Snowfall
Waiting for the snow to pile,is a troublesome task2 total reviews
Comment from Glasstruth
The last line has six syllables. For the contest they get picky about the count. The poem paints a nice picture -- and welcome to Fanstory.
Les
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The last line has six syllables. For the contest they get picky about the count. The poem paints a nice picture -- and welcome to Fanstory.
Les
Comment Written 29-Oct-2011
Comment from Van
Last line in this 5,7,5 has 6 syllables making this a 5,7,6. You could probably fix it fairly easily...I might recommend:
[It happens so easy.]:- 'Simply it happens.' Or 'It happens simply.'
Or anything with five syllables.
Cheers.
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Last line in this 5,7,5 has 6 syllables making this a 5,7,6. You could probably fix it fairly easily...I might recommend:
[It happens so easy.]:- 'Simply it happens.' Or 'It happens simply.'
Or anything with five syllables.
Cheers.
Comment Written 29-Oct-2011
