The Warrior
A child and a dog lost in a Montana winter storm.22 total reviews
Comment from nancyjam
You had my heart locked in to this story from the
very first paragraph. Absolutely stunning - so full of
emotion, courage, love bravery....
Your descriptive writing had me on that mountain looking for
Amanda and her friend.
wonderful story. Loved it.
reply by the author on 14-Nov-2011
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You had my heart locked in to this story from the
very first paragraph. Absolutely stunning - so full of
emotion, courage, love bravery....
Your descriptive writing had me on that mountain looking for
Amanda and her friend.
wonderful story. Loved it.
Comment Written 12-Nov-2011
reply by the author on 14-Nov-2011
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I hope you had a winter jacket on for that trip. I so appreciate your wonderful and couraging words. My writing goal is to transport the reader into the story as a participant not simply a "reader" and it sounds like I succeeded. I hope you will remember some great things from your life as you remember t words from "The Warrior". Mike "mossmouse"
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I hope you had a winter jacket on for that trip. I so appreciate your wonderful and encouraging words. My writing goal is to transport the reader into the story as a participant not simply a "reader" and it sounds like I succeeded. I hope you will remember some great things from your life as you remember t words from "The Warrior". Mike "mossmouse"
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I hope you had a winter jacket on for that trip. I so appreciate your wonderful and encouraging words. My writing goal is to transport the reader into the story as a participant not simply a "reader" and it sounds like I succeeded. I hope you will remember some great things from your life as you remember the words from "The Warrior". Mike "mossmouse"
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I hope you had a winter jacket on for that trip. I so appreciate your wonderful and encouraging words. My writing goal is to transport the reader into the story as a participant not simply a "reader" and it sounds like I succeeded. I hope you will remember some great things from your life as you remember the words from "The Warrior". Mike "mossmouse"
Comment from Gungalo
It's an amazing story too. Such feeling and compassion is shown. The ending, about Ripley, was amazingly told. A place in the sun. Sigh...
reply by the author on 14-Nov-2011
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It's an amazing story too. Such feeling and compassion is shown. The ending, about Ripley, was amazingly told. A place in the sun. Sigh...
Comment Written 12-Nov-2011
reply by the author on 14-Nov-2011
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We all hope for a restful place in the sun someday! I truly appreciate your review of "The Warrior." It is truly encouaraging to receive so many positive reviews. I appreciate the time you took to "pen" your words. Mike "mossmouse"
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We all hope for a restful place in the sun someday! I truly appreciate your review of "The Warrior." It is truly encouaraging to receive so many positive reviews. I appreciate the time you took to "pen" your words. Mike "mossmouse"
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We all hope for a restful place in the sun someday! I truly appreciate your review of "The Warrior." It is truly encouaraging to receive so many positive reviews. I appreciate the time you took to "pen" your words. Mike "mossmouse"
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We all hope for a restful place in the sun someday! I truly appreciate your review of "The Warrior." It is truly encouaraging to receive so many positive reviews. I appreciate the time you took to "pen" your words. Mike "mossmouse"
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My pleasure Mike!!
Comment from WilliamDeen
Nice work. A very enjoyable that touches the heart. Your details were excellent and descriptions vivid. Well done and thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 21-Nov-2011
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Nice work. A very enjoyable that touches the heart. Your details were excellent and descriptions vivid. Well done and thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 12-Nov-2011
reply by the author on 21-Nov-2011
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Glad you enjoyed the adventure of Ripley and Amanada. Thyank you for your kind owrds. Mossmouse
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Glad you enjoyed the adventure of Ripley and Amanada. Thyank you for your kind owrds. Mossmouse
Comment from Tonulak
I liked this astounding of courage and it was full of descriptive language like"tears burned like forest fires in her eyes". It fit very well with the natural surroundings. I saw one mistake, "plaintiff" should be plaintive, as the plaintiff is the one bringing charges in a court of law. This was packed with action and good read.
reply by the author on 11-Nov-2011
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I liked this astounding of courage and it was full of descriptive language like"tears burned like forest fires in her eyes". It fit very well with the natural surroundings. I saw one mistake, "plaintiff" should be plaintive, as the plaintiff is the one bringing charges in a court of law. This was packed with action and good read.
Comment Written 10-Nov-2011
reply by the author on 11-Nov-2011
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thanks for the catch on plantiff! Already fixed it. Glad you took time to read it....Mike
Comment from Janie King
This does say this is fiction...it is well-written and reads smoothly..If you want more reviews I would suggestion doing this as a two part story...many of the reviews won't take time to read a real long piece...I considered stopping in the middle just because of the length of the piece..very touching story. God bless.
reply by the author on 11-Nov-2011
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This does say this is fiction...it is well-written and reads smoothly..If you want more reviews I would suggestion doing this as a two part story...many of the reviews won't take time to read a real long piece...I considered stopping in the middle just because of the length of the piece..very touching story. God bless.
