Lonely Hearts Meet
Viewing comments for Chapter 42 "Part three Chapter 13"Anna and her son escape from a man-made Hell.
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Comment from rheabug
This is a very good chapter in the book. I praise you for bringing the torments of abuse to the forefront. You do a great job! Blessings, Linda
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This is a very good chapter in the book. I praise you for bringing the torments of abuse to the forefront. You do a great job! Blessings, Linda
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from TammyGail
I enjoyed this chapter barbara
It was well written and compelling
Like always great dialog
Great notes as well
Happy you had a good time with your family
Thanks for sharing
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I enjoyed this chapter barbara
It was well written and compelling
Like always great dialog
Great notes as well
Happy you had a good time with your family
Thanks for sharing
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from me_tudor
This story has taken a much more personal note for me because I just went and rescued my daughter from an abusive situation in another state. I've been enjoying the story and trying to keep up with the chapters. One thing I noticed in this chapter is that you've skimmed over some of the details that would help the reader. For example, Anna was watching Troy sweep then they walking towards the door then Troy was backing out of a parking slot but you didn't tell about them getting into the car. You did kind of the same thing when he took her home. They were going home then suddenly she was there. Just something to think about. It's a great story so far.
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This story has taken a much more personal note for me because I just went and rescued my daughter from an abusive situation in another state. I've been enjoying the story and trying to keep up with the chapters. One thing I noticed in this chapter is that you've skimmed over some of the details that would help the reader. For example, Anna was watching Troy sweep then they walking towards the door then Troy was backing out of a parking slot but you didn't tell about them getting into the car. You did kind of the same thing when he took her home. They were going home then suddenly she was there. Just something to think about. It's a great story so far.
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Comment Written 29-Nov-2011
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I am sorry to hear about your daughter. I am glad that you have been able to rescue her. I am not a writer who goes into a lot of details because I don't feel they move the story along. If a detail is necessary to the story line, I will add it. I also want to point out that Anna was not watching Troy sweep the floor, she was watching a janitor and I feel we all know how to sweep a floor.
Comment from shellwrites
EXCELLENT! As a survivor of Domestic Violence I would buy your book and enjoy every moment of my escape from it by reading another s journey, even if it is fictional. Your an excellent writer and have chose a bold subject, thank you
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EXCELLENT! As a survivor of Domestic Violence I would buy your book and enjoy every moment of my escape from it by reading another s journey, even if it is fictional. Your an excellent writer and have chose a bold subject, thank you
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from oozer
Well, so wot? Ya got 'All time best' Am i asked to put it to the test? Why did you choose the name Troy? Is there a fall in sifgt? I think it is well for THEE to be holding the key... You're a Goddess to me! Best of luck. oozer
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Well, so wot? Ya got 'All time best' Am i asked to put it to the test? Why did you choose the name Troy? Is there a fall in sifgt? I think it is well for THEE to be holding the key... You're a Goddess to me! Best of luck. oozer
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Thank you for the kind review and the support.
Comment from Carolyn Hilliard
A very pleasant and relaxing chapter. Fits the holiday. Hope yours was a nice one too. I enjoyed the tranquility this chapter brought out though I wonder what she heard.
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A very pleasant and relaxing chapter. Fits the holiday. Hope yours was a nice one too. I enjoyed the tranquility this chapter brought out though I wonder what she heard.
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Thank you for the kind review. Thank you for the support.
Comment from Piggies Grandma
I enjoyed reading this chapter very much, Barbara. I hope things are a lot better for Anna and Michael, but I have a feeling that the sound she heard was something else.
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I enjoyed reading this chapter very much, Barbara. I hope things are a lot better for Anna and Michael, but I have a feeling that the sound she heard was something else.
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from N1ghth4wk3
Very nice little story about the freedom given from such fear and neglect. I wish more women that were in your situation found the strength to move on.
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Very nice little story about the freedom given from such fear and neglect. I wish more women that were in your situation found the strength to move on.
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from peggles
This is so well written with a easy flow giving an easy read There is very descriptive imagery
A gripping story Barbara
I am enjoying this story as it continues to open out
Well done
This is an exceptionally well written emotional chapter
I enjoyed it very much
It flows smoothly and I enjoyed the delightful tingling suspense you build
Very nice work with this one I look forward to the next chapter
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This is so well written with a easy flow giving an easy read There is very descriptive imagery
A gripping story Barbara
I am enjoying this story as it continues to open out
Well done
This is an exceptionally well written emotional chapter
I enjoyed it very much
It flows smoothly and I enjoyed the delightful tingling suspense you build
Very nice work with this one I look forward to the next chapter
Comment Written 29-Nov-2011
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from kiwisteveh
I'm going to pitch in my usual comment here, which is that, if there's nthing much happening and we're not really learning anything new about the characters, then why include it in the book? There's a little here about Anna still being jumpy and enjoying her new-ound freedom, but not really anything we didn't already know - I suspect some nasty editor will reach for the scissors...
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I'm going to pitch in my usual comment here, which is that, if there's nthing much happening and we're not really learning anything new about the characters, then why include it in the book? There's a little here about Anna still being jumpy and enjoying her new-ound freedom, but not really anything we didn't already know - I suspect some nasty editor will reach for the scissors...
Comment Written 29-Nov-2011
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Thank you for the kind review.
