I can't stand you farting!
Only to be read if you have a sense of humour!30 total reviews
Comment from cj26544
EXCELLENT!!!Sometimes we want to tell our significant others to go sleep on the couch, but we are cowards. My ex snored so loudly on the sofa that our daughter ran into the bedroom crying, I can't sleep because "Daddy" is snoring to loud, because of Sleep Apnea,I told her to jump into the bed with me and that "Daddy" would have to sleep on the couch all night. After all of the rudeness (farting, snoring)they end up being the love of our dreams. Great Job!!!cj
reply by the author on 25-Oct-2011
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EXCELLENT!!!Sometimes we want to tell our significant others to go sleep on the couch, but we are cowards. My ex snored so loudly on the sofa that our daughter ran into the bedroom crying, I can't sleep because "Daddy" is snoring to loud, because of Sleep Apnea,I told her to jump into the bed with me and that "Daddy" would have to sleep on the couch all night. After all of the rudeness (farting, snoring)they end up being the love of our dreams. Great Job!!!cj
Comment Written 25-Oct-2011
reply by the author on 25-Oct-2011
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Thank you so much for your lovely review. The poem appears to have hit a chord with so many!
Comment from Teresa Paul
I thought this poem was hysterical! I was laughing out loud throughout this entire piece of excellent work! Wonderful cadence of rhymes caring the reader quickly from one funny verse to the other. I am so showing this to my husband, who constantly asks, " Why are you sleeping on the couch?" I know that there are going to be many more wives, like me, who will show it to their husbands too! Job well done!
reply by the author on 25-Oct-2011
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I thought this poem was hysterical! I was laughing out loud throughout this entire piece of excellent work! Wonderful cadence of rhymes caring the reader quickly from one funny verse to the other. I am so showing this to my husband, who constantly asks, " Why are you sleeping on the couch?" I know that there are going to be many more wives, like me, who will show it to their husbands too! Job well done!
Comment Written 25-Oct-2011
reply by the author on 25-Oct-2011
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There certainly has been, in fact I'm bowled over with the lovely, light hearted responses I've received for this very basic poem! (one person took it seriously, and was not amused!)
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Always remember it takes brains to have a sense of humor! I would love to see more of your talent. Blessings to you and yours, Teresa
Comment from stephybs
Ha ha ha I bet that could be said of a awful lot of women's feelings on their partners!. This is a real good write on something I wouldn't be brave enough to try! Although once I wrote similar, though it hides undiscovered in an old book somewhere!. Great work!, Stephanie
reply by the author on 25-Oct-2011
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Ha ha ha I bet that could be said of a awful lot of women's feelings on their partners!. This is a real good write on something I wouldn't be brave enough to try! Although once I wrote similar, though it hides undiscovered in an old book somewhere!. Great work!, Stephanie
Comment Written 25-Oct-2011
reply by the author on 25-Oct-2011
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Thank you! Funnily enough, it's been mostly women who have responded except for a chap who has never posted anything before who gave it a 3 and basically told me it was a load of rubbish!...I hope his partner reads the poem...
Comment from justjo66
Made me laugh. Sounds like someone I know. :O)
Nice flow and rhythmn to your piece. I like
the rhymning, too.
Hope you get some sleep. :o)
Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 25-Oct-2011
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Made me laugh. Sounds like someone I know. :O)
Nice flow and rhythmn to your piece. I like
the rhymning, too.
Hope you get some sleep. :o)
Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 25-Oct-2011
reply by the author on 25-Oct-2011
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Thank you. It would seem, according to the hilarious responses, that the poem struck a few chords!
Comment from Dave Sargeant
Alexis, what a lovely piece of humour and enduring love. We have all done it, all experienced it. Love is lasting, or should be,the things you write about fade away.
Dave.
reply by the author on 25-Oct-2011
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Alexis, what a lovely piece of humour and enduring love. We have all done it, all experienced it. Love is lasting, or should be,the things you write about fade away.
Dave.
Comment Written 25-Oct-2011
reply by the author on 25-Oct-2011
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Thank you so much for your lovely review! I'm so glad you enjoyed my little bit of fun!
Comment from jaded831
Your poem set a light mood for the entire day. Your poem flowed well, rhymed well, started up one way and ended another except for the last line, that tied the whole poem together.
reply by the author on 26-Oct-2011
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Your poem set a light mood for the entire day. Your poem flowed well, rhymed well, started up one way and ended another except for the last line, that tied the whole poem together.
Comment Written 25-Oct-2011
reply by the author on 26-Oct-2011
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Thank you! I just wanted to impart some raw humour for a change! (been writing a lot of heavy stuff in my books!)
Comment from Augustusprime
There are sincere elements of the poem that allow the reader feel the woman's desperation. You can imagine her thinking how did I get trapped like this, am I happy. Howevere the hackneyed approach of ryhmning poetry sucks the life out of the poem and leaves it's lying in the wet street next to an old used limmerick.
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reply by the author on 25-Oct-2011
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There are sincere elements of the poem that allow the reader feel the woman's desperation. You can imagine her thinking how did I get trapped like this, am I happy. Howevere the hackneyed approach of ryhmning poetry sucks the life out of the poem and leaves it's lying in the wet street next to an old used limmerick.
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Comment Written 25-Oct-2011
reply by the author on 25-Oct-2011
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Thank you for your kind review
Comment from Charlie Crewes
Your title forced me to read this and I admit I was amused by it. I especially liked the last two lines, but the entire work was clever and I would not be concerned about offending anyone. We are all humans and let's have some fun at times with our writing. I thought it was a fun piece!
reply by the author on 26-Oct-2011
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Your title forced me to read this and I admit I was amused by it. I especially liked the last two lines, but the entire work was clever and I would not be concerned about offending anyone. We are all humans and let's have some fun at times with our writing. I thought it was a fun piece!
Comment Written 25-Oct-2011
reply by the author on 26-Oct-2011
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Managed to only offend one, thank goodness! Thank you so much for your lovely review.
Comment from peggles
Such a fun read
Certainly made my day
What a fantastic poem
It was fun, it rhymed and in a strange way romantic for all your gripes the love shows
It was beautifully balanced
I thought the last line was priceless
reply by the author on 26-Oct-2011
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Such a fun read
Certainly made my day
What a fantastic poem
It was fun, it rhymed and in a strange way romantic for all your gripes the love shows
It was beautifully balanced
I thought the last line was priceless
Comment Written 25-Oct-2011
reply by the author on 26-Oct-2011
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Thank you so much. You have managed to pick up on the main point (apart from the laughter!) For all their faults, we still love them!
Comment from gypsynet
now, does laughing gas cause farting??.. so funny and full of wit from beginnin gto end.. decripyions are charmingly icky but okay as the medium is the message.. an originak theme with fine rhymes.. still in stitches!
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reply by the author on 26-Oct-2011
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now, does laughing gas cause farting??.. so funny and full of wit from beginnin gto end.. decripyions are charmingly icky but okay as the medium is the message.. an originak theme with fine rhymes.. still in stitches!
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Comment Written 25-Oct-2011
reply by the author on 26-Oct-2011
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It's been a pleasure to give people a good laugh! Thank you so much for your kind review!
