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Lonely Hearts Meet

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Anna and her son escape from a man-made Hell.

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Comment from bob cullen
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I love reading your work, it is so professional and instructive.

You create great tension, your characters are tight and the dialogue is always spot on.

And then at the end you provide a hook that demands we read the next instalment.

You are a really good writer, one of the best on the site

 Comment Written 05-Dec-2011


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    Thank you for your kind review and encouraging words.
Comment from skye
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Strong scenes, with good dialogue, great imagery, and the final rush from the restaurant makes the reader want to hang on to find out more.
I shall go back and catch up.
Well done.

 Comment Written 05-Dec-2011


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Comment from Mara del Mar
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Wow! The story even guarda your surprises. The persecution of Ana and Michael to continue. I wait that whole have a end happy. A chapter very interesting, congrats.

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Comment from AprilShower
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Could they possibly still be harassing her? Will it continue forever? I know there are people like them. I often wonder what made them the way they are. What makes them think they should get away with being so mean and hateful? I am anxious to find out if this is coming from that same family. Good story.

April

 Comment Written 05-Dec-2011


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reply by AprilShower on 06-Dec-2011
    You're welcome, Barbara.
Comment from RazberryBullet
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Good thing Troy is interested in Anna and wants to protect her. How awful to to continually fear someone trying to hurt both you and your child.

Well done!

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Comment from JW
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One cannot help but wonder who it might have been on the phone. And why would they be calling?

You did a great job in writing this. JW

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Comment from Christopher.Colliers
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Very well written thank you for sharing this wonderful piece of writing on this website. I look forward to reading more from you. Good job and well done.

-Christopher Lee Colliers

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Comment from Nanashirley
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It is another good chapter. I had a friend who had the phone calls. She finally could not take it anymore and packed her kids in the car one night to run. She fell asleep behind the wheel and crashed. They all lived but finally her family believed her. Too bad it took an accident.

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Comment from purrfect tale
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More, more, more!! I know I've said this before, but I'm never ready to quit reading when I get to the end of your chapters. I found a couple missing commas in this one.

Good(,) it's still locked.

After I hung up(,) I heard a loud muffler."

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Comment from jadapenn
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Hi Girlfriend, I liked this chapter. There was plenty of action and tension all the way. I bet that Bobby has one of his cousins stalking poor Anna. The poor girl never seems to be left in peace.
Well written. Luv jada

 Comment Written 05-Dec-2011


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