I wondered
Angels3 total reviews
Comment from ernesto escarro
I wondered
It happens in the history of mankind many times.
But the feelings remain in truth.
To write, to tell, but not just to win the attention of the reader, the listener, whose life the story of your poem is happening in their life.
So for the best that I could say in your write, I am still encouraging everybody not to forget God as He is in control
of everything. Things on earth are here to lost.
Can anybody extract his feeling from his heart to tell him
he is like this and that? No, so be steadfast remaining with
your faith and pray. Remember that all things have residue left when submerged to water in a long period of time.
So there must be one thing in us to save. And this is our soul. Thank you for sharing, I've been riding the flow of it. God bless.
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I wondered
It happens in the history of mankind many times.
But the feelings remain in truth.
To write, to tell, but not just to win the attention of the reader, the listener, whose life the story of your poem is happening in their life.
So for the best that I could say in your write, I am still encouraging everybody not to forget God as He is in control
of everything. Things on earth are here to lost.
Can anybody extract his feeling from his heart to tell him
he is like this and that? No, so be steadfast remaining with
your faith and pray. Remember that all things have residue left when submerged to water in a long period of time.
So there must be one thing in us to save. And this is our soul. Thank you for sharing, I've been riding the flow of it. God bless.
Comment Written 21-Nov-2011
Comment from DALLAS01
Did you intend this for another contest? It is suppose to be a 5-7-5 syllable count poem; similar to haiku and senryu. If you revise, let me know and I will change the rating.
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Did you intend this for another contest? It is suppose to be a 5-7-5 syllable count poem; similar to haiku and senryu. If you revise, let me know and I will change the rating.
Comment Written 21-Nov-2011
Comment from Van
T. I'm not sure how you got 20 views without a single person telling you that this is a 5,7,5 contest. That means your poem can only have (3) three lines. Each line has a strict syllable count. 5,7, and 5 respectively.
Fix this and I'd love to re-review. Questions, you can PM me directly if you like.
V.
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T. I'm not sure how you got 20 views without a single person telling you that this is a 5,7,5 contest. That means your poem can only have (3) three lines. Each line has a strict syllable count. 5,7, and 5 respectively.
Fix this and I'd love to re-review. Questions, you can PM me directly if you like.
V.
Comment Written 21-Nov-2011
