Stand Strong
Viewing comments for Chapter 2 "Alive and Awake"Social pressures threaten a childhood friendship
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Comment from alf collier
Hi Writingfundimension. I thought this was well put together. The act of talking a dubious person into something they don't want is awful, they might call it peer pressure but its a type of bullying, really. Still you tell the tale well and the story flows smoothly, alf
reply by the author on 26-Jan-2015
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Hi Writingfundimension. I thought this was well put together. The act of talking a dubious person into something they don't want is awful, they might call it peer pressure but its a type of bullying, really. Still you tell the tale well and the story flows smoothly, alf
Comment Written 23-Jan-2015
reply by the author on 26-Jan-2015
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Hi, Alf. Thank you for taking time to read my chapter. I appreciate both your time and generosity, as well as your insights. :) Bev
Comment from MelB
A very good read and a good message to teens out there. I look forward to reading what happens with this boy and it will be interesting to see how she holds up against the pressures of the world. Skillet is a good band.
reply by the author on 26-Jan-2015
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A very good read and a good message to teens out there. I look forward to reading what happens with this boy and it will be interesting to see how she holds up against the pressures of the world. Skillet is a good band.
Comment Written 23-Jan-2015
reply by the author on 26-Jan-2015
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Hi, MelB. Thanks for taking time to read my chapter. I appreciate your generosity and encouragement. Yes, Skillet is still putting out the hits!
:) Bev
Comment from maggieadams
Really enjoyed this story and one that is needed for these teens. Mean girls or girls that use the kindness of others are a fact of life, but you showed the theme of when a door shuts, another one opens and stay with who you are, be trUe to your values...nice job.
reply by the author on 23-Jan-2015
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Really enjoyed this story and one that is needed for these teens. Mean girls or girls that use the kindness of others are a fact of life, but you showed the theme of when a door shuts, another one opens and stay with who you are, be trUe to your values...nice job.
Comment Written 23-Jan-2015
reply by the author on 23-Jan-2015
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Thanks for the generous review and, especially, for the encouragement to go forward with my novel. It's rather sad that even as adults we continue to have to deal with the same kinds of people.
Warmest regards, Bev
Comment from mbagby23
Growing up in a Christian household can be different. I didn't even like my folks meeting the guy I like. Would tell him to call when they were at work. Love where the story is going.
reply by the author on 22-Jan-2015
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Growing up in a Christian household can be different. I didn't even like my folks meeting the guy I like. Would tell him to call when they were at work. Love where the story is going.
Comment Written 22-Jan-2015
reply by the author on 22-Jan-2015
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Thanks for taking time to read and review, M. I appreciate it! :)
Comment from Margaret Snowdon
As always, Bev, I find your work such
a pleasure to read - so well presented,
holding the interest throughout.
Is that correct - scizzors??
scissors
which they dowloaded - downloaded
Margaret
reply by the author on 22-Jan-2015
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As always, Bev, I find your work such
a pleasure to read - so well presented,
holding the interest throughout.
Is that correct - scizzors??
scissors
which they dowloaded - downloaded
Margaret
Comment Written 22-Jan-2015
reply by the author on 22-Jan-2015
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Margaret, thank you very much for this most generous and encouraging review. Thanks, too, for catching those spaggies.
Much appreciated! :) Bev
Comment from MM lives on :)
Hi Bev, you took me to a definite rock n roll teen fantasy...makes me reminisce to the days of long hair and black concert tees that I wore as a rebellious young lad. The dialogue is as real as the dolls who are quite the characters. A fun read for all and a reminder of cruel yet innocent youth.
BRAVO BEV! 7 STARS
reply by the author on 22-Jan-2015
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Hi Bev, you took me to a definite rock n roll teen fantasy...makes me reminisce to the days of long hair and black concert tees that I wore as a rebellious young lad. The dialogue is as real as the dolls who are quite the characters. A fun read for all and a reminder of cruel yet innocent youth.
BRAVO BEV! 7 STARS
Comment Written 22-Jan-2015
reply by the author on 22-Jan-2015
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Hi, Christopher. Thanks for taking time to read my chapter and for your generous review. It means a lot to me that you were able to relate a bit to the story line. I appreciate your insights and encouragement very much!
XXOO Bev
Comment from thee-name
Excellent chapter. Seen no mistakes. Keep on writing.
JUJEE CAME OVER THE MORNING OF THE CONCERT TO HELP MARA DECIED WHAT TO WEAR.
reply by the author on 22-Jan-2015
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Excellent chapter. Seen no mistakes. Keep on writing.
JUJEE CAME OVER THE MORNING OF THE CONCERT TO HELP MARA DECIED WHAT TO WEAR.
Comment Written 22-Jan-2015
reply by the author on 22-Jan-2015
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Thanks so much, T. I appreciate it!
Bev
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THANK YOU!
Comment from JackiO
mmmmm! Love endings like this!
Live for endings like this!
So precious something I like to think most of us akward uncomfortable teen chikkies have gone through - Nothing like the attention of a beautiful soul (Boy)
to make our day!
reply by the author on 22-Jan-2015
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mmmmm! Love endings like this!
Live for endings like this!
So precious something I like to think most of us akward uncomfortable teen chikkies have gone through - Nothing like the attention of a beautiful soul (Boy)
to make our day!
Comment Written 22-Jan-2015
reply by the author on 22-Jan-2015
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Hi, JackiO. I really appreciate your gracious and generous review. The story of Gabe and Mara is just beginning and will have it's ups and downs, complicated by a certain jealous friend. Your encouragement means a lot.
:) Bev
Comment from Joan E.
You certainly characterize the young persons believably. Your description of Jujee as "ballerina-thin blonde...hot-iron fisted" gave a very clear picture of her. I was surprised that Mara's father was so supportive in printing a seating chart of the the concert venue. Thanks for your notes too for helpful context. Cheers- Joan
reply by the author on 22-Jan-2015
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You certainly characterize the young persons believably. Your description of Jujee as "ballerina-thin blonde...hot-iron fisted" gave a very clear picture of her. I was surprised that Mara's father was so supportive in printing a seating chart of the the concert venue. Thanks for your notes too for helpful context. Cheers- Joan
Comment Written 22-Jan-2015
reply by the author on 22-Jan-2015
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Thanks so much, Joan. I appreciate the gracious review. :) Bev
Comment from Mastery
Hi, Bev. Good to see you repost this. I don't think I caught this one from the beginning. When did you first post it? Sounds like an interesting plot for sure. I love your images as usual:
There was a restless, growing buzz behind Mara. "Skil..let, Skil..let, Skil..let," the crowd chanted. A dozen kids stood between her and the glass doors of the entrance. Snaking a quarter mile behind were fans of all ages anxious to get the fun on. When the doors finally opened, Mara grabbed Jujee and steamrolled her way through the crowd pouring into the auditorium."
Bravo! Bob
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2015
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Hi, Bev. Good to see you repost this. I don't think I caught this one from the beginning. When did you first post it? Sounds like an interesting plot for sure. I love your images as usual:
There was a restless, growing buzz behind Mara. "Skil..let, Skil..let, Skil..let," the crowd chanted. A dozen kids stood between her and the glass doors of the entrance. Snaking a quarter mile behind were fans of all ages anxious to get the fun on. When the doors finally opened, Mara grabbed Jujee and steamrolled her way through the crowd pouring into the auditorium."
Bravo! Bob
Comment Written 21-Jan-2015
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2015
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Hi, Bob. This was started a couple of years back. It seemed like the right time to continue the project. Thanks for the grand review, my friend. I appreciate your time and support.
XX Bev
