Witness
The Unimagineable86 total reviews
Comment from TammyGail
Blah.. It still burns my ass Bob
Those... Ahem excuse me rag rat bastards
Such a sad and unnecessary loss of blood
Coward attack indeed
Now I'm pissed just thinking about it
I think forever America will morn these poor souls that died on this horrid day
Great poem Bob very strong and well written
Excuse my lovely language please ....
reply by the author on 30-Oct-2011
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Blah.. It still burns my ass Bob
Those... Ahem excuse me rag rat bastards
Such a sad and unnecessary loss of blood
Coward attack indeed
Now I'm pissed just thinking about it
I think forever America will morn these poor souls that died on this horrid day
Great poem Bob very strong and well written
Excuse my lovely language please ....
Comment Written 30-Oct-2011
reply by the author on 30-Oct-2011
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Hi, Tammy. Thanks so much for your time and I know how you feel, believe me. Bob
Comment from Alan K Pease
You did a excellent job on this poem, Bob. The ABC poem is perfect and the photo of New York and the search lights up into the sky paints are a poignant reminder of the terrorist attack.
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You did a excellent job on this poem, Bob. The ABC poem is perfect and the photo of New York and the search lights up into the sky paints are a poignant reminder of the terrorist attack.
Comment Written 30-Oct-2011
reply by the author on 30-Oct-2011
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Well, thanks so much, Alan. Goodness...a six stars? You are a heck of a guy! Bob
Comment from AprilShower
This poem tells what our whole country feels. It was a day of unexpected horror and it seems the horror goes on and on with the deaths and loss of many of our young people. You have written an excellent ABC poem. Good luck on the contest.
April
reply by the author on 30-Oct-2011
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This poem tells what our whole country feels. It was a day of unexpected horror and it seems the horror goes on and on with the deaths and loss of many of our young people. You have written an excellent ABC poem. Good luck on the contest.
April
Comment Written 30-Oct-2011
reply by the author on 30-Oct-2011
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Thanks so much, April...I do so appreciate your review and the six stars. Bles you! Bob
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You're welcome, Mastery. Bless you, too. April
Comment from patsolstad
I'm sorry to tell you that you did not fulfill the rules of the contest. Five lines are required. Perhaps you can edit this so it will be acceptable by the contest readers.
Aaaah, I knew you could do it! Nice job. Consider, though, using another word, if you can, than 'unbelievable.' It works, but it is almost a cliche'. How about something like 'unbearable horror' or 'unbearable agony,' or 'unbearable loss' or ?? Best of luck in the contest!
reply by the author on 30-Oct-2011
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I'm sorry to tell you that you did not fulfill the rules of the contest. Five lines are required. Perhaps you can edit this so it will be acceptable by the contest readers.
Aaaah, I knew you could do it! Nice job. Consider, though, using another word, if you can, than 'unbelievable.' It works, but it is almost a cliche'. How about something like 'unbearable horror' or 'unbearable agony,' or 'unbearable loss' or ?? Best of luck in the contest!
Comment Written 30-Oct-2011
reply by the author on 30-Oct-2011
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Thanks so much...It's done...Want to look and perhaps change your rating? LOL Thanks...Bob
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Sure...I'll take another look.
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Thanks so much, Pat. I appreciate it very much. Bob
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Thanks so much, Pat. Bob
Comment from Linda England Bonam
I loved this ABC poem that you wrote. That is indeed a tragedy that will not ever be forgotten.
You wrote it very well, in so few words! Great job, Bob!
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I loved this ABC poem that you wrote. That is indeed a tragedy that will not ever be forgotten.
You wrote it very well, in so few words! Great job, Bob!
Comment Written 30-Oct-2011
reply by the author on 30-Oct-2011
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Thanks so much, Linda. Bless you. Bob
Comment from jennyindy
Bob,
What an excellent entry, on a topic that remains raw to many..I used to live there..and feel it personally. One alert..according to the contest rules, it mentions a 5th line beginning with any letter. But maybe its optional?
Anyway..very toucging entry,
Jenny
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reply by the author on 30-Oct-2011
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Bob,
What an excellent entry, on a topic that remains raw to many..I used to live there..and feel it personally. One alert..according to the contest rules, it mentions a 5th line beginning with any letter. But maybe its optional?
Anyway..very toucging entry,
Jenny
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The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 30-Oct-2011
reply by the author on 30-Oct-2011
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Thanks, Jenny...No, you are right it's five lines...I fixed it...LOL...I am from the Island originally too. Bob
