Ghosts Of Peggy Hollow
Speaking up is dangerous...27 total reviews
Comment from robina1978
Thought it bare some likeness to your life. We must be getting to know each other quite well.
Your story is a real horror and life can be like that. Loved the picture you chose to complement it.
Well written and with realistic characters for this kind of writing.
reply by the author on 02-Nov-2011
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Thought it bare some likeness to your life. We must be getting to know each other quite well.
Your story is a real horror and life can be like that. Loved the picture you chose to complement it.
Well written and with realistic characters for this kind of writing.
Comment Written 01-Nov-2011
reply by the author on 02-Nov-2011
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Hi Ine! Yes, you remember things I've written before probably. Thank you. This is fiction, but I tried to sort of use it as an analogy, or ?? Metaphor for what has happened to me. An ongoing battle...very infuriating...thanks again Ine!! Take care and don't walk alone at night! Luv, susan
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Yes hon of course I do remeber.
Comment from Minglement
Well done! Very interesting tale ending in a lot of mystery :) I wondered of course, if the ending was true? Then you say it's a metaphor for you life. Nice imagery and personification of the character('). Good job. Couple of nits below.
false sense of security(;) evil raised (I'm pretty sure this would just use a comma.)
I tune (into) the small rustlings (I think in this case, it would two words, (in to')
reply by the author on 01-Nov-2011
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Well done! Very interesting tale ending in a lot of mystery :) I wondered of course, if the ending was true? Then you say it's a metaphor for you life. Nice imagery and personification of the character('). Good job. Couple of nits below.
false sense of security(;) evil raised (I'm pretty sure this would just use a comma.)
I tune (into) the small rustlings (I think in this case, it would two words, (in to')
Comment Written 01-Nov-2011
reply by the author on 01-Nov-2011
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Hi Marcia! How are you?? I will fix these asap...I'm trying to catch up...I spent most of the day 'guarding' my animals...an ultralight spooked one of our horses and I had to coax her back into the lot...she went thru a fence...albeit a flimsy one, but still. "/ SO tired. And just now got back from tracking the dog down..I had to ride the mower and freeze. WILL it NEVER END?????????? Thank you again...your reviews are all so encouraging Marcia...hugs!! Susan
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You're so welcome. Sorry about the critters. I know that's worrisome. Stay warm. We're still in the high sixties and low seventies in the daytime, but I know the cold is coming. The air is crisp and the trees are gorgeous. Rest up :) Marcia
Comment from sasil
Nice job with the flash form/narrative. Not sure how to interpret, as author notes specify this is a metaphor for your life-I'm thinking there are parts that are truth and others are veiled in partial truths and shades of what the narrator wishes to have been true. Forebodding and tense--I had the sense of a spirit going home to haunt after the body was no longer able to make the journney in the flesh. My membership has expired--is this why the rating asked if I am human and gave a simple mathmatic equation to answer? Strange. Good work here, Suze--best wishes in writing, and in...thinking of you.
S.
reply by the author on 01-Nov-2011
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Nice job with the flash form/narrative. Not sure how to interpret, as author notes specify this is a metaphor for your life-I'm thinking there are parts that are truth and others are veiled in partial truths and shades of what the narrator wishes to have been true. Forebodding and tense--I had the sense of a spirit going home to haunt after the body was no longer able to make the journney in the flesh. My membership has expired--is this why the rating asked if I am human and gave a simple mathmatic equation to answer? Strange. Good work here, Suze--best wishes in writing, and in...thinking of you.
S.
Comment Written 01-Nov-2011
reply by the author on 01-Nov-2011
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HI Lisa! HUGS and a thousand thank you's too! If you like I will gladly keep your account alive at least for a while, ???? Let me know! I don't want you to go unless you just want to! Love and best, always! Susan
Comment from dejohnsrld (Debbie)
Very well written and evokes strong emotions of loss, guilt and sadness. I know you have a living situation where it feels as though evil exists which is so sad. I wish there was something that could be done to improve your living situation. At least you have your writing to express yourself and to distract you from it by being in a better, virtual place. Love you-take care!!! Debbie
reply by the author on 01-Nov-2011
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Very well written and evokes strong emotions of loss, guilt and sadness. I know you have a living situation where it feels as though evil exists which is so sad. I wish there was something that could be done to improve your living situation. At least you have your writing to express yourself and to distract you from it by being in a better, virtual place. Love you-take care!!! Debbie
Comment Written 31-Oct-2011
reply by the author on 01-Nov-2011
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These words of kindness mean a lot to me Debbie. Thank you...I wish I could really write the facts verbatum. But not yet...someday...many will think I'm crazy, others will see the truth. America is full of some really awful people who are in positions to truly hurt others. It's frightening too. I have moved and moved...and gee, HOW does it keep going?????????? Hmmmmm....thanks again Deb ... You take care too!! xoxo! Susan
Comment from bowls
What a magnificent piece of writing! There are so many good things I could say about it. Your opening paragraph is mesmerising. You not only set the scene and introduce the subject of your story, but you also create a very chilling atmosphere. Your second paragraph adds the perfect note of nostalgia and connects the narrator even more closely with the events he is relating. The aloneness and the cold further enhance the atmosphere you've already established. The last part of your story is totally heart-wrenching and you make your reader feel that to his very bones. "Home was dead" says more in three words than a lengthy description of what happened could possibly express. Your prose is smooth and flawless here.Thanks for a great reading experience.
