Miranda
Sad poem for my grand-daughter( free verse)28 total reviews
Comment from Tonulak
You set the scene so very well; those days may seem like the most beautiful, begine day ((like 9/11) and heartbreaking can occur. The strkness of the lines, enhanced rather than detracted from the tragedy. Very well done.
reply by the author on 31-Oct-2011
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You set the scene so very well; those days may seem like the most beautiful, begine day ((like 9/11) and heartbreaking can occur. The strkness of the lines, enhanced rather than detracted from the tragedy. Very well done.
Comment Written 30-Oct-2011
reply by the author on 31-Oct-2011
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Thank you for your kind review of my poem. It was a heartbreaking time in our lives. This was the first time I have ever in the almost 20 years that I have been able to tell this story. Thank you for reading.
Comment from peggles
This is so touching and my heart goes out to you
Such a loss is impossible comprehend
Your story has strong images of loss and sadness
It has smooth line flow and your photo adds a tragic touch to your poem
I thought you wrote this with a lot of courage and strength
reply by the author on 31-Oct-2011
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This is so touching and my heart goes out to you
Such a loss is impossible comprehend
Your story has strong images of loss and sadness
It has smooth line flow and your photo adds a tragic touch to your poem
I thought you wrote this with a lot of courage and strength
Comment Written 29-Oct-2011
reply by the author on 31-Oct-2011
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Thank you for your kind review of my poem. This was the first time in almost 20 years that I was able to put this down on paper. Yes, it brought back bad memories but also it seemed to help. Thank you for your review.
Comment from alexisleech
I'm not surprised that this poem was a contest winner. There is nothing, in my opinion, worse than the death of a child, and the way you describe her little body in the water creates a heartbreaking image. It's one of the saddest poems I have ever read, but I'm so glad that I did. It makes you realise just how lucky you are not to have experienced a loss like this.
reply by the author on 31-Oct-2011
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I'm not surprised that this poem was a contest winner. There is nothing, in my opinion, worse than the death of a child, and the way you describe her little body in the water creates a heartbreaking image. It's one of the saddest poems I have ever read, but I'm so glad that I did. It makes you realise just how lucky you are not to have experienced a loss like this.
Comment Written 29-Oct-2011
reply by the author on 31-Oct-2011
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Thank you Alexis for your kind review of my poem. This was the first time in almost 20 years that I had been able to write anything about Miranda's death. It was hard but it helped. Thank you for your kindness.
Comment from tazzyM
WOW, This piece is so emotional, it bought a tear to my eyes.
I can't imagine the pain that the family went through at this time. I'm sorry for the loss of this beautiful child.
After reading this piece the picture becomes a scary reality, so moving and heartfelt.
thank you so much for sharing this with us
reply by the author on 31-Oct-2011
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WOW, This piece is so emotional, it bought a tear to my eyes.
I can't imagine the pain that the family went through at this time. I'm sorry for the loss of this beautiful child.
After reading this piece the picture becomes a scary reality, so moving and heartfelt.
thank you so much for sharing this with us
Comment Written 29-Oct-2011
reply by the author on 31-Oct-2011
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Thank you for your kind review of my poem. This was the first time in almost 20 years that I had been able to write anything about Miranda's death. It was hard but it helped. Thank you for your kindness.
Comment from cherylmelwoods
Oh my God I'm so so sorry for your loss. I pray time will ease your pain though it will never wipe the memories away. I can only imagine the grief and my heart goes out to you and family. Sometimes writing these things down is bizarrely cathartic. God bless Cheryl
reply by the author on 31-Oct-2011
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Oh my God I'm so so sorry for your loss. I pray time will ease your pain though it will never wipe the memories away. I can only imagine the grief and my heart goes out to you and family. Sometimes writing these things down is bizarrely cathartic. God bless Cheryl
Comment Written 29-Oct-2011
reply by the author on 31-Oct-2011
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Thank you for your kind review of my poem. This was the first time in almost 20 years that I had been able to write anything about Miranda's death. It was hard but it helped. Thank you for your kindness.