Comment Written 10-Nov-2011
reply by the author on 11-Nov-2011
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Thanks for invensting your time to stick it out. All my stories are designed to reconnect the head weith the heart and if I did that with you then I was successful..Mike
Comment from bulbul
A wonderful, wonder-full story that elevates the heart written with the kind of excellence that leaves you searching for the right words. It is moving and inspiring. The clear straightforward language that highlights the drama without making the narrative melodramatic and the direct narrative style make this read a special delight to read.
reply by the author on 11-Nov-2011
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A wonderful, wonder-full story that elevates the heart written with the kind of excellence that leaves you searching for the right words. It is moving and inspiring. The clear straightforward language that highlights the drama without making the narrative melodramatic and the direct narrative style make this read a special delight to read.
Comment Written 10-Nov-2011
reply by the author on 11-Nov-2011
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A very well written review and i appreciate that very much. I have other stories I will be putting up soon. I am glad you took time from your day to read it. Mike
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You're welcome, Mike. bulbul
Comment from Karen Stram
The story moved me to tears. If I had six stars to give I would give them. So beautiful, so gripping, so terrifying. I read it as fast as I could because I had to find out what happened - so scared st tale would end in tragedy.
reply by the author on 11-Nov-2011
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The story moved me to tears. If I had six stars to give I would give them. So beautiful, so gripping, so terrifying. I read it as fast as I could because I had to find out what happened - so scared st tale would end in tragedy.
Comment Written 10-Nov-2011
reply by the author on 11-Nov-2011
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The tragedy part is funny you mentioned that. When I was reading it to my wife a while back and got the part where the dog had just pulled Amanda up on the trail and laid down; she told me if I let that dog die she would never speak to me again. I never intended that but that was the scence I was setting...guess I was successful. Thank you for reading the Warrior. Mike
Comment from alexisleech
What a wonderful inspiring story! I so wish I had a six to give you. I once had a German Shepherd, which was an ex police dog too. The unity between 'Simba' and my son, was exactly as you describe here, because they are the most beautiful, faithful animals who, although showing affection for the whole household, usually bond completely with only one.
A beautifully written story and a pleasure to read. Well done!
reply by the author on 09-Nov-2011
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What a wonderful inspiring story! I so wish I had a six to give you. I once had a German Shepherd, which was an ex police dog too. The unity between 'Simba' and my son, was exactly as you describe here, because they are the most beautiful, faithful animals who, although showing affection for the whole household, usually bond completely with only one.
A beautifully written story and a pleasure to read. Well done!
Comment Written 09-Nov-2011
reply by the author on 09-Nov-2011
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Thank you very much for your thoughts on my story. It was great to put this one on paper even though it took several weeks to accomplish. I wanted the child to have a unique pet and Ripley, the dog who couldn't bark, seemed to be the answer. Have an awesome day alexisleech. Mike
Comment from gypsynet
gripping story that casts a spell as tension rises and rises for the search of amanda... the flow of the plot gievs the reader a sense of foreboding till the final relief is released.. the hearing impairment adds more humanstic approach to the theme.. well written with images that makes the goosebumps throb... a heartwarming piece that can be read again and still maintain it's poetic strength...well done
reply by the author on 07-Nov-2011
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gripping story that casts a spell as tension rises and rises for the search of amanda... the flow of the plot gievs the reader a sense of foreboding till the final relief is released.. the hearing impairment adds more humanstic approach to the theme.. well written with images that makes the goosebumps throb... a heartwarming piece that can be read again and still maintain it's poetic strength...well done
Comment Written 07-Nov-2011
reply by the author on 07-Nov-2011
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Thank you for the awesome review. I have a few more going up soon..I do love to get the reader "into" the story...
Comment from peggles
This was a heart breaker
So full of emotion and such an interesting subject
I love this and have been reading it over and over
you are a true story teller
well done
I wish I had a six
five seems to underate this fine work
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reply by the author on 05-Nov-2011
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This was a heart breaker
So full of emotion and such an interesting subject
I love this and have been reading it over and over
you are a true story teller
well done
I wish I had a six
five seems to underate this fine work
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 05-Nov-2011
reply by the author on 05-Nov-2011
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Feel free to pass it on. Your words are greatly appreciated. I will be posting more stories this weekend for all to enjoy. Mike
