Lonely Hearts Meet
Viewing comments for Chapter 42 "Part three Chapter 13"Anna and her son escape from a man-made Hell.
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Comment from poetstar
This was pleasant and interesting to read. I think it is glad she moved on from her abusive relationship. She is a good and loving mom. Hope she enjoyed her bubble bath. Poet Star
reply by the author on 29-Nov-2011
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This was pleasant and interesting to read. I think it is glad she moved on from her abusive relationship. She is a good and loving mom. Hope she enjoyed her bubble bath. Poet Star
Comment Written 29-Nov-2011
reply by the author on 29-Nov-2011
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from fairy77
Excellent there are some happy times for Anna as the horrible husband has been put behind bars.I like the way you always have a meal it's a great way to incoporate discussion.Good suspense!beth fairy77.
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Excellent there are some happy times for Anna as the horrible husband has been put behind bars.I like the way you always have a meal it's a great way to incoporate discussion.Good suspense!beth fairy77.
Comment Written 29-Nov-2011
reply by the author on 29-Nov-2011
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Thank you for the kind review and your support..
Comment from Tammara
I just LOVE reading your story. I am just so sorry you went through this, it is the worse thing to go through. You are a very talented writer, and I hope that I can be as half as good as you are. :)
Tammara
reply by the author on 29-Nov-2011
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I just LOVE reading your story. I am just so sorry you went through this, it is the worse thing to go through. You are a very talented writer, and I hope that I can be as half as good as you are. :)
Tammara
Comment Written 29-Nov-2011
reply by the author on 29-Nov-2011
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from G.B. Smith
Hi Barbara
This is a superb chapter. I had to go back and peruse previous chapters to get up to speed. I don't think I could take a cliff hanger. The whole time it was going lickity split as it was. I liked it
Bear
reply by the author on 29-Nov-2011
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Hi Barbara
This is a superb chapter. I had to go back and peruse previous chapters to get up to speed. I don't think I could take a cliff hanger. The whole time it was going lickity split as it was. I liked it
Bear
Comment Written 29-Nov-2011
reply by the author on 29-Nov-2011
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from ericawrites
A well written chapter, describes the fear of the main character vividly, the nervousness, the alarm at the
slightest sound, constantly checking the door is locked
etc.
It must take years to get back to some semblance of normality,
coming from domestic abuse.
Well done to you.
reply by the author on 29-Nov-2011
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A well written chapter, describes the fear of the main character vividly, the nervousness, the alarm at the
slightest sound, constantly checking the door is locked
etc.
It must take years to get back to some semblance of normality,
coming from domestic abuse.
Well done to you.
Comment Written 28-Nov-2011
reply by the author on 29-Nov-2011
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from bhogg
Hi Barbara - a really nice post. You're such a romantic, and what I like most is that it's just the simple touch, a hand held, kind words, caring, shared values. I always am uplifted by your posts. Always warm regards, Bill
reply by the author on 28-Nov-2011
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Hi Barbara - a really nice post. You're such a romantic, and what I like most is that it's just the simple touch, a hand held, kind words, caring, shared values. I always am uplifted by your posts. Always warm regards, Bill
Comment Written 28-Nov-2011
reply by the author on 28-Nov-2011
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Thank you for you kind review and insight. I am a firm believer a tender touch says a lot.
Comment from FlamingSpade
This is my first introduction to your story and I was hooked on your ending and curious about her fears without a big cliff hanger for an ending. Then I read your Notes and know you are speaking on behalf of the abused. Bravo!
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This is my first introduction to your story and I was hooked on your ending and curious about her fears without a big cliff hanger for an ending. Then I read your Notes and know you are speaking on behalf of the abused. Bravo!
Comment Written 28-Nov-2011
reply by the author on 28-Nov-2011
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from alexisleech
No need for a cliff hanger, it was nicely done. I suppose we all feel that we need some kind of drama to keep our readers happy but fortunately, as you have managed here, the words are enough. Just one possible bit of spag, unless I'm not reading it correctly.
Besides they've already miss(ed) having Michael around."
reply by the author on 28-Nov-2011
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No need for a cliff hanger, it was nicely done. I suppose we all feel that we need some kind of drama to keep our readers happy but fortunately, as you have managed here, the words are enough. Just one possible bit of spag, unless I'm not reading it correctly.
Besides they've already miss(ed) having Michael around."
Comment Written 28-Nov-2011
reply by the author on 28-Nov-2011
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I had the ed there and was told to take it out because it's dialogue. I honestly don't know what's correct. Thank you for the kind review.
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I think it could be that 'missed' is in the same tense as 'they've' whereas 'they already miss having Michael around' works even better. Just a thought.
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I will take the 've off, I like it better myself.
Comment from forestport12
Honestly, I like the story. Your work is always sharp. Dialogue crisp and narration clear and to the point. Selfishly, I tend to read you to learn or be reminded how to write better. Stan.
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Honestly, I like the story. Your work is always sharp. Dialogue crisp and narration clear and to the point. Selfishly, I tend to read you to learn or be reminded how to write better. Stan.
Comment Written 28-Nov-2011
reply by the author on 28-Nov-2011
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Thank your for the kind review and I appreciate the encouraging words. I hope I never let you down.
Comment from Paul Greatrix
I was about to ask whether your chapters are actually this short, but then read the postscript.
You write with such tenacity. Your productivity is great. You churn out chapters like clockwork. Many writers will be green with envy at your commitment. Finishing a story - especially a novel-length one - is hard work, and many just can't do it. I've failed several times myself, but am happy to say I finished my first last year and am now into my 2nd draft. Your drive is an inspiration. Well done.
reply by the author on 28-Nov-2011
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I was about to ask whether your chapters are actually this short, but then read the postscript.
You write with such tenacity. Your productivity is great. You churn out chapters like clockwork. Many writers will be green with envy at your commitment. Finishing a story - especially a novel-length one - is hard work, and many just can't do it. I've failed several times myself, but am happy to say I finished my first last year and am now into my 2nd draft. Your drive is an inspiration. Well done.
Comment Written 28-Nov-2011
reply by the author on 28-Nov-2011
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This is the fourth one I have posted on this site. I just struggle in doing the leg work for finding either a publisher or an agent.
