Joy
When I met my wife.76 total reviews
Comment from MelissaBickel
Bob I so agree with you here. I am finding love again after almost eight years of divorce and this time around it's wonderful.....
I love how your poem captures your travel, your going through life but really not as calm or happy as it might seem to others.
reply by the author on 03-Dec-2011
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Bob I so agree with you here. I am finding love again after almost eight years of divorce and this time around it's wonderful.....
I love how your poem captures your travel, your going through life but really not as calm or happy as it might seem to others.
Comment Written 03-Dec-2011
reply by the author on 03-Dec-2011
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Thanks so much, Missy. Happy Holidays! Bob
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Bob many happy wishes sent your way. Be warm and safe this Holiday season
Comment from Gert sherwood
Hello Bob, I hope you dear wife read you wonderful tribute to her.
These lines impressed me the most--
Precise, yet vague,
such chameleon paths were traveled.
God's plan hurled me onward
to discover your world in mine
at the brink of my fading sunset.
Gert
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Hello Bob, I hope you dear wife read you wonderful tribute to her.
These lines impressed me the most--
Precise, yet vague,
such chameleon paths were traveled.
God's plan hurled me onward
to discover your world in mine
at the brink of my fading sunset.
Gert
Comment Written 03-Dec-2011
reply by the author on 03-Dec-2011
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Thanks so much, Gert. coming from a superb poet like you, I am elated for sure. Blessings, my friend. Happy Holidays...Bob
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smiles did you read my PM
Gert
Comment from BethShelby
This is a beautiful romantic poem. You've used wonderful alliteration such as "mineless masquerades" and "misty moonlight" Your descriptions are great and the message of finding love is inspiring.
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This is a beautiful romantic poem. You've used wonderful alliteration such as "mineless masquerades" and "misty moonlight" Your descriptions are great and the message of finding love is inspiring.
Comment Written 03-Dec-2011
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Thanks so much, beth. Coming from the writer you are, I am encouraged. Happy Holidays. Bob
Comment from N.K. Wagner
Oh, Bob, that's a breathtaking tribute. As always, you give us entire character sketches in a couple of well chosen words. Your imagery is rich, but understated, effortless. Alliteration is everywhere. I've often enjoyed these qualities in your prose. I had no idea you're such a talented poet. Pure pleasure to read. :) Nancy
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Oh, Bob, that's a breathtaking tribute. As always, you give us entire character sketches in a couple of well chosen words. Your imagery is rich, but understated, effortless. Alliteration is everywhere. I've often enjoyed these qualities in your prose. I had no idea you're such a talented poet. Pure pleasure to read. :) Nancy
Comment Written 03-Dec-2011
reply by the author on 03-Dec-2011
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Thanks so much, Nancy. I do so appreciate this review. Happy Holidays! Bob
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And to you and Linney. Any more good lottery tickets? :D Nancy
Comment from AprilShower
This is a melancholy free verse which flows very well. It is about someone who found his bruised soul loved by another who really cared. Such a person who has found this kind of love and returns it is truly blessed. Thank you for sharing this poem with us, Bob.
April
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This is a melancholy free verse which flows very well. It is about someone who found his bruised soul loved by another who really cared. Such a person who has found this kind of love and returns it is truly blessed. Thank you for sharing this poem with us, Bob.
April
Comment Written 03-Dec-2011
reply by the author on 03-Dec-2011
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Thank you, April. I am so glad you reviewed this one. Blessings and Happy Holiday, Bob
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You're welcome, Bob, and thank you for the blessings and the wish for a Happy Holiday, and the same to you, too.
