For the Birds
Viewing comments for Chapter 9 "The Dancing Ostrich"Poems about those winged gifts from above.
8 total reviews
Comment from bellemarie
Like this poem. ancesters' should be ancestors' Maybe ancestoral home would work better. Artwork would have been nice. We are so spoiled with pictures. Blame tv. "that time for the dance"...wondering if "time for a dance" would sound better. I wanted to know what color the ostrich is...if I pretended I had never seen an ostrich. How big is "giant"? Compared to ???
reply by the author on 19-Nov-2011
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Like this poem. ancesters' should be ancestors' Maybe ancestoral home would work better. Artwork would have been nice. We are so spoiled with pictures. Blame tv. "that time for the dance"...wondering if "time for a dance" would sound better. I wanted to know what color the ostrich is...if I pretended I had never seen an ostrich. How big is "giant"? Compared to ???
Comment Written 19-Nov-2011
reply by the author on 19-Nov-2011
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I like your suggestions and I agree about the pic. I would have liked a pic of a dancing ostrich. Thanks for reviewing. Elaine
Comment from Spitfire
I love this. Shows ingenuity. But it makes me sad feeling the ostrich, a symbol of freedom, is now caged. How many meanings can be packed into that! Favorite line: preens around as if Broadway will call. Nice touch at the end with connecting her to a universal theme.
reply by the author on 19-Nov-2011
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I love this. Shows ingenuity. But it makes me sad feeling the ostrich, a symbol of freedom, is now caged. How many meanings can be packed into that! Favorite line: preens around as if Broadway will call. Nice touch at the end with connecting her to a universal theme.
Comment Written 18-Nov-2011
reply by the author on 19-Nov-2011
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Thanks for reading and enjoying. Elaine
Comment from adewpearl
ancesters' home - ancestors'
love the dancing ostrich who preens like she is waiting for her big chance on Broadway LOL
What a delightful look at this odd-looking and captivating bird :-) Brooke
reply by the author on 19-Nov-2011
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ancesters' home - ancestors'
love the dancing ostrich who preens like she is waiting for her big chance on Broadway LOL
What a delightful look at this odd-looking and captivating bird :-) Brooke
Comment Written 18-Nov-2011
reply by the author on 19-Nov-2011
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Thanks for pointing out the spelling error. Glad youenjoyed this poem. Elaine
Comment from Gungalo
Ahhh yes, Mermaids!! The ostrich is a bird of many surprises and yours dances!! How wonderful it would be to watch as round and round it goes!!
reply by the author on 18-Nov-2011
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Ahhh yes, Mermaids!! The ostrich is a bird of many surprises and yours dances!! How wonderful it would be to watch as round and round it goes!!
Comment Written 17-Nov-2011
reply by the author on 18-Nov-2011
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Thanks for reading about this dancing bird. Elaine
Comment from donette1914
right across the street where i live the owner owns a ostrich and it makes a weird sound out night. very good! i like what you wrote
reply by the author on 17-Nov-2011
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right across the street where i live the owner owns a ostrich and it makes a weird sound out night. very good! i like what you wrote
Comment Written 17-Nov-2011
reply by the author on 17-Nov-2011
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How interesting, an ostrich for a pet! Thanks for reading and reviewing. Elaine
Comment from cathmine
mermaids, you poem of tribute to the ostrich is thought-provoking. You've given me a different slant on a bird I always considered less than graceful. Yet you are correct: the movement of a giant bird does captivate a troubled world.
Cathmine
reply by the author on 17-Nov-2011
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mermaids, you poem of tribute to the ostrich is thought-provoking. You've given me a different slant on a bird I always considered less than graceful. Yet you are correct: the movement of a giant bird does captivate a troubled world.
Cathmine
Comment Written 17-Nov-2011
reply by the author on 17-Nov-2011
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I appreciate your thoughtful review. Thanks so much. Elaine
Comment from TammyGail
I loved this poem
You really did an amazing job with this
It was very well written
And read like a dream
Great imagery used
It was a pleasure
Thanks for sharing
reply by the author on 17-Nov-2011
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I loved this poem
You really did an amazing job with this
It was very well written
And read like a dream
Great imagery used
It was a pleasure
Thanks for sharing
Comment Written 17-Nov-2011
reply by the author on 17-Nov-2011
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Glad you enjoyed this dancing bird. Thanks for taking time to read. Elaine
Comment from Gert sherwood
Very fun and very lively Mermaids
I never saw an ostrich dance and prance around what a fun poem to read.
Thank you for sharing such a light hearted poem
Smiles
Gert
If you get a chance stop by
Thank you.
Gert
reply by the author on 17-Nov-2011
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Very fun and very lively Mermaids
I never saw an ostrich dance and prance around what a fun poem to read.
Thank you for sharing such a light hearted poem
Smiles
Gert
If you get a chance stop by
Thank you.
Gert
Comment Written 17-Nov-2011
reply by the author on 17-Nov-2011
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Thanks,Gert. Elaine
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You are welcome
Gert
