Senryu Provocations
Viewing comments for Chapter 36 "fat pigeons "Reflection on human behavior
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Comment from God's Writer
Aso, need more target practice!!!!! Pigeons no good aim. Aso, aso, aso. Need to paint red zeros for pigeons. Pigeon need aim. Aso, Aso. Another great laugh that was sorely needed after a night of wrestling with the demons of fear and indetermination, sorrow and hatred. Thank you my good friend for the good belly laugh. This old soul really, really needed it!!!!!!!!!!
reply by the author on 07-Nov-2011
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Aso, need more target practice!!!!! Pigeons no good aim. Aso, aso, aso. Need to paint red zeros for pigeons. Pigeon need aim. Aso, Aso. Another great laugh that was sorely needed after a night of wrestling with the demons of fear and indetermination, sorrow and hatred. Thank you my good friend for the good belly laugh. This old soul really, really needed it!!!!!!!!!!
Comment Written 07-Nov-2011
reply by the author on 07-Nov-2011
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Glad again to make you laugh, my friend and scare away the demons.
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What demons! it is just the darker side of life.
Comment from poetstar
Oh how clever and funny. How did you think of that. My your are funny and poetic. I know a girl who got a brand new suede coat and right away a pigeon went on it. They should be required to wear depends. Thanks for sharing. The poem is a riot.
reply by the author on 06-Nov-2011
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Oh how clever and funny. How did you think of that. My your are funny and poetic. I know a girl who got a brand new suede coat and right away a pigeon went on it. They should be required to wear depends. Thanks for sharing. The poem is a riot.
Comment Written 06-Nov-2011
reply by the author on 06-Nov-2011
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Glad it gave you a laugh.
Comment from Eleanor Buron
Quite a cute photo of pudgy pigeons. Need depends? I hope I was to laugh because I thought of 'Depends" the waterproof panties sold in the drugstore. LOL I enjoyed the poem and photo combo very much.
reply by the author on 05-Nov-2011
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Quite a cute photo of pudgy pigeons. Need depends? I hope I was to laugh because I thought of 'Depends" the waterproof panties sold in the drugstore. LOL I enjoyed the poem and photo combo very much.
Comment Written 05-Nov-2011
reply by the author on 05-Nov-2011
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That was the idea. I capitalized Depends originally, but one reviewer thought people would get it without doing do. Thanks for the kudos.
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I agree no capitalization is needed. Elly
Comment from robyn corum
So what am I going to say to fill up this box? You just wrote a poem about bird poop. Yes, it was a good poem about bird poop, but.....
reply by the author on 04-Nov-2011
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So what am I going to say to fill up this box? You just wrote a poem about bird poop. Yes, it was a good poem about bird poop, but.....
Comment Written 04-Nov-2011
reply by the author on 04-Nov-2011
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It's hard to fill up space on a poem with only eleven words!
Comment from TammyGail
Lmao ... They sure in the hell do
Lol I laughed so hard reading this
Loved the part about them needing depends
:) Great imagery as well
It was a pleasure
reply by the author on 04-Nov-2011
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Lmao ... They sure in the hell do
Lol I laughed so hard reading this
Loved the part about them needing depends
:) Great imagery as well
It was a pleasure
Comment Written 04-Nov-2011
reply by the author on 04-Nov-2011
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Thanks Tammy. My hubby didn't get it. Never heard of Depends.
Comment from Tom C. Adams
Now THAT's funny, spitfire. And that's why I wear a ballcap...everywhere.
ummmm...."ancient ART?"
ancient art
former fart
Duck! here comes another dart!
Tom C.
reply by the author on 04-Nov-2011
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Now THAT's funny, spitfire. And that's why I wear a ballcap...everywhere.
ummmm...."ancient ART?"
ancient art
former fart
Duck! here comes another dart!
Tom C.
Comment Written 04-Nov-2011
reply by the author on 04-Nov-2011
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LOL. Good review. I wanted to use fart in this, but thought the Japs would get me for abusing their form.
Comment from Judian James
HA!! Who could possibly resist this piece with a title like that? I just commented to my walking partner the other day, (we live in a land of seagulls, being on the coast) that I have never been plooped on in my life! I thought that was incredible until he said that he never had either!!
Funny one, Shari. You might consider de-capitalizing
"Depends" People will still get it but you will then introduce a second meaning. Just a thought.
reply by the author on 04-Nov-2011
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HA!! Who could possibly resist this piece with a title like that? I just commented to my walking partner the other day, (we live in a land of seagulls, being on the coast) that I have never been plooped on in my life! I thought that was incredible until he said that he never had either!!
Funny one, Shari. You might consider de-capitalizing
"Depends" People will still get it but you will then introduce a second meaning. Just a thought.
Comment Written 04-Nov-2011
reply by the author on 04-Nov-2011
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Thanks Judian. I debated about the capital. But my hubby didn't get it --but I prefer your way which does introduce the second meaning. Will change. Thanks a bunch.
Comment from Deannsil08
Yes, birds do have an unfortunate, annoying habit of crapping everywhere. I agree, they should make bird diapers. Lol. And yes it's an ancient art form. We've all been crapping since the beginning of time but seriously birds.......Could you not do it on my favorite T-shirt or my hair or my car. That's just rude!!! Lol. Brilliant. Beautiful. Bravo.
reply by the author on 04-Nov-2011
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Yes, birds do have an unfortunate, annoying habit of crapping everywhere. I agree, they should make bird diapers. Lol. And yes it's an ancient art form. We've all been crapping since the beginning of time but seriously birds.......Could you not do it on my favorite T-shirt or my hair or my car. That's just rude!!! Lol. Brilliant. Beautiful. Bravo.
Comment Written 04-Nov-2011
reply by the author on 04-Nov-2011
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Thanks Dean. I had one poop on my hair! Would have liked to wring his/her neck.
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Your welcome. And my name is Deannsil. I'm a woman. Lol.
Comment from Avrilnova
Oh my gosh! This is funny...and so true. Fantastic job bringing humor to the haiku! Keep 'em coming. Although haiku is technically 5/7/5 syllable format. Other than that it would have been a 5 star.
reply by the author on 04-Nov-2011
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Oh my gosh! This is funny...and so true. Fantastic job bringing humor to the haiku! Keep 'em coming. Although haiku is technically 5/7/5 syllable format. Other than that it would have been a 5 star.
Comment Written 04-Nov-2011
reply by the author on 04-Nov-2011
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I thought it could also be a 3-5-3 according to Bellydanser who is writing a series on this form. Well, you gave me 5 stars anyway. Know I have done that in error sometimes-meaning a 4.
But I never went back to change it.
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I stand corrected. Great job!
Comment from stephybs
Hahaha! This really does tell a story! And the art work well just fits perfect! Well said and very well thought up! Stephanie
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reply by the author on 04-Nov-2011
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Hahaha! This really does tell a story! And the art work well just fits perfect! Well said and very well thought up! Stephanie
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Comment Written 04-Nov-2011
reply by the author on 04-Nov-2011
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Thanks Steph. It's not so funny when it really happens though.
