Mouse Hunt
A cat, snow, and wily mice35 total reviews
Comment from patsolstad
This is a very cute story. I was intrigued throughout. A couple of errors: '...rough, too.' (comma required; 'wherewithal' is not correct as you have it; When you write, 'Mrs. White never said a word...' I thought that you were speaking generally, and of this specific night. I'm not sure if you've got the right plural for 'nemesis.' Could it be 'nemises'? Nice work...
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reply by the author on 11-Nov-2011
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This is a very cute story. I was intrigued throughout. A couple of errors: '...rough, too.' (comma required; 'wherewithal' is not correct as you have it; When you write, 'Mrs. White never said a word...' I thought that you were speaking generally, and of this specific night. I'm not sure if you've got the right plural for 'nemesis.' Could it be 'nemises'? Nice work...
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Comment Written 11-Nov-2011
reply by the author on 11-Nov-2011
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Thank you Pat! I will look and try to see what you mean. I do appreciate your time for me! Have a great day...susan
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Excuse me...I meant 'and NOT of this specific night.'
Comment from rchitwood
A very creative and well written poem I really enjoyed reading it.I liked the way Patches waited in the snow to get his mouse.Your story held my attention and had very good characters.Blessings Rita
reply by the author on 11-Nov-2011
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A very creative and well written poem I really enjoyed reading it.I liked the way Patches waited in the snow to get his mouse.Your story held my attention and had very good characters.Blessings Rita
Comment Written 10-Nov-2011
reply by the author on 11-Nov-2011
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HI Rita! Thank you and I'm happy you enjoyed this. My real cat Patches was shot by a mean neighbor years ago...I do miss him...xx, susan
Comment from barbara.wilkey
Oh so cute. Kitty's make for great stories because they are so full of personality. I enjoyed reading your story. It was fun and well written.
reply by the author on 10-Nov-2011
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Oh so cute. Kitty's make for great stories because they are so full of personality. I enjoyed reading your story. It was fun and well written.
Comment Written 09-Nov-2011
reply by the author on 10-Nov-2011
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Hi Barb! Thank you for this kind note...you are the best...I wanted to tell you I have surgery tomorrow, a stent in a kidney. Don't know what's going on. Scary tho. I am just so tired. Please take GOOD care of yourself Barbara...xx! Susan
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You are in my prayers.
Comment from forestport12
Reading this made me think, we need a cat. I think of Tom and Jerry, my favorite old cartoon. What would they do without each other?
reply by the author on 10-Nov-2011
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Reading this made me think, we need a cat. I think of Tom and Jerry, my favorite old cartoon. What would they do without each other?
Comment Written 09-Nov-2011
reply by the author on 10-Nov-2011
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HI Stan! Thank you! I loved them too...life is so odd...we are all connected in the tiniest ways without even knowing it. I mean, things like a simple love of a silly cartoon. lol! Take GOOD care of yourself my friend... Susan
Comment from Dave M
Susan,
This is an excellent snapshot of life on a small farm. In the end, everyone ate. Patches settled for cat food and the mice raided the trash bin.
I enjoyed this read and found nothing to criticize.
Dave
reply by the author on 10-Nov-2011
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Susan,
This is an excellent snapshot of life on a small farm. In the end, everyone ate. Patches settled for cat food and the mice raided the trash bin.
I enjoyed this read and found nothing to criticize.
Dave
Comment Written 08-Nov-2011
reply by the author on 10-Nov-2011
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Hi Dave! Thank you! SO glad you liked this...I just love the photo...and had a real Patches years ago, shot by a nasty neighbor for crossing their drive. Sad how bullies just grow up. Thank you my friend...susan
Comment from c_lucas
Cats of all sizes and breeds have the ability to patiently wait for their kill. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for an easy read.
reply by the author on 10-Nov-2011
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Cats of all sizes and breeds have the ability to patiently wait for their kill. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for an easy read.
Comment Written 08-Nov-2011
reply by the author on 10-Nov-2011
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Hi Charlie...thank you for another kind and welcome review...My Patches, was shot years ago by a neighbor for crossing their driveway. I will never never understand...Take care my friend...susan
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You're welcome, Susan. Sorry to hear about your cat. Charlie
Comment from Rama Rao
An amusing story of a cat and mice. It made absorbing reading.
