I can't stand you farting!
Only to be read if you have a sense of humour!30 total reviews
Comment from Tonulak
I think all of our wives/significant others have felt that way about their men at one time or another. But being comfortable enough to fart in front of another should be part of the engagement ritual:) Very funny, and sadly, probably oh so true.
reply by the author on 28-Oct-2011
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I think all of our wives/significant others have felt that way about their men at one time or another. But being comfortable enough to fart in front of another should be part of the engagement ritual:) Very funny, and sadly, probably oh so true.
Comment Written 27-Oct-2011
reply by the author on 28-Oct-2011
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Now there's a thought...I think I feel a poem coming on....
Comment from spellbound
Oh how some things bother us. I really like the fact that, even with the bother, there is still attachment. So many leave because the bothersome things they overlooked before, didn't go away with their union.
Nice flow, rhyme and rhythm.
Yes, I chuckled.
reply by the author on 28-Oct-2011
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Oh how some things bother us. I really like the fact that, even with the bother, there is still attachment. So many leave because the bothersome things they overlooked before, didn't go away with their union.
Nice flow, rhyme and rhythm.
Yes, I chuckled.
Comment Written 27-Oct-2011
reply by the author on 28-Oct-2011
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I'm so glad you enjoyed it! It's so good to know that so many people on Fan story have a great sense of humour. Many thanks for your lovely review.
Comment from Kingsland
This poem was very humorous. My ex let me know in no uncertain terms when I was smelling up the bed room. I cannot blame her for telling me that I stink. For what it is, is what it is. I really enjoyed reading this most humorous piece of poetic art... John
reply by the author on 28-Oct-2011
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This poem was very humorous. My ex let me know in no uncertain terms when I was smelling up the bed room. I cannot blame her for telling me that I stink. For what it is, is what it is. I really enjoyed reading this most humorous piece of poetic art... John
Comment Written 27-Oct-2011
reply by the author on 28-Oct-2011
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Thank you John, It's been nice to bring a smile to a few faces!
Comment from Maureen's Pen
Oh my how I laughed at this one......
I may get my husband and son to read this one. Not that it will do any good.
This had great rhyming and flowing lines.
Had me in stitches most of the time.
Well done!
Thanks for sharing the laughs.
Maureen
reply by the author on 28-Oct-2011
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Oh my how I laughed at this one......
I may get my husband and son to read this one. Not that it will do any good.
This had great rhyming and flowing lines.
Had me in stitches most of the time.
Well done!
Thanks for sharing the laughs.
Maureen
Comment Written 27-Oct-2011
reply by the author on 28-Oct-2011
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I think it's been shown to a few husbands, from what I have read in the reviews! Just as well I forgave my husband in the poem, or I might have got some hate mail!
Comment from adewpearl
Good use of rhyming couplets in this humorous poem of complaint.
The guy farts, snorts and steals the covers - sounds like a couple who need to discuss separate bedrooms. LOL
good alliteration in seeds that you sow
Fun ending when the speaker declares her love despite all the nighttime problems LOL Brooke :-)
reply by the author on 28-Oct-2011
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Good use of rhyming couplets in this humorous poem of complaint.
The guy farts, snorts and steals the covers - sounds like a couple who need to discuss separate bedrooms. LOL
good alliteration in seeds that you sow
Fun ending when the speaker declares her love despite all the nighttime problems LOL Brooke :-)
Comment Written 27-Oct-2011
reply by the author on 28-Oct-2011
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I'm so glad that you enjoyed it! Many thanks for your lovely review.
Comment from Piggies Grandma
I know exactly what you mean, alexis. It must be a guy thing..lol. I enjoyed reading your poem. It was cleverly written and well thought out. My husband has made the springs in our bed boing with his farts, they are that heavy.
reply by the author on 27-Oct-2011
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I know exactly what you mean, alexis. It must be a guy thing..lol. I enjoyed reading your poem. It was cleverly written and well thought out. My husband has made the springs in our bed boing with his farts, they are that heavy.
