Lonely Hearts Meet
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Comment from NaughtieScribe
It's these slow and thoughtful chapters that make the drama even more emotional for the reader. You really can identify with Anna as a person, and start to see pieces of yourself in her. This makes you pull for her even more. I just wish I didn't know some of what she's about to go through.
reply by the author on 04-Aug-2012
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It's these slow and thoughtful chapters that make the drama even more emotional for the reader. You really can identify with Anna as a person, and start to see pieces of yourself in her. This makes you pull for her even more. I just wish I didn't know some of what she's about to go through.
Comment Written 03-Aug-2012
reply by the author on 04-Aug-2012
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Thank you.
Comment from CALLAHANMR
Hi Barbara:)
This post is short, but full of clues to the inner turmoil that is still with Anna. Just as she found it difficult to leave the meeting for abused spouses, she still stays there with Troy, attempting to settle the bad memories from her marriage.
When they finally go to Troy's car, the sound of a loud muffler caused Anna to grab Troy's arm. Old fears die hard, but is it just paranoia?
Later after Anna was home and Michael was in bed, she had time to unwind until another noise caught her attention. Maybe it was just Michael turning over, but maybe I'm catching Anna's paranoia.
Roger
reply by the author on 04-Dec-2011
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Hi Barbara:)
This post is short, but full of clues to the inner turmoil that is still with Anna. Just as she found it difficult to leave the meeting for abused spouses, she still stays there with Troy, attempting to settle the bad memories from her marriage.
When they finally go to Troy's car, the sound of a loud muffler caused Anna to grab Troy's arm. Old fears die hard, but is it just paranoia?
Later after Anna was home and Michael was in bed, she had time to unwind until another noise caught her attention. Maybe it was just Michael turning over, but maybe I'm catching Anna's paranoia.
Roger
Comment Written 04-Dec-2011
reply by the author on 04-Dec-2011
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I think you caught all the clues I have left. I am sorry you had to read this post after the bonus points died, but thank you.
Comment from Mike Momba
A brief chapter that flows well. wonderful clarity in description. story seems to be told without a struggle. It discusses an important topic. there is clear present message here.
reply by the author on 01-Dec-2011
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A brief chapter that flows well. wonderful clarity in description. story seems to be told without a struggle. It discusses an important topic. there is clear present message here.
Comment Written 01-Dec-2011
reply by the author on 01-Dec-2011
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Auroraboreal800
THANKSGIVING WAS WONDERFUL HERE IN SLC, UTAH!
I LIKED THIS CHAPTER, IS AS NORMAL AS REAL LIFE, NOT ALWAYS IT IS A CLIFF HANGER FOR AN ENDING. IT'S GOOD TO KNOW ANNA AND MICHAEL ARE SAFE.
WELL DONE BARBARA!!
reply by the author on 01-Dec-2011
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THANKSGIVING WAS WONDERFUL HERE IN SLC, UTAH!
I LIKED THIS CHAPTER, IS AS NORMAL AS REAL LIFE, NOT ALWAYS IT IS A CLIFF HANGER FOR AN ENDING. IT'S GOOD TO KNOW ANNA AND MICHAEL ARE SAFE.
WELL DONE BARBARA!!
Comment Written 01-Dec-2011
reply by the author on 01-Dec-2011
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Tellis
When people fall asleep in the tub it worries me, but I suppose they would wake up before they drowned, I hope. This is an excellent chapter and I have a feeling there is more excitement coming up.
Tellis
reply by the author on 01-Dec-2011
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When people fall asleep in the tub it worries me, but I suppose they would wake up before they drowned, I hope. This is an excellent chapter and I have a feeling there is more excitement coming up.
Tellis
Comment Written 01-Dec-2011
reply by the author on 01-Dec-2011
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from JW
Technically, this is a well written chapter. No spags found.
However, and I don't mean to sound negative, for me it did not seem up to your usual quality of writing. The story line seemed cut to the bone and rushed.
Sorry. JW
reply by the author on 01-Dec-2011
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Technically, this is a well written chapter. No spags found.
However, and I don't mean to sound negative, for me it did not seem up to your usual quality of writing. The story line seemed cut to the bone and rushed.
Sorry. JW
Comment Written 30-Nov-2011
reply by the author on 01-Dec-2011
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Thank you for the kind review and I will recheck the post.
Comment from Christopher.Colliers
Very well written thank you for sharing this wonderful piece of writing on this website. I look forward to reading more from you. Good job and well done.
-Christopher Lee Colliers
reply by the author on 01-Dec-2011
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Very well written thank you for sharing this wonderful piece of writing on this website. I look forward to reading more from you. Good job and well done.
-Christopher Lee Colliers
Comment Written 30-Nov-2011
reply by the author on 01-Dec-2011
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Rdfrdmom2
Hmmmm, barbara:
You are becoming quite masterful at dropping very
subtle hints for readers to catch as they eagerly
anticipate the next chapter. I am talking about such
things as "Was that Michael? She listened again. He must've rolled over." I suspect it wasn't Michael!
thanks for sharing
love,
jan
reply by the author on 30-Nov-2011
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Hmmmm, barbara:
You are becoming quite masterful at dropping very
subtle hints for readers to catch as they eagerly
anticipate the next chapter. I am talking about such
things as "Was that Michael? She listened again. He must've rolled over." I suspect it wasn't Michael!
thanks for sharing
love,
jan
Comment Written 30-Nov-2011
reply by the author on 30-Nov-2011
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from abbasjoy
In this short excerpt, and not having read any previous chapters, already I am eagerly looking forward to the next one. I think there is suspense,when Anna thinks she hears a sound, it makes you think that possibly there is someone in the house, despite her having checked and locked up. Great job. Keep writing.I'd love to read the whole book. Thank you for bringing such a difficult topic to light.
reply by the author on 30-Nov-2011
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In this short excerpt, and not having read any previous chapters, already I am eagerly looking forward to the next one. I think there is suspense,when Anna thinks she hears a sound, it makes you think that possibly there is someone in the house, despite her having checked and locked up. Great job. Keep writing.I'd love to read the whole book. Thank you for bringing such a difficult topic to light.
Comment Written 30-Nov-2011
reply by the author on 30-Nov-2011
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from tango494
It has been awhile since I have been able to read and review your work. This was another very well written chapter. I love your descriptive abilities and dialogues. I hope to someday be able to write with the same talent you have. Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 30-Nov-2011
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It has been awhile since I have been able to read and review your work. This was another very well written chapter. I love your descriptive abilities and dialogues. I hope to someday be able to write with the same talent you have. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 30-Nov-2011
reply by the author on 30-Nov-2011
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Thank you for the kind review.
