Texas Saturday Night
Free verse written for my grand daughter8 total reviews
Comment from Eleanor Buron
Back in St. Charles, IL I rode a white quarter horse trained as a barrel horse. I helped re-train Dust O' Gold
to be a trail horse. We had miles and miles of trails. Always an exciting ride, never knew what that horse would be inclined to do, like take off suddenly, leave the trail,
jump a log or two, take a turn as fast as lightning Wonderful horse! This poem brought all those memories back to me. We met Willie at a Chili cook-off down-town Chicago (put on by a radio station and the company my husband worked for at the time). We have a great photo of Willie N. with my husband. Back to the poem. "Pickup" is one word and another typo - heal is heel. I really enjoyed reading this! ;)
reply by the author on 28-Oct-2011
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Back in St. Charles, IL I rode a white quarter horse trained as a barrel horse. I helped re-train Dust O' Gold
to be a trail horse. We had miles and miles of trails. Always an exciting ride, never knew what that horse would be inclined to do, like take off suddenly, leave the trail,
jump a log or two, take a turn as fast as lightning Wonderful horse! This poem brought all those memories back to me. We met Willie at a Chili cook-off down-town Chicago (put on by a radio station and the company my husband worked for at the time). We have a great photo of Willie N. with my husband. Back to the poem. "Pickup" is one word and another typo - heal is heel. I really enjoyed reading this! ;)
Comment Written 27-Oct-2011
reply by the author on 28-Oct-2011
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Eleanor, thanks for pointing out my typo's. It's amazing how many times I can read over the same mistakes and not catch them. I will immediately correct them. Thanks for reading. I enjoyed reading about your "horse days". :o)
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You're welcome. Enjoy your writing. E
Comment from Dave Russell
Great job of portraying the sights, sounds, smells of a Texas Saturday night. This one captures all of the senses. Makes me want to come down to Texas for a visit. If I do I will let them know that JO sent me!! Nice read.
reply by the author on 28-Oct-2011
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Great job of portraying the sights, sounds, smells of a Texas Saturday night. This one captures all of the senses. Makes me want to come down to Texas for a visit. If I do I will let them know that JO sent me!! Nice read.
Comment Written 27-Oct-2011
reply by the author on 28-Oct-2011
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Well Dave come on down. :o) We are a friendly bunch. I'm glad you let me give you a tour. :o) Thanks for reading and commenting on my work.
Comment from Teresa Paul
I just had to see the person who keeps writing lovely things about me! I loved your poem it is a style I'm very fond of writing. Poems that tell a story! Your poem with it's easy flow, one verse following another so evenly smooth! Put an image in my head of my younger days. I too am an R.N. from Oklahoma! Your poem brought back wonderful memories into my head! Your picture ties it all together so well. Thank you for a wonderful read! Job Well Done!
reply by the author on 27-Oct-2011
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I just had to see the person who keeps writing lovely things about me! I loved your poem it is a style I'm very fond of writing. Poems that tell a story! Your poem with it's easy flow, one verse following another so evenly smooth! Put an image in my head of my younger days. I too am an R.N. from Oklahoma! Your poem brought back wonderful memories into my head! Your picture ties it all together so well. Thank you for a wonderful read! Job Well Done!
Comment Written 26-Oct-2011
reply by the author on 27-Oct-2011
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Thank you for the stars Teresa. My daughter is also an RN, she works at Baptist in Ok. City. I am glad you liked my poem. It was fun to write.
Comment from nancyjam
I love the details and vivid images
your include in your poem.
It gives the reader a chance to
experience "Texas saturday night" -
the sights, smells and tastes - great fun!
reply by the author on 26-Oct-2011
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I love the details and vivid images
your include in your poem.
It gives the reader a chance to
experience "Texas saturday night" -
the sights, smells and tastes - great fun!
Comment Written 26-Oct-2011
reply by the author on 26-Oct-2011
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Thank you for your kind review of my poem and the stars. I am glad to be your guide. :o)
Comment from Carasue
Loved the visual on this - you get a real sense of being there. I can see and smell it and hear it. I'd take out a few words to make it flow more smoothly. Like, "a" Saturday night and "and girls" barrel racing. Streamline it so that every word is necessary. Now, I'm not a poet, so I might be way off base, but I like the poem a lot, just couldn't find the rhythm when I read it.
reply by the author on 26-Oct-2011
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Loved the visual on this - you get a real sense of being there. I can see and smell it and hear it. I'd take out a few words to make it flow more smoothly. Like, "a" Saturday night and "and girls" barrel racing. Streamline it so that every word is necessary. Now, I'm not a poet, so I might be way off base, but I like the poem a lot, just couldn't find the rhythm when I read it.
Comment Written 26-Oct-2011
reply by the author on 26-Oct-2011
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Thanks for your kind review. I appreciate your suggestions. I will re-read and see. :o)
Comment from Betty517
Whoa horsy! That is your grand-daughter? She looks like she knows what she's doing! She must have loved this poem. You can tell she is truly enjoying herself. Great read.
Betty
reply by the author on 26-Oct-2011
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Whoa horsy! That is your grand-daughter? She looks like she knows what she's doing! She must have loved this poem. You can tell she is truly enjoying herself. Great read.
Betty
Comment Written 25-Oct-2011
reply by the author on 26-Oct-2011
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Another bathroom write. LOL. Up in the night and again it came to me. I guess if I ever publish a book I'll name it the "Bathroom Diaries" :o) My grand-daughter hasn't seen the poem yet but I think she'll smile that beautiful smile of hers when she does. :o) Thank you for the nice review and stars.
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Thanks for the burst of laughter! I bet it would sell like hotcakes. The title alone is Great! Betty
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Thanks Betty. I thought about sending it to one of our local Texas mags and see if they'll publish it. Here's hoping. :o)
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Send it! Don't even give it another thought! What is the worst that could happen? Nothing and that's already happened! Good luck, Betty
Comment from mumsyone
Nice poem for your granddaughter, and a nice picture of her. You must be very proud of her. Your poem has good rhyme and meter and read well throughout.
reply by the author on 26-Oct-2011
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Nice poem for your granddaughter, and a nice picture of her. You must be very proud of her. Your poem has good rhyme and meter and read well throughout.
Comment Written 25-Oct-2011
reply by the author on 26-Oct-2011
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I'm glad you liked my light-hearted look at a Saturday night for my grand-daughter. I'm hoping and thinking she'll smile when she sees it. Thank you for the review and the stars.
Comment from Green_Jello
A great poem you have written for your granddaughter and very vivid that I feel I am right there with all the sights and smells you have described! I am sure she will love this, great job :)
reply by the author on 26-Oct-2011
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A great poem you have written for your granddaughter and very vivid that I feel I am right there with all the sights and smells you have described! I am sure she will love this, great job :)
Comment Written 25-Oct-2011
reply by the author on 26-Oct-2011
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I'm glad you liked my light-hearted look at a Saturday night for my grand-daughter. I'm hoping and thinking she'll smile when she sees it. Thank you for the review and the stars.