Comment Written 26-Oct-2011
reply by the author on 27-Oct-2011
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This seems to have struck a cord with a few people, especially women! Thank you so much for your lovely review.
Comment from rwilliam
HAHAHAHAHHA this is HILARIOUS!!!! :-D
You did a great job writing this. It flowed very well and had a great rhythm to it!
Wonderful read! Thanks for the laugh. I think a lot of people will be able to relate ti this! ( unfortunately) LOL
reply by the author on 26-Oct-2011
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HAHAHAHAHHA this is HILARIOUS!!!! :-D
You did a great job writing this. It flowed very well and had a great rhythm to it!
Wonderful read! Thanks for the laugh. I think a lot of people will be able to relate ti this! ( unfortunately) LOL
Comment Written 25-Oct-2011
reply by the author on 26-Oct-2011
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I'm so glad you enjoyed it!
Comment from Ronnilynn82
This made me chuckle. I think it is well done and probably expresses the same feelings of many woman and men with their gassy partners. It definitely reminds me of my boyfriend.
reply by the author on 26-Oct-2011
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This made me chuckle. I think it is well done and probably expresses the same feelings of many woman and men with their gassy partners. It definitely reminds me of my boyfriend.
Comment Written 25-Oct-2011
reply by the author on 26-Oct-2011
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Like wise with a few others! Thank you for your lovely review.
Comment from Van
haha... What does the offender do if he doesn't know he's offending? There is a point where the two are at an impass. She doesn't deserve to loose much needed sleep and he has no control over what happens after he's fallen asleep.
If she wakes him to stop the offense, then he gets no sleep because she's not getting any sleep.
Maybe two different rooms is the answer.
Nice submission.
Content: excellent...real life stuff
Flow: very good
Mechanics: very good
reply by the author on 25-Oct-2011
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haha... What does the offender do if he doesn't know he's offending? There is a point where the two are at an impass. She doesn't deserve to loose much needed sleep and he has no control over what happens after he's fallen asleep.
If she wakes him to stop the offense, then he gets no sleep because she's not getting any sleep.
Maybe two different rooms is the answer.
Nice submission.
Content: excellent...real life stuff
Flow: very good
Mechanics: very good
Comment Written 25-Oct-2011
reply by the author on 25-Oct-2011
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My point exactly! How can you get cross, when they don't even know that their doing it! Thank you so much for your lovely review.
Comment from ephraim crud, COS.
Hi Alexis!
haha, i like this, muchly!
very well thought and penned.
i've a couple of suggestions
for you to use or not as you see fit:
S2,L4: omit 'that'
To allow me to sleep while you do the things (that) you do.
S3,L4: add a comma to end of L3 and omit 'and'
(And) there are few who'd endure it, it's got to be said.
S4,L2: omit 'that'
The offence (that) you're causing, and the seeds that you sow
S5,L4: change 'the' for 'my' and omit 'i have'
Unlike (my) feelings (I have), when you hit the sack!
thank you for sharing. whoop-whoop!
warmly, xx, eph.
reply by the author on 25-Oct-2011
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Hi Alexis!
haha, i like this, muchly!
very well thought and penned.
i've a couple of suggestions
for you to use or not as you see fit:
S2,L4: omit 'that'
To allow me to sleep while you do the things (that) you do.
S3,L4: add a comma to end of L3 and omit 'and'
(And) there are few who'd endure it, it's got to be said.
S4,L2: omit 'that'
The offence (that) you're causing, and the seeds that you sow
S5,L4: change 'the' for 'my' and omit 'i have'
Unlike (my) feelings (I have), when you hit the sack!
thank you for sharing. whoop-whoop!
warmly, xx, eph.
Comment Written 25-Oct-2011
reply by the author on 25-Oct-2011
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Fantastic advice, which I happily followed! I'm so glad you enjoyed the poem!
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you're most welcome, Alexis. warmly, xx, eph.
