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Turn the Page

Poem with specific word list

16 total reviews 
Comment from TammyGail
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This was a great poem
Interesting word list
You did very well with it
Loved your imagery
Your poem was well written
Good luck in the contest

 Comment Written 30-Oct-2011

reply by the author on 31-Oct-2011
    Thank you for your kind review. I had never used a word list before. I found it a challenge and fun at the same time. I appreciate your review.
Comment from Magics02
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Great memories in this write and love the picture of the piano also. I know about the family reunions they are great! The memories will never fade. Best of wishes

Blessings

 Comment Written 30-Oct-2011

reply by the author on 31-Oct-2011
    Thank you for your generous review of my poem. I am glad you enjoyed the memories.
reply by Magics02 on 01-Nov-2011
    You are so welcome
Comment from Piggies Grandma
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I enjoyed reading your poem very much, justjo. It is cleverly written and very well thought out. It sounds like your family get togethers are a lot of fun.

 Comment Written 27-Oct-2011

reply by the author on 27-Oct-2011
    Thank you for your kind review of my poem. I am glad you enjoyed it.
Comment from judy corcoran
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'So much like a fine bordeaux
Made only finer with age
All for me to enjoy, turn the page'
love this finish

what do you mean by
'Aunt Annette is the eighth' ??

and
'Large caring women in the kitchen talking about faith'
is a little chumky
- perhaps you could cull it? - i know it holds three of your words. but truly, the rhythm is lost badly here....

a suggestion - make the piano large
- 'an ancient large piano'
and then
'caring women in the kitchen talking about faith' ??

best of luck in the contest
love judy

ps - oh duh - re aunt annette - i just read your author's notes :)

 Comment Written 26-Oct-2011

reply by the author on 26-Oct-2011
    Thank you for your kind review. Yes, I struggled with that verse. :o) I knew it sounded and felt off kilter but was trying to make all my words fit. I will take your suggestions to heart and make revisions.
Comment from mumsyone
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Good job using all the mandatory words and coming up with a good poem about your memories.

Destiny,(no comma) has given me this gift
Bar-B-que (Bar-b-que or Barbecue) and bees

 Comment Written 26-Oct-2011

reply by the author on 26-Oct-2011
    Thanks for the kind review. I appreciate the corrections. I will make them right away. :o)
Comment from Maxxx
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i love this! vivid picture from your past...how it must warm your heart! to be from a loving family that gave you such endearing memories to comfort you throughout your life. love this: "A moment from my family long ago So much like a fine bordeaux Made only finer with age.."
and the two parts describing the barbque..perfect! i can almost hear the bees, feel the loving arms of your family. wonderful!

 Comment Written 26-Oct-2011

reply by the author on 26-Oct-2011
    Thank you for the kind review of my poem and memories. I am glad you liked it.
Comment from ScarletClearwater
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Thank you for the author notes, or the "eighth" would've been lost on me a bit. I like your recollection. You chose pieces of the reunion that were very different and each relayed their own spice. Great job. Good luck!

 Comment Written 26-Oct-2011

reply by the author on 26-Oct-2011
    Thank you for the kind review. Yes, I niggled that line around in my brain for awhile. :o) What I won't do to make a rhyme. LOL.
    I knew I would have to explain in my notes. Glad you read them. :o)
Comment from ExperiencingLiphe
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Do we ever figure out what we have this gift? I don't know if we do or not. I loved your poem and how you made it rhyme and flow. Good luck in the contest

 Comment Written 26-Oct-2011

reply by the author on 26-Oct-2011
    Thank you for your kind review. I am glad you liked my poem.
Comment from MAMONIA
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You did a wonderful work here using the
contest challenge. It has a very beautiful
message of memories and family love.
I like the way you use the imagery and
description and I feel that the poem
flowed rhythmically.
Best of luck to you in the contest.
Marie

 Comment Written 25-Oct-2011

reply by the author on 26-Oct-2011
    Thank you Marie for your well wishes for the contest. I am glad you enjoyed my poem. Thank you for the stars.
Comment from dbmccarter
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This could be one of my memories of a family reunion. Many are gone now but the memories are worth all the gold in the world. Very heart warming. Great photo.

 Comment Written 25-Oct-2011

reply by the author on 26-Oct-2011
    Thank you for your kind review and stars. I am glad you liked my poem.