A cat and mouse game is always fascinating.
the door opened further,and
Hunger gnawed at the bellies of the mice- cut the before mice
mice, and they crept back
fir tree to snooze and keep an eye just in case the cat decided to raid.
reply by the author on 10-Nov-2011
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An amusing story of a cat and mice. It made absorbing reading.
A cat and mouse game is always fascinating.
the door opened further,and
Hunger gnawed at the bellies of the mice- cut the before mice
mice, and they crept back
fir tree to snooze and keep an eye just in case the cat decided to raid.
Comment Written 08-Nov-2011
reply by the author on 10-Nov-2011
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Hi there! Thank you Rama...I hope I have your name right...I am always thrilled in my heart when you approve of anything I do. Thank you !! Susan
Comment from Kathryn Varuzza
Hi Susan,
I enjoyed this.
You capture a cat's ability to wait and stay motionless for hours so well.
I liked the mice too.
Great photo of the cat too.
Good title too.
I like how you ended it.
hugs,
Katie
reply by the author on 10-Nov-2011
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Hi Susan,
I enjoyed this.
You capture a cat's ability to wait and stay motionless for hours so well.
I liked the mice too.
Great photo of the cat too.
Good title too.
I like how you ended it.
hugs,
Katie
Comment Written 08-Nov-2011
reply by the author on 10-Nov-2011
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Hi Katie...thank you so much. I am just thrilled you liked my Patches story. My real Patches was shot by a nasty neighbor in southern Indiana years ago for crossing their driveway. I saw him there and was in a hurry so drove on to town. Another regret that haunts me still. If I had just stopped and called him back. God help me, it's my fault. Just like my dog Bear. I hate myself for these things...take care my dear friend...and warm! xoxo! Susan
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Hi Susan,
You're welcome. What a horrible neighbor! Where do these people come from?
love,
Katie
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It's just Indiana, I hope. I hope it's not this way everywhere...I've never had such idiocy around me. I'm going to write about it someday after meeting with an attorney about the legalities of how to do it. That cat was just one of several pets we've had killed. Katie...it's just awful. That cat was the size of a mouse when I found him along a highway, about to be hit. I put him in my jacket and he crawled up my sleeve he was so scared...God help me, but I still hate those people for that. Patches didn't deserve to be shot. Well, I'll stop. I get so mad. Love you too. Susan
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Oh girl, you have got to get out of the midwest! What horrible neighbors! You know people think New Yorkers aren't nice but I'd take a New Yorker any day compared to a lot of midwesterners that's for sure! They certainly wouldn't kill a cat! Geez! or torture their neighbors!
xoxo,
Katie
Comment from sasil
What a cozy and warm-hearted story you've shared with us, Suze. I liked the images of the rustbucket and stand-off between cat and mice. You enrich the scene with subordinate characters (the farmer and the sledders)and give strong voice to the main character--Patches. The scene isn't terribly dramatic, and yet I was at the edge of my seat, waiting (and rooting for) the cat to have his turn at victory. Be well, warm, and safe too, dear writer--S.
reply by the author on 10-Nov-2011
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What a cozy and warm-hearted story you've shared with us, Suze. I liked the images of the rustbucket and stand-off between cat and mice. You enrich the scene with subordinate characters (the farmer and the sledders)and give strong voice to the main character--Patches. The scene isn't terribly dramatic, and yet I was at the edge of my seat, waiting (and rooting for) the cat to have his turn at victory. Be well, warm, and safe too, dear writer--S.
Comment Written 07-Nov-2011
reply by the author on 10-Nov-2011
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Hi Lisa! Thank you so much. I am simply thrilled at this review...you got it, you understood how I wanted this to be. Seems your studies and classes are really wonderful Lisa. I am sure you will succeed as a writer, a pro, soon. Don't give up, and you too, take care, GOOD care of yourself...Love, susan
Comment from anne1204
A wonderful story, I love the details in your writing. It was been my experience that male cats are lazy, they leave all the mousing for the female. This is a great story of adult and child. Anne
reply by the author on 10-Nov-2011
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A wonderful story, I love the details in your writing. It was been my experience that male cats are lazy, they leave all the mousing for the female. This is a great story of adult and child. Anne
Comment Written 07-Nov-2011
reply by the author on 10-Nov-2011
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HI Anne! What a joy to know you enjoyed this so!! I am always so happy when you approve of my efforts!! Please forgive me this late reply, I have not been so hot, and surgery tomorrow too. NO fun.? Ha....You take care my friend...love! Susan