April
Comment from Mary Ann MCPhedran
A good and well written poem it was quite romantic and the words were beautiful.Good imagery in your poem and the picture blends well with the poem. Mary
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A good and well written poem it was quite romantic and the words were beautiful.Good imagery in your poem and the picture blends well with the poem. Mary
Comment Written 03-Dec-2011
reply by the author on 03-Dec-2011
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Thanks so much, Mary. I do appreciate your time and comment. Happy Holiday! Bob
Comment from cheyennewy
Hi Bob,
This is such a beautiful poem about meeting your wife. I knew the same kind of love but now it is lost lost from me and I never searched for it again. You have chosen expressive words that warm my heart and I'm sure your wife loves this. An accomplished free verse which I read more than once. If only I had a six for you. Well done, chey
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Hi Bob,
This is such a beautiful poem about meeting your wife. I knew the same kind of love but now it is lost lost from me and I never searched for it again. You have chosen expressive words that warm my heart and I'm sure your wife loves this. An accomplished free verse which I read more than once. If only I had a six for you. Well done, chey
Comment Written 03-Dec-2011
reply by the author on 03-Dec-2011
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Well, coming from you, I feel so encouraged, Chey. Thanks so much. Happy Holidays! Bob
Comment from Writingfundimension
Thank for sharing this deeply romantic tribute to your life with Joy. You relate well the feelings of loss and despair and how God brought you and another bruised soul together. I don't think I've read poetry by you before, so this revealed another side of your great writing skills to me. Kindest regards, Bev
reply by the author on 03-Dec-2011
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Thank for sharing this deeply romantic tribute to your life with Joy. You relate well the feelings of loss and despair and how God brought you and another bruised soul together. I don't think I've read poetry by you before, so this revealed another side of your great writing skills to me. Kindest regards, Bev
Comment Written 03-Dec-2011
reply by the author on 03-Dec-2011
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Hi, Bev. Thanks so much. Yes, I have a lot of poetry in my portfolio, it's just that since I started the novel,I haven't found extra time. Sometimes I get inspired though and try one. Thanks again, Happy Holidays! Bob
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You're welcome, Bob. Happy Holidays to you as well! Bev
Comment from rama devi
What a wonderfully deep reflective write with strong originality and style in phrasing. Rich in emotional charge and a wonderful tribute to your wife and shared love.
A few spag issues and suggestions to note--
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Mirth disguised a wounded soul
hollow, and determined
through my thespian eyes.
the comma seems oddly placed. Suggest
Mirth disguised a wounded soul,
hollow and determined
through my thespian eyes.
*
A vacant heart searched for answers,
yet none were found nor given.
the comma is optional (since the line break gives pause) and I am not sure, but I think NOR might work better as OR.
Woeful years plagued mindless
masquerades in misty moonlit charades.
WOW--impressive alliteration on M and wonderful internal rhyming.
Empty nights and deserted beaches
callously taunted my reverie.
Vividly descriptive for both internal and external landscapes. ;-)
Precise, yet vague,
such chameleon paths were traveled.
Wonderful phrasing--chameleon paths
Love the irony of: precise, yet vague
God's plan hurled me onward
to discover your world in mine
at the brink of my fading sunset.
Wonderfully phrased. Lovely!
Your smile caressed my bruised soul
like velvety fingers of mercy.
Sweeeeet. lovely.
Your wondrous blue eyes
coaxed me with everlasting
calm . . . and serene love.
tender and lovely.
She must adore this poem!~lucky you --two.
Happy to revisit--please let me know.
Warmest smiles,
rd
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What a wonderfully deep reflective write with strong originality and style in phrasing. Rich in emotional charge and a wonderful tribute to your wife and shared love.
A few spag issues and suggestions to note--
*
Mirth disguised a wounded soul
hollow, and determined
through my thespian eyes.
the comma seems oddly placed. Suggest
Mirth disguised a wounded soul,
hollow and determined
through my thespian eyes.
*
A vacant heart searched for answers,
yet none were found nor given.
the comma is optional (since the line break gives pause) and I am not sure, but I think NOR might work better as OR.
Woeful years plagued mindless
masquerades in misty moonlit charades.
WOW--impressive alliteration on M and wonderful internal rhyming.
Empty nights and deserted beaches
callously taunted my reverie.
Vividly descriptive for both internal and external landscapes. ;-)
Precise, yet vague,
such chameleon paths were traveled.
Wonderful phrasing--chameleon paths
Love the irony of: precise, yet vague
God's plan hurled me onward
to discover your world in mine
at the brink of my fading sunset.
Wonderfully phrased. Lovely!
Your smile caressed my bruised soul
like velvety fingers of mercy.
Sweeeeet. lovely.
Your wondrous blue eyes
coaxed me with everlasting
calm . . . and serene love.
tender and lovely.
She must adore this poem!~lucky you --two.
Happy to revisit--please let me know.
Warmest smiles,
rd
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The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 03-Dec-2011
reply by the author on 03-Dec-2011
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Thanks a lot, rama. Much appreciated...Happy Holidays...Bob
Comment from Scornwell
Bob, I am no poet, but I enjoyed this poem about finding true love in ones later years. I thought it was well written and emotionally charged. I hope you are enjoying the holiday season, my friend, and I would like to take this opportunity to wish you and yours a Merry Christmas and a Happy New Year.
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Bob, I am no poet, but I enjoyed this poem about finding true love in ones later years. I thought it was well written and emotionally charged. I hope you are enjoying the holiday season, my friend, and I would like to take this opportunity to wish you and yours a Merry Christmas and a Happy New Year.
Comment Written 03-Dec-2011
reply by the author on 03-Dec-2011
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Same to you, Steve. Thanks for reading this one. I don't do much poetry as you probably noticed. LOL..Happy Holidays to you also. Bob