reply by the author on 01-Nov-2011
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What a magnificent piece of writing! There are so many good things I could say about it. Your opening paragraph is mesmerising. You not only set the scene and introduce the subject of your story, but you also create a very chilling atmosphere. Your second paragraph adds the perfect note of nostalgia and connects the narrator even more closely with the events he is relating. The aloneness and the cold further enhance the atmosphere you've already established. The last part of your story is totally heart-wrenching and you make your reader feel that to his very bones. "Home was dead" says more in three words than a lengthy description of what happened could possibly express. Your prose is smooth and flawless here.Thanks for a great reading experience.
Comment Written 31-Oct-2011
reply by the author on 01-Nov-2011
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Hi Fausto! Thank you so very much! I didn't know if this was too short...I'm glad you understood what I am saying...this is a fiction, but 'home was dead' is my life. I just exist, not live...because of constant torment from certain cretins. So, this review means a lot and I appreciate it with all my heart. Your friend, Susan
Comment from Writingfundimension
Hi, Susan. This is a deeply affecting piece of fiction. I am sorry if you experienced the same kind of loss as your character in the story. Losing someone when you are young does feel as if all the evil in the world has somehow found you. Your first-person narrative works extremely well here. And your prose reaches poetic heights at times. Great job! Warm regards, Bev
reply by the author on 01-Nov-2011
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Hi, Susan. This is a deeply affecting piece of fiction. I am sorry if you experienced the same kind of loss as your character in the story. Losing someone when you are young does feel as if all the evil in the world has somehow found you. Your first-person narrative works extremely well here. And your prose reaches poetic heights at times. Great job! Warm regards, Bev
Comment Written 31-Oct-2011
reply by the author on 01-Nov-2011
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Hi Bev! What a nice review...very encouraging and kind too. This story is a mix of things, it's such a long story. I am contemplating a book...but have to wait on it due to legalities. God help me. Thank you again Bev...hugs!! Susan
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Absolutely my pleasure, Susan! Xx Bev
Comment from Mary Ann MCPhedran
a good write I think you excel on Halloween time .Your stories get spookier each time I read them.Your story has lots of imagery. A good write, therefore a good read. Mary
reply by the author on 01-Nov-2011
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a good write I think you excel on Halloween time .Your stories get spookier each time I read them.Your story has lots of imagery. A good write, therefore a good read. Mary
Comment Written 31-Oct-2011
reply by the author on 01-Nov-2011
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HI Mary! Thank you so very much...this story is close to my heart/nervous system, and so this means the world that you like it so. It's a long story! You are so encouraging and kind! HUG! Susan
Comment from sweetwoodjax
this is very well written, susan, a great job writing this story about the woman who was killed for standing up for her rights while her child and husband were gone...
reply by the author on 01-Nov-2011
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this is very well written, susan, a great job writing this story about the woman who was killed for standing up for her rights while her child and husband were gone...
Comment Written 31-Oct-2011
reply by the author on 01-Nov-2011
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Hi Pam! Thank you! This is just fiction, but some things about it are real. Real place, KKK is alive and well, tho not strong anymore...well...it's a book in the making, maybe! LOL! Many thanks, your thoughts are always appreciated Pam!! Susan
Comment from c_lucas
Cowards, masking their idenity need not be celebrated. Their names and acts should be made public. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for an easy read.
reply by the author on 01-Nov-2011
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Cowards, masking their idenity need not be celebrated. Their names and acts should be made public. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for an easy read.
Comment Written 31-Oct-2011
reply by the author on 01-Nov-2011
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Hi C! THIS is true...and may be the case soon. Thank you. I do wish the world would straighten up...oh well. We can just try to be the best we can in our own worlds I guess. Thanks again Charlie!! Susan
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You're welcome, Susan. Charlie
Comment from Spitfire
A metaphor for your life? Well, this is obviously about the KKK stringing up either an African American or a white person who spoke out against racism. The writing is beautiful, as always. Love the minute details in paragraph two and humor in the M&M compared the the rotting fence. A haunting piece by a haunted writer. Love ya, Shari
reply by the author on 01-Nov-2011
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A metaphor for your life? Well, this is obviously about the KKK stringing up either an African American or a white person who spoke out against racism. The writing is beautiful, as always. Love the minute details in paragraph two and humor in the M&M compared the the rotting fence. A haunting piece by a haunted writer. Love ya, Shari
Comment Written 31-Oct-2011
reply by the author on 01-Nov-2011
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Hi Shari! Someday, if you're still here, I hope you'll help me with a book about all this. For now I have to wait due to legalities. I have just about had it. LONG story...so, your review is so accurate..."haunted writer"...I'm haunted by many evil events that are still happening. Infuriating. Well, ahh! Thanks again...hug! Susan