Comment from bowls
I'm so sorry for your loss. What a terrible experience to go through. You've done a good job of expressing your sense of loss in this poem. You relate the events well, first picturing the ordinary, sunny day creating a pleasant backdrop upon which to display the tragic sight of the child in the pool. The contrast is mind-numbing. It is a very sad poem indeed, but very beautifully told.
reply by the author on 31-Oct-2011
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I'm so sorry for your loss. What a terrible experience to go through. You've done a good job of expressing your sense of loss in this poem. You relate the events well, first picturing the ordinary, sunny day creating a pleasant backdrop upon which to display the tragic sight of the child in the pool. The contrast is mind-numbing. It is a very sad poem indeed, but very beautifully told.
Comment Written 28-Oct-2011
reply by the author on 31-Oct-2011
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Thank you for your kind review of my poem. This was the first time in almost 20 years that I had been able to write anything about Miranda's death. It was hard but it helped. Thank you for your kindness.
Comment from rchitwood
It is so sad when this happens I know of one that drowned in a mop bucket she tripped head first into it. Your story has strong images of loss and sadness.It has smooth line flow and your photo adds a tragic touch to your poem.Blessings Rita
reply by the author on 31-Oct-2011
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It is so sad when this happens I know of one that drowned in a mop bucket she tripped head first into it. Your story has strong images of loss and sadness.It has smooth line flow and your photo adds a tragic touch to your poem.Blessings Rita
Comment Written 28-Oct-2011
reply by the author on 31-Oct-2011
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Thank you Rita for your kind review of my poem. This was the first time in almost 20 years that I had been able to write anything about Miranda's death. It was hard but it helped. Thank you for your kindness.
Comment from Kaine Darcwater
I am so sorry for you. That had to have tore your heart from your chest. Life is so precious. You have my deepest condolences. So often I ask why God would allow something like this to happen? He could have stopped it. I guess he always has room for more angels. Kudos. ;)
reply by the author on 31-Oct-2011
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I am so sorry for you. That had to have tore your heart from your chest. Life is so precious. You have my deepest condolences. So often I ask why God would allow something like this to happen? He could have stopped it. I guess he always has room for more angels. Kudos. ;)
Comment Written 28-Oct-2011
reply by the author on 31-Oct-2011
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Thank you Bryan for your kind review of my poem. Yes, Bryan, we went throught those same type of questions about why God did not stop this from happening and for a while we were even angry with God. However, we know that He had His reason and we finally just gave it to Him and said we may never understand but we have a loving God and we'll just keep trusting Him. This was the first time in almost 20 years that I had been able to write anything about Miranda's death. It was hard but it helped. Thank you for your kindness.
Comment from MAMONIA
OMG! This is horribly sad and a terrible
tragedy. So many little children here in
Florida have drowned because we have so
many pools here and the children are not
trained to swim at such an early age.
Now it is mandatory, after so many drownings,
that children take swimming lessons.
I am a hawk watching my grandchildren in
the pool. No need to wonder why.
Great piece. Written beautifully.
Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 31-Oct-2011
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OMG! This is horribly sad and a terrible
tragedy. So many little children here in
Florida have drowned because we have so
many pools here and the children are not
trained to swim at such an early age.
Now it is mandatory, after so many drownings,
that children take swimming lessons.
I am a hawk watching my grandchildren in
the pool. No need to wonder why.
Great piece. Written beautifully.
Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 28-Oct-2011
reply by the author on 31-Oct-2011
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Thank you for your kind review of my poem. This was the first time in almost 20 years that I had been able to write anything about Miranda's death. It was hard but it helped. Thank you for your kindness.
Comment from Cheryl Baker
What could be more tragic than the loss of a child. Your poem, Miranda is well written and takes us through the process of this tragic drowning. I can almost hear the young mother's screams. Well done.
reply by the author on 31-Oct-2011
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What could be more tragic than the loss of a child. Your poem, Miranda is well written and takes us through the process of this tragic drowning. I can almost hear the young mother's screams. Well done.
Comment Written 28-Oct-2011
reply by the author on 31-Oct-2011
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Thank you Cheryl for your kind review of my poem. This was the first time in almost 20 years that I had been able to write anything about Miranda's death. It was hard but it helped. Thank you for your kindness.
