SIR NICKITTY NOX
ABOUT SIR NICKETTY NOX3 total reviews
Comment from samsaysagain
Good but needs some work especially in punctuation and spelling. It's a little difficult to read because of little errors here and there. The rhythm is good except for a little break in flow in the last two lines. The story line is cute and amusing. Work on the things I mentioned and continue to write. The more you write the better you'll become and your confidence will grow. Good luck.
THIS IS NOT SUITABLE FOR THE CONTEST BECAUSE IT DOES NOT FULFILL THE RULES FOR a 5-7-5 writing. Check your syllable count in the first three lines and read the contest rules thoroughly and you'll understand. I failed to include this info in my first review. I'm sorry about that,
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Good but needs some work especially in punctuation and spelling. It's a little difficult to read because of little errors here and there. The rhythm is good except for a little break in flow in the last two lines. The story line is cute and amusing. Work on the things I mentioned and continue to write. The more you write the better you'll become and your confidence will grow. Good luck.
THIS IS NOT SUITABLE FOR THE CONTEST BECAUSE IT DOES NOT FULFILL THE RULES FOR a 5-7-5 writing. Check your syllable count in the first three lines and read the contest rules thoroughly and you'll understand. I failed to include this info in my first review. I'm sorry about that,
Comment Written 08-Nov-2011
Comment from Chris Tee
Your poem has Twelve lines.
Sorry I had to abandon the read because this is not in the required format.
You will not shape in the contest.
This is a three line poem required.
It must have 5 syllables not words in the first line.
7 syllables not words in the second.
It must have 5 syllables in the last line
Let me try to help you.
It is a 5-7-5, haiku and senryu format, Ok:
Example:
I love you so much = 5 syllables
My love for you is extreme = 7 syllables
Much is love for you = 5 syllables
Three lines only you see
Every = 3 syllables e=1 ve=1 ry=1 total = 3
Please read the rules of the contest before you post a poem.
Now do not give up go and edit it.
Take your time to figure it out do not rush Ok.
Once you have edited it reply to me.
I shall re-review it for you.
If you do not understand tell me in your reply Ok,
I shall try to help you further
Never quit.
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Your poem has Twelve lines.
Sorry I had to abandon the read because this is not in the required format.
You will not shape in the contest.
This is a three line poem required.
It must have 5 syllables not words in the first line.
7 syllables not words in the second.
It must have 5 syllables in the last line
Let me try to help you.
It is a 5-7-5, haiku and senryu format, Ok:
Example:
I love you so much = 5 syllables
My love for you is extreme = 7 syllables
Much is love for you = 5 syllables
Three lines only you see
Every = 3 syllables e=1 ve=1 ry=1 total = 3
Please read the rules of the contest before you post a poem.
Now do not give up go and edit it.
Take your time to figure it out do not rush Ok.
Once you have edited it reply to me.
I shall re-review it for you.
If you do not understand tell me in your reply Ok,
I shall try to help you further
Never quit.
Comment Written 07-Nov-2011
Comment from Sarah Rudolph
That is a very nice poem, but it isn't a 5/7/5... Just thought i'd let you know... But you should keep writing, it was a nice poem.
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That is a very nice poem, but it isn't a 5/7/5... Just thought i'd let you know... But you should keep writing, it was a nice poem.
Comment Written 07-Nov-2011
