-2011
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He surely did! I see a personal challenge in the example he set for life and committment. I thank you very much for the compliments and this review. Mike
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You're welcome, Mike. Charlie
Comment from The Stranger
wow! this really is intense my friend, not jst the poem (which is excelllent throughout) but aldso in the comprehensive notes too
reply by the author on 09-Dec-2011
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wow! this really is intense my friend, not jst the poem (which is excelllent throughout) but aldso in the comprehensive notes too
Comment Written 09-Dec-2011
reply by the author on 09-Dec-2011
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I thank you for both the compliments and this review. You are right, it is a fairly intense poem. Mike
Comment from WilliamDeen
Your poem, Par-a-dox-si-Mor-on, is thought provoking to say the least. Your poem tells a paradox created by some religious and political leaders.
reply by the author on 08-Dec-2011
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Your poem, Par-a-dox-si-Mor-on, is thought provoking to say the least. Your poem tells a paradox created by some religious and political leaders.
Comment Written 08-Dec-2011
reply by the author on 08-Dec-2011
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I thank you very much for your compliments and review or my work. Mike
Comment from gypsynet
a brave, bold write that takes the reader
to a world of polarity and makes her reflect on
the real meaning/ message of your theme about how
one can perceive people and concepts based on
old belief-programming.. strong images capture
the essence of such topic with use of imagism
and great phrasing... a unique write
reply by the author on 08-Dec-2011
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a brave, bold write that takes the reader
to a world of polarity and makes her reflect on
the real meaning/ message of your theme about how
one can perceive people and concepts based on
old belief-programming.. strong images capture
the essence of such topic with use of imagism
and great phrasing... a unique write
Comment Written 08-Dec-2011
reply by the author on 08-Dec-2011
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I enjoyed reading the review and thank you for it and the compliments. Mike
Comment from Matoshka
Your poem is deeply reflective and makes one really think about things. I found your Author's notes to be equally exceptional with all the information. I choose to believe that God is still in control, like a chess board these players or pieces will soon fall and the King will win. I enjoyed your presentation with the art as well. Perfect in presentation. I enjoyed this very much. Blessings
reply by the author on 08-Dec-2011
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Your poem is deeply reflective and makes one really think about things. I found your Author's notes to be equally exceptional with all the information. I choose to believe that God is still in control, like a chess board these players or pieces will soon fall and the King will win. I enjoyed your presentation with the art as well. Perfect in presentation. I enjoyed this very much. Blessings
Comment Written 08-Dec-2011
reply by the author on 08-Dec-2011
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I really like what you wrote in this review and thank you for it and the compliments, I feel that is true as well, yet I still believe it is up to us. Mike
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You are so welcome Mike. I agree some of its up to us, It would be nice if all would come together and fix it. Time will tell. I enjoyed this very much. Blessings
Comment from rchitwood
Very interesting and I must say I too believe in God and with the way the world is going a lot more needs to believe in a more powerful being to keep us straight.Your poem is very good and has good structure and smooth flow.Your photo compliments your poem well..Blessings Rita
reply by the author on 08-Dec-2011
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Very interesting and I must say I too believe in God and with the way the world is going a lot more needs to believe in a more powerful being to keep us straight.Your poem is very good and has good structure and smooth flow.Your photo compliments your poem well..Blessings Rita
Comment Written 07-Dec-2011
reply by the author on 08-Dec-2011
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I always tell people you live your life for others, then you pay more attention on avoiding sin. I enjoyed this review and thank you for it and the compliments. I am surprised I didn't get the criticism on the compiled illustration that I expected, especially with Obama's mug in it, as many people are very touchy about that subject. Mike
Comment from Yvon
I found the poem interesting. Especially at the start where you have the Romans more powerful than God because of the fear in the hearts of the weak. Much said. Good poen.
reply by the author on 07-Dec-2011
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I found the poem interesting. Especially at the start where you have the Romans more powerful than God because of the fear in the hearts of the weak. Much said. Good poen.
Comment Written 07-Dec-2011
reply by the author on 07-Dec-2011
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This was sort of a trail for this moron to follow. Ironically it was the mention of Ezra Pound that made me realized the various interrelationshps, and repeating themes which was a delight that deeded substantial depth and progression to the piece. In this case, I think the Romans were used a bit but there was fear and perception of Jesus becoming more powerful then them. Then I noted that Rome found the same fate as Israel in time. I thank you very much for your compliments and this review. Mike
Comment from Judian James
Hi there Mike. I've always known this form as a "sestina"
You took on a formidable topic and handled it well. Very clever play on words/ title! I think the reason there have been so many hits and so few reviews may be due to 1. The first line could lose a lot of people and 2. The length. IF your reader is confused by the first line, they're going to move on. I think that may be what happened here. The third line in stanza one has a typo, "mets" should be "met" AND, in stanza three, you introduced a new word "power" in your last line, rather than "protect" which is the word used throughout. Otherwise, very deep, obviously thought out, true to form (except for the one "power-protect" mistake I mentioned)
You made very good use of enjambment and stayed on message
reply by the author on 07-Dec-2011
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Hi there Mike. I've always known this form as a "sestina"
You took on a formidable topic and handled it well. Very clever play on words/ title! I think the reason there have been so many hits and so few reviews may be due to 1. The first line could lose a lot of people and 2. The length. IF your reader is confused by the first line, they're going to move on. I think that may be what happened here. The third line in stanza one has a typo, "mets" should be "met" AND, in stanza three, you introduced a new word "power" in your last line, rather than "protect" which is the word used throughout. Otherwise, very deep, obviously thought out, true to form (except for the one "power-protect" mistake I mentioned)
You made very good use of enjambment and stayed on message
Comment Written 07-Dec-2011
reply by the author on 07-Dec-2011
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I sort of took Ezera Pound's attitude which a lot of poets share, and posible the reason they never commented much on their works, "Then them chew on it and the meaning for a while." I actually love poems I can't review and have to think about it for a while.
For me, it is the sestina form which made this poem possible, and how it messed with the discussion group a bit. You are very right and I am thank you for picking up on the nit and of cousre this was a graphical file and my computer had to crash during correcting this because of a memory/blue screen error, but I am used to it and the bad timing.
It is an honot to have you review this and very appreciated. I thank you very much for reading this, the correction and the compliments. Mike
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my pleasure Mike